An Invitation
inspired by a writing prompt68 total reviews
Comment from stephenie khan
really wonderful poem...i wish that i couldwrite like this...i write relious poems as well...i want to bookmart this...i wish that i could read over and over again
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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really wonderful poem...i wish that i couldwrite like this...i write relious poems as well...i want to bookmart this...i wish that i could read over and over again
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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stephanie khan, once again thank you so very much!!! jlsavell
Comment from Fireshadow
jlsavell, congratulations ! Outstanding writing with such vivid imagery. Your stanzas flow smoothly, with a very rhythmic cadence and well structured rhyme scheme. I loved it. Well deserved Kudos! Amarillys
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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jlsavell, congratulations ! Outstanding writing with such vivid imagery. Your stanzas flow smoothly, with a very rhythmic cadence and well structured rhyme scheme. I loved it. Well deserved Kudos! Amarillys
Comment Written 27-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Fireshadow, oh goodness...thank you once again..I am humbled..jlsavell
Comment from easyeverett
A beautifully created poetic my friend. Your wit and charm and technical expertise are all evident in this great nominee and I salute you and your fine effort. Loved it. easy
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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A beautifully created poetic my friend. Your wit and charm and technical expertise are all evident in this great nominee and I salute you and your fine effort. Loved it. easy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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easy, once again thank you so very much. I am humbled. This is how I truly feel. again thank you very much. A six coming from you along with the wonderful compliment is truly humbling..jlsavell
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
What a fun poem to God! LOL! He understands you and me better than anyone, you know. He's smiling at this, as I am. Congratulations on your nominationf for POM and good luck in the booth, my sweet friend~
Pea
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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What a fun poem to God! LOL! He understands you and me better than anyone, you know. He's smiling at this, as I am. Congratulations on your nominationf for POM and good luck in the booth, my sweet friend~
Pea
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Pea, thank you!!! Yes this was so much fun to write..thank you for your support and encouragement..there were so many exceptional nominees for this month and yours was truly exceptional..that is why when I won I felt truly humbled..again thank you girl..jlsavell
Comment from amada
Wow, how wonderful this Earth is, and our life on Earth as well. A truly wonderful poem well worth as oneof the best of the month. A truly gift to remember.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Wow, how wonderful this Earth is, and our life on Earth as well. A truly wonderful poem well worth as oneof the best of the month. A truly gift to remember.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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amada, once again thank you!!! I an thrilled you enjoyed my take on life. Your compliments truly do humble me, truly..again thank you..jlsavell
Comment from AlvinTEthington
You do a wonderful job of showing how the kingdom of heaven is within us. Beautiful descriptive imagery. However, although this is a minor concern, the poem is pleasantly one-sided. You don't describe the doom of hell. Nevertheless, this is a beautiful joyful poem.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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You do a wonderful job of showing how the kingdom of heaven is within us. Beautiful descriptive imagery. However, although this is a minor concern, the poem is pleasantly one-sided. You don't describe the doom of hell. Nevertheless, this is a beautiful joyful poem.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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AlvinTEthington, how are you?I apologize fro just responding to your gracious review. Thank you so so much. I am honored that you would stop by and also humbled that this poem touched you..jlsavell..
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Jlsavell ....
The many beautiful things which you have so well described in this writing are certainly to be treasured and appreciated whilst we are on this earth but ...
remember Our Lord's words about no eye having seen nor mind even imagined the wonders of what await us in Heaven.
There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - and cats (plural) of all colors that playfully hisses (singular). I suggest - and a cat of wondrous colour that playfully hisses.
* You have - the mighty winged Eagle who soars and flies ... I suggest - that soars and flies ... because who refers to people.
Thank you for sharing this with us and I wish you well in the Contest.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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Hullo Jlsavell ....
The many beautiful things which you have so well described in this writing are certainly to be treasured and appreciated whilst we are on this earth but ...
remember Our Lord's words about no eye having seen nor mind even imagined the wonders of what await us in Heaven.
There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - and cats (plural) of all colors that playfully hisses (singular). I suggest - and a cat of wondrous colour that playfully hisses.
* You have - the mighty winged Eagle who soars and flies ... I suggest - that soars and flies ... because who refers to people.
Thank you for sharing this with us and I wish you well in the Contest.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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Nanette Mary, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my poem. Your imput is valuable to me and appreciated. You are right..I made the changes. I have read and proofread this piece until I thought it was just right, thank goodness ofr other's eyes and imput. You are appreciated so very much..again thank you..jlsavell
Comment from CALLAHANMR
You put so many of my favorite things in this poem that I think I must agree; with these pieces of heaven on earth I'll just stay with you. I've seen so many of God's handiworks here on planet earth, that I'd have to have an affirmative answer to all your questions before I willingly move on.
Your exquisite poem has a wonderful flow and cadence that makes me want to dance down the page again and again. Your eloquence is graceful, forceful, and persuasive. I can close my eyes and let my senses be inspired.
You have my vote for poem of the month. good luck
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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You put so many of my favorite things in this poem that I think I must agree; with these pieces of heaven on earth I'll just stay with you. I've seen so many of God's handiworks here on planet earth, that I'd have to have an affirmative answer to all your questions before I willingly move on.
Your exquisite poem has a wonderful flow and cadence that makes me want to dance down the page again and again. Your eloquence is graceful, forceful, and persuasive. I can close my eyes and let my senses be inspired.
You have my vote for poem of the month. good luck
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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Roger, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my poem. I am humbled and truly excited that you found my poem worthy of a 6. My words cannot express my surprise, my appreciation and my gratitude..truly..again thank you very much..jlsavell
Comment from findingmyroom
I never thought about the possibility that earth is more than heaven is terms of wonder and beauty and range of experience. What a wonderful concept, that God perhaps so outdid Himself as to create desire for a permanent stay on earth! Your piece is lush and fulfilling to read, as well as technically solid.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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I never thought about the possibility that earth is more than heaven is terms of wonder and beauty and range of experience. What a wonderful concept, that God perhaps so outdid Himself as to create desire for a permanent stay on earth! Your piece is lush and fulfilling to read, as well as technically solid.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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findingmyroom, thank you so very much fro stopping by to read and review my poem. I am thrilled you found pleasure in reading my piece..again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
Comment from sopranodebs
What an amazing piece of visionary. Very clever rhymes, although long its endearing and a joy to read. This must have taken you some thought. I appreciate your work. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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What an amazing piece of visionary. Very clever rhymes, although long its endearing and a joy to read. This must have taken you some thought. I appreciate your work. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2010
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soprandebs, thank you so very much fro stopping by to read nad review my piece of poetry. My poems are usually long, I cannot quite seem to deduce my expression to just a few stanzas..lol...again thank you so very much..jlsavell
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Don't worry, I am the same. Mine too are long. We both have a lot to say obviously- haha