Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Your turn with the Soap"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from volunteer angel
It's best to think before we speak when it comes to our partners in life. One cross word leads to another and then another as well. As far as answering "No" with a "yes", it depends on whether we want to not shake the boat and tell our true feelings. Great poem to make one think about life and its ups and downs. V.A.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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It's best to think before we speak when it comes to our partners in life. One cross word leads to another and then another as well. As far as answering "No" with a "yes", it depends on whether we want to not shake the boat and tell our true feelings. Great poem to make one think about life and its ups and downs. V.A.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review and comments
Comment from spellbound
Very thought provoking piece.
When is a lie truly acceptable?
What to do? 'Remember when asked the question, what will you do?'
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Very thought provoking piece.
When is a lie truly acceptable?
What to do? 'Remember when asked the question, what will you do?'
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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your welcome spellbound thanks for the review
Comment from zoocq
You tackle some of life's most difficult questions with such insight. Is the truth better than the lie? Does it count if the truth will cause such dreadful hurt? Pondering...pondering...
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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You tackle some of life's most difficult questions with such insight. Is the truth better than the lie? Does it count if the truth will cause such dreadful hurt? Pondering...pondering...
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you Zoo for your eview
Comment from Donovan
Nothing wrong with telling the truth. The Truth is the answer and lies are the one defining characteristic of Old Scratch. Always good subject matter, seek for originality in presentation.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Nothing wrong with telling the truth. The Truth is the answer and lies are the one defining characteristic of Old Scratch. Always good subject matter, seek for originality in presentation.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thanks for the review Donovan
Comment from evolove
How would you answer, no with yes? And regret the lie to please?
White lies, Big lies, Small lies, Untrue, where will this all lead?
Soap for children, and what is for adults, for me it's gasoline, isn't, very nice poem and very powerful, cingratulation
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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How would you answer, no with yes? And regret the lie to please?
White lies, Big lies, Small lies, Untrue, where will this all lead?
Soap for children, and what is for adults, for me it's gasoline, isn't, very nice poem and very powerful, cingratulation
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading evolove
Comment from sopranodebs
You really like to hit it out of the park. Another home run for me, I really like this one also. Specifically "What is it for adults, to wash away tears and pain we hide?" I think ours are washed away with booze, drugs and infidelity either with another or by yourself. Society has taught us that to be vulnerable, you will be stepped on, so we learn to put up fronts,unfortunately we have also learnt to take it home with us. Thank you for sharing your piece with us.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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You really like to hit it out of the park. Another home run for me, I really like this one also. Specifically "What is it for adults, to wash away tears and pain we hide?" I think ours are washed away with booze, drugs and infidelity either with another or by yourself. Society has taught us that to be vulnerable, you will be stepped on, so we learn to put up fronts,unfortunately we have also learnt to take it home with us. Thank you for sharing your piece with us.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you sopranodebs
Comment from debskatz
Hey deepwater,
Have you been recently divorced or something? You sound a bit cynical & the two I've read of yours are about a marriad couple.
You talk about lying to please your spouse. Then at the end you ask if we're all God's children and ask what will the reader say if I am asked that question. Huh???
You don't have a set rhyme scheme, yet it rhymes too much to be free verse. Have you ever tried to write a poem in a definate format, like a sonnet or quartrain? I think it would help if you did.
Anyway, just my opinion. Good luck with it.
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Hey deepwater,
Have you been recently divorced or something? You sound a bit cynical & the two I've read of yours are about a marriad couple.
You talk about lying to please your spouse. Then at the end you ask if we're all God's children and ask what will the reader say if I am asked that question. Huh???
You don't have a set rhyme scheme, yet it rhymes too much to be free verse. Have you ever tried to write a poem in a definate format, like a sonnet or quartrain? I think it would help if you did.
Anyway, just my opinion. Good luck with it.
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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just your opinion
Comment from chocoletdrop052
Old school punishment, but makes perfect sense. Can we speak the unspoken words, will be spoken if indeed, the
time prevails into a situation. It is the little jesture that give the whole picture.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Old school punishment, but makes perfect sense. Can we speak the unspoken words, will be spoken if indeed, the
time prevails into a situation. It is the little jesture that give the whole picture.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you for your review
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Your very welcome Gary, it was my pleasure
Comment from SecretSquirrel
I like this from the way it deals with inner thoughts and feelings, and then the way we go with things on the outside when we talk to others, and get along with them. It has some nice rhymes and soft endings that work well. It has some word breaks to get the pentameter correct, and I found some of these to be a bit halting. The summary could be a little better to chime more with the first sentence that clearly defines the theme of the poem. Still, it is pretty good and a nice insight expressed clearly and well.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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I like this from the way it deals with inner thoughts and feelings, and then the way we go with things on the outside when we talk to others, and get along with them. It has some nice rhymes and soft endings that work well. It has some word breaks to get the pentameter correct, and I found some of these to be a bit halting. The summary could be a little better to chime more with the first sentence that clearly defines the theme of the poem. Still, it is pretty good and a nice insight expressed clearly and well.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review and comments
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Wow!
This is good.
I can see why it is an all time best
Great questions.
Wonderful message.
Good title.
I like the image too.
flows well.
Interesting.
Yes, soap was the punishment for children.
I like your first line and your last 2 lines the best, though I like all of them.
Great job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Wow!
This is good.
I can see why it is an all time best
Great questions.
Wonderful message.
Good title.
I like the image too.
flows well.
Interesting.
Yes, soap was the punishment for children.
I like your first line and your last 2 lines the best, though I like all of them.
Great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you Kathryn for the review
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you're welcome.
kathryn
