O' Holy Night, Beyond that Door
a check on reality35 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
Jimi, WOW!! and WOW!! Just brilliant my friend, now that one touches the heart and stirs the emotions exceptional piece of writing friend, reality is a bitter pill to swallow for some but no matter how deep one buries there head in the sand it is still there and man is to blame and he will NEVER change, it's what we do and that is the saddest truth of all, I love that you took Hymn weaved your magic and produced a stunning poem, only you Jimi, only you!
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Jimi, WOW!! and WOW!! Just brilliant my friend, now that one touches the heart and stirs the emotions exceptional piece of writing friend, reality is a bitter pill to swallow for some but no matter how deep one buries there head in the sand it is still there and man is to blame and he will NEVER change, it's what we do and that is the saddest truth of all, I love that you took Hymn weaved your magic and produced a stunning poem, only you Jimi, only you!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
Comment from findingmyroom
This unfortunately will be the scene for thousands of troops at Christmas. I like this line in particular, with the double meaning of "muster" :
The song keeps playing as we try to muster a smile
Excellent poem; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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This unfortunately will be the scene for thousands of troops at Christmas. I like this line in particular, with the double meaning of "muster" :
The song keeps playing as we try to muster a smile
Excellent poem; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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findingmyroom, thank you so very very much for stopping by to read and review my offering. Yes I do not like the owrd muster too. It was originally garner a smile, but a reviewer suggested muster and so I changed it. again thank you so much.. jlsavell
Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your entry in the Holiday Poetry contest. What a graphic painting! I liked the way that you wove reality with the traditional song of Christmas. Christmas is a time of caring and families etc - what about the other side? Those brave men in foreign lands, no mother or father to hold them, cradling an AK47 instead of their children. Well done poet friend.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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Good luck with your entry in the Holiday Poetry contest. What a graphic painting! I liked the way that you wove reality with the traditional song of Christmas. Christmas is a time of caring and families etc - what about the other side? Those brave men in foreign lands, no mother or father to hold them, cradling an AK47 instead of their children. Well done poet friend.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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Aussie, girl, sometimes I think you are just too kind. Your loving spirit spills forth in all your reviews and your work. I am so fortunate to have a friend like you..again thank you so very very much...jimi
Comment from RADIO
Very powerful words that grab
the heart and squeeze with the
sad reality of this truth. On and
on it goes and I fear that somewhere
there will always be a war.
Coincidence...we both seem to have posted
O Holy night at the same time.
Radio
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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Very powerful words that grab
the heart and squeeze with the
sad reality of this truth. On and
on it goes and I fear that somewhere
there will always be a war.
Coincidence...we both seem to have posted
O Holy night at the same time.
Radio
Comment Written 15-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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Radio, thank you so very much for stopping by. Yes it is funny how we were inspired by the same title. again thank you so very very much. jlsavell
Comment from amel
Dear JL Savell,
Oooh that was so touching since the very first time
I saw the picture and the title.They were completely matched each other. I could grab the very sad and lonely feelings in the soldiers hearts. I sat with tears in my eyes reading this poem. Thank you for sharing me this very touching poem.
warmly, amel.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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Dear JL Savell,
Oooh that was so touching since the very first time
I saw the picture and the title.They were completely matched each other. I could grab the very sad and lonely feelings in the soldiers hearts. I sat with tears in my eyes reading this poem. Thank you for sharing me this very touching poem.
warmly, amel.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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amel, once again I must thnak you. I also need to thank you for becoming my fan. I have not been on the iste too much since October. I hope that i can catch up on reviews and reviewing and look into your portfolio. again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
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You are welcome my encouraging friend. I am a very new comer here. So many things to learn. But I enjoy very much this site and it is a blessing to meet you Jlsavell. warmly, amel
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ou are welcome jlsavell. warmly, amel
Comment from NightWriter
"O' Holy Night, Beyond that Door" is a beautifully written and stated poem. There is always the hope for peace and the sooner the better. There is too much hate. Perfectly written with good rhythm and rhyme throughout.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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"O' Holy Night, Beyond that Door" is a beautifully written and stated poem. There is always the hope for peace and the sooner the better. There is too much hate. Perfectly written with good rhythm and rhyme throughout.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2009
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NightWriter, How are yuo doing? I am quite anxious to get back to Stan. I have been away for awhile. again thank you so very much friend..jimi
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Hi Jimi. I'm doing well, how are you? How's Fata? Hopefully, I will have my book finished soon, then can start the fun editing. :)
Steve
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Steve, I am doing well, other than being extremely busy with the everyday happenstance of life. As you know I have been off the site for a while..each year I think, I have to leave,,I cannot keep up.but then i would be leaving such great friends and talent like you. Are you going to try and publish this Book. Fata..well I just do not know..I think I should start on on The Counts story..everyone has forgotten about her but you and Hitcher!!!
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Don't leave! OMG, no! You bring such warmth, appreciation and talent to FanStory. Besides that, being here reminds you of Fata and your love for writing. :) What's a dream worth? It's hard to put a value on something like that, isn't it? And you're so talented too.
I do plan to publish this, although I'm going to try the agent route. Self publishing will be the last step, and even that will come after spending $$$ getting professional help with the editing. That's only if I self publish. If I get lucky and get an agent, then I'll listen to their advice. The end goal is to turn this into a screenplay. We'll see. It's already a huge success because writing this has been so much fun. Partly because of the great feedback and part because I was immersed in the incredible world of Stan. The ending will be fantastic if I can get down on paper what I see.
Happy Holidays! :)
Comment from anne1204
I think this is the best poetry I have read on this site. I was amazed at the way you intertwined the Christmas Hymn into your own words. This was great writing. Anne 1204
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I think this is the best poetry I have read on this site. I was amazed at the way you intertwined the Christmas Hymn into your own words. This was great writing. Anne 1204
Comment Written 14-Dec-2009
Comment from Nanny 6
Your poem magnificently portrays what our troops most undoubtedly feel. I enjoyed the way you tied Christmas carols into the thros of war. Well done! Judy
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Your poem magnificently portrays what our troops most undoubtedly feel. I enjoyed the way you tied Christmas carols into the thros of war. Well done! Judy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
This was wonderful. There's nothing so conflicting as being a soldier and having to deal with those feeling, the killing and the hate, versus love. Well said here, I hope they all come home soon. Great job.
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This was wonderful. There's nothing so conflicting as being a soldier and having to deal with those feeling, the killing and the hate, versus love. Well said here, I hope they all come home soon. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2009
Comment from Soulester
Excellent job! "But, as soldiers, we pray for His peace beyond that door" really gets to me. It's not just soldiers who are praying that (again!) this year, is it? Your poem takes the trite out of Peace on Earth, Good Will to Men. I really like the way you conveyed your message by incorporating lines from famous hymns. Excellent!
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Excellent job! "But, as soldiers, we pray for His peace beyond that door" really gets to me. It's not just soldiers who are praying that (again!) this year, is it? Your poem takes the trite out of Peace on Earth, Good Will to Men. I really like the way you conveyed your message by incorporating lines from famous hymns. Excellent!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2009
