Storytime
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Squashy Red Tomatoes"A book full of story poems
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a nice little poem about tomatoes and the fun you could have with them. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a nice little poem about tomatoes and the fun you could have with them. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 10-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thanks so much for the kind review, sweetwoodjax. Glad you liked :)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is such a cute story, with food as the central stars, and a clever surprise ending. And I found so interesting the British expressions scattered throughout ("pop and see the neighbors"; pip; Mum). Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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This is such a cute story, with food as the central stars, and a clever surprise ending. And I found so interesting the British expressions scattered throughout ("pop and see the neighbors"; pip; Mum). Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you very much, Jeanie Mercer, for reading and reviewing and the nice wishes! :)
Comment from fionageorge
Wow, you have certainly put some work into this very long but entertaining ripe tomato saga. What would we do without having a fight or two with our brother or sister. Love the free verse presentation, and the surprise birthday.
Good luck in the contest and warmest regards,
Marijke
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Wow, you have certainly put some work into this very long but entertaining ripe tomato saga. What would we do without having a fight or two with our brother or sister. Love the free verse presentation, and the surprise birthday.
Good luck in the contest and warmest regards,
Marijke
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, much appreciated. Glad you found it entertaining! :)
Comment from Ash Madox
Excellent free verse poetry for this contest--and so quickly, with so little time to pen it. Impressive. Thoroughly enjoyed the romp with a thread of intrigue for the fun of it. A complete story. I really enjoyed the way you showed all the personalities, the events, and the grand finish in the kid's tone for the perfect shot in sis's eye. Very clever, creative and wonderfully done. Hope this does well. Good luck in the contest. Cheers. Ash.
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Excellent free verse poetry for this contest--and so quickly, with so little time to pen it. Impressive. Thoroughly enjoyed the romp with a thread of intrigue for the fun of it. A complete story. I really enjoyed the way you showed all the personalities, the events, and the grand finish in the kid's tone for the perfect shot in sis's eye. Very clever, creative and wonderfully done. Hope this does well. Good luck in the contest. Cheers. Ash.
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Yes it was a huge squeeze to get it written in the time, but the story just flowed so I was lucky! Thank you so much for the incredibly encouraging review!! :)
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is really cute. It is descriptive and expressive which makes for an interesting read. It reads more like a story poem to me. I really like it a lot. I laughed so hard at what Timmy does with his food. I remember my six kids when they were small. They would make faces with their hot dogs or baked potatoes. They would stick faces on them with toothpicks and make them talk. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
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This is really cute. It is descriptive and expressive which makes for an interesting read. It reads more like a story poem to me. I really like it a lot. I laughed so hard at what Timmy does with his food. I remember my six kids when they were small. They would make faces with their hot dogs or baked potatoes. They would stick faces on them with toothpicks and make them talk. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
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Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thanks so much for this great review, I really appreciate it!
Kids can be so funny sometimes, the things they do and say!
Thanks again :)
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You are very welcome. You are so right. If we could only capture all those funny moments. Have a blessed week. Marilyn
Comment from samandlancelot
Very cute story about Timmy's adventure preparing his own birthday dinner and collecting his presents. How satisfying that he still got to squirt the pips of his jucy ripe squashy red tomato in his sister's eye. Enjoyable read!
Patricia
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Very cute story about Timmy's adventure preparing his own birthday dinner and collecting his presents. How satisfying that he still got to squirt the pips of his jucy ripe squashy red tomato in his sister's eye. Enjoyable read!
Patricia
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Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 10-May-2010
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Thank you so much Patricia, for reading and reviewing, and for the lovely comments :)
