Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "The promise given"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from KC Frantzen
I REALLY liked this. Perhaps it is because there was a Swedish royal wedding today and I was in the mood but...
I really did!
It's hard to pick a fave line but this would be right up there: The mind, wins with strength of truth, or loses with judgments and lies.
I enjoyed reading about your life. Nice John Deere!
Keep writing!
I've been away from FS for awhile. Finally got my WIP to a writing coach to hopefully take me to a publishable level. Just posted today about one of the characters in my middle grade adventure.
Stop by if you have time and inclination! Love to have your commentary. I so admire poets. You say so much with so few words. I need to learn this!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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I REALLY liked this. Perhaps it is because there was a Swedish royal wedding today and I was in the mood but...
I really did!
It's hard to pick a fave line but this would be right up there: The mind, wins with strength of truth, or loses with judgments and lies.
I enjoyed reading about your life. Nice John Deere!
Keep writing!
I've been away from FS for awhile. Finally got my WIP to a writing coach to hopefully take me to a publishable level. Just posted today about one of the characters in my middle grade adventure.
Stop by if you have time and inclination! Love to have your commentary. I so admire poets. You say so much with so few words. I need to learn this!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you KC i will come see and thank you for the review
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thanks! and most definitely. I'm enjoying your work
Comment from volunteer angel
In marriage we do give all of ourselves to our partner. True that with some, there is discontent in heart and soul.
When God is present in the home, peace and contentment is the rule. Great poem! V.A.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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In marriage we do give all of ourselves to our partner. True that with some, there is discontent in heart and soul.
When God is present in the home, peace and contentment is the rule. Great poem! V.A.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thanks agin for reading this angel
Comment from Just2Write
This poem is has a good grasp on philosophy of life and delivers some much needed wisdom for today's world. I liked the idea of your poems and the way you put so much thought into it. Rose.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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This poem is has a good grasp on philosophy of life and delivers some much needed wisdom for today's world. I liked the idea of your poems and the way you put so much thought into it. Rose.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you Rose for the review and comments
Comment from FREE-ONE
Now-I'm looking at your picture DEEPWATER riding high and asking myself how you have time to write such beautiful poetry while doing all of your farm work(LOL)-this was just beautiful and so heartfelt-you have many great lines and my favorites are these:
The mind, wins with strength of truth, or loses with judgments and lies.
The soul, the ellusive butterfly so frail without the heart and mind,
The temple, your body is given freely in love, or taken in whim or revenge.
The eyes, the inner window giving lightness to the spirit
The hands, earthly importance helps to carry your compassion in life
I like this alot and have to get over here more often to see what that Deepwater is up too...Free
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Now-I'm looking at your picture DEEPWATER riding high and asking myself how you have time to write such beautiful poetry while doing all of your farm work(LOL)-this was just beautiful and so heartfelt-you have many great lines and my favorites are these:
The mind, wins with strength of truth, or loses with judgments and lies.
The soul, the ellusive butterfly so frail without the heart and mind,
The temple, your body is given freely in love, or taken in whim or revenge.
The eyes, the inner window giving lightness to the spirit
The hands, earthly importance helps to carry your compassion in life
I like this alot and have to get over here more often to see what that Deepwater is up too...Free
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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lol riversa thank you for your comments and the review
Comment from spellbound
I have been so busy, I've not had time to read. I've missed your poetry.
This is a very inspirational piece. I'm glad it was one of the first things I've read today.
This line confused me, even after reading through the first time: 'The heart, can be given, a new eclipse in life, but is lost with discontent.' Seemed to me this doesn't fit the rest of this beautiful piece.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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I have been so busy, I've not had time to read. I've missed your poetry.
This is a very inspirational piece. I'm glad it was one of the first things I've read today.
This line confused me, even after reading through the first time: 'The heart, can be given, a new eclipse in life, but is lost with discontent.' Seemed to me this doesn't fit the rest of this beautiful piece.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thanks for the comments spell still have some work to do Gary
Comment from zoocq
Thsi is a beautiful poem written with such emotion and honoring the flip-side of life. The constant battles, decisions and marvels and sadness of this life! So well written. Thank you!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Thsi is a beautiful poem written with such emotion and honoring the flip-side of life. The constant battles, decisions and marvels and sadness of this life! So well written. Thank you!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thanks again for reading myfriend
Comment from Vickstarxx
Hi, I really enjoyed this insightful poem and the style you adopted which lends itself to the message well. I am looking forward to reading further chapters. Thanks, Vicki
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Hi, I really enjoyed this insightful poem and the style you adopted which lends itself to the message well. I am looking forward to reading further chapters. Thanks, Vicki
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you Vicki
Comment from Eternal Muse
There are a lot of spiritual truths in this poem; spiritual statements of faith never turn to cliches. I felt like opening a Chinese cookie with a wisdom within (smile) when reading this. I will bookmark this after I finish; and refer to it at different stages of my life when I need wisdom and prayer.
A beautiful picture (biographical, I suppose).
My favorite:
The soul, the ellusive butterfly so frail without the heart and mind,
Nicely done, thank you so much for sharing this.
Love and hugs, Y.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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There are a lot of spiritual truths in this poem; spiritual statements of faith never turn to cliches. I felt like opening a Chinese cookie with a wisdom within (smile) when reading this. I will bookmark this after I finish; and refer to it at different stages of my life when I need wisdom and prayer.
A beautiful picture (biographical, I suppose).
My favorite:
The soul, the ellusive butterfly so frail without the heart and mind,
Nicely done, thank you so much for sharing this.
Love and hugs, Y.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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welcome and thanks for the review
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Interesting story of love romance,I thought this was heartfelt, I also thought it was inspirational and full of wisdom, it was easy to read and easy to understand I think your message was conveyed and very effective. Well done no errors of mistakes Alexander
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Interesting story of love romance,I thought this was heartfelt, I also thought it was inspirational and full of wisdom, it was easy to read and easy to understand I think your message was conveyed and very effective. Well done no errors of mistakes Alexander
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you Alexander for your welcome review
Comment from Donovan
Not bad. I think the metaphor of the body and how we use it is pretty well worn as subject matter so it is really important to have some different descriptions or it because like so many others. Nevertheless, I like this.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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Not bad. I think the metaphor of the body and how we use it is pretty well worn as subject matter so it is really important to have some different descriptions or it because like so many others. Nevertheless, I like this.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2010
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thank you again for reading
