Bird Words
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Comment from RGstar
Great Missmerri. I would have like to see the words that was compulsory to use.
It it would have made interesting viewing as to how you have constructed it.
Perhaps you could have them in your authors notes?
It would have made this more fun to read, knowing.
Such a good entry, such a good poem.
Well done :)
RGstar
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Great Missmerri. I would have like to see the words that was compulsory to use.
It it would have made interesting viewing as to how you have constructed it.
Perhaps you could have them in your authors notes?
It would have made this more fun to read, knowing.
Such a good entry, such a good poem.
Well done :)
RGstar
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from tfawcus
I just love the simple conversational style of this poem. The poetic structure lies almost hidden in the background letting the words shine through. What a lovely humorous way of illustrating with great impact the powerful truth that pops up unexpectedly at the end. I can see why this one was a contest winner and why you should be proud enough to resurrect it! Pretty cool, cucumber!
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I just love the simple conversational style of this poem. The poetic structure lies almost hidden in the background letting the words shine through. What a lovely humorous way of illustrating with great impact the powerful truth that pops up unexpectedly at the end. I can see why this one was a contest winner and why you should be proud enough to resurrect it! Pretty cool, cucumber!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from forestport12
Interesting play on words and the whole effect had me bouncing through each line like the old bouncing ball on tv. Nice rhythm with layers of good meaning.,
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Interesting play on words and the whole effect had me bouncing through each line like the old bouncing ball on tv. Nice rhythm with layers of good meaning.,
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from nreve
I'm really puzzled! What is the reason for "Bird Words". Is it a good reason? I'm still looking for that important answer to my very important question! LOVE, YOFV 143
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I'm really puzzled! What is the reason for "Bird Words". Is it a good reason? I'm still looking for that important answer to my very important question! LOVE, YOFV 143
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I can see why you won that competition, this is an amazing poem, and a real joy to read. The way you have personified all our feathered friends and turned it round at the end. Shear genius! I am so pleased you brought it back again for us to read. xsx Sandra
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I can see why you won that competition, this is an amazing poem, and a real joy to read. The way you have personified all our feathered friends and turned it round at the end. Shear genius! I am so pleased you brought it back again for us to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from nancyjam
Oh, so sorry I missed this one before. It's marvelous.
Very imaginative and fun with great images.
Great rhyming and meter.
good use of enjambment
No wonder this won the contest!
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Oh, so sorry I missed this one before. It's marvelous.
Very imaginative and fun with great images.
Great rhyming and meter.
good use of enjambment
No wonder this won the contest!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from danddanthnyt
Congratulations! on doing a good piece with this one; I like poem which has great rhythm and rhyme, "I saw a pair of penguins dressed to kill in black tuxedos, drinking wine with care, avoiding any spill." A personification of men in tux's here is excellent; in addition: "A pelican,...'slightly sad, but nursed a drink while next to him his feathered friend kept flaunting her flamingo pink." I find this a very well written poem. Good work!
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Congratulations! on doing a good piece with this one; I like poem which has great rhythm and rhyme, "I saw a pair of penguins dressed to kill in black tuxedos, drinking wine with care, avoiding any spill." A personification of men in tux's here is excellent; in addition: "A pelican,...'slightly sad, but nursed a drink while next to him his feathered friend kept flaunting her flamingo pink." I find this a very well written poem. Good work!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent metaphor for what we need, communication in language we can understand and heed.
With some many customs and language signs, so many symbols, so many vines, many people avoid social travel, and use pickup lines.
It is a good feeling when you can talk in the language that is required: in medicine, law, cooking, flying, dancing, all have unique words and concepts.
But the real communicators use simple words and signs, and easily move along the vines, and do not get entangled in the crass, or slang, or upper class, or words that are hardly used, but said to obfuscate.
It seems we seek out the Robin bars, and avoid the vulture bars, where they smoke smelly cigars, and talk of bodies long dead, and meat that is rotting and red.
Birds of a feather do flock together as we know, for a culture will often make it so, or education, or music, or art, we have to find an area where we can take part.
So when we write we try to use common words and phrases, because the oblique kills the story.
Great poem.
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Excellent metaphor for what we need, communication in language we can understand and heed.
With some many customs and language signs, so many symbols, so many vines, many people avoid social travel, and use pickup lines.
It is a good feeling when you can talk in the language that is required: in medicine, law, cooking, flying, dancing, all have unique words and concepts.
But the real communicators use simple words and signs, and easily move along the vines, and do not get entangled in the crass, or slang, or upper class, or words that are hardly used, but said to obfuscate.
It seems we seek out the Robin bars, and avoid the vulture bars, where they smoke smelly cigars, and talk of bodies long dead, and meat that is rotting and red.
Birds of a feather do flock together as we know, for a culture will often make it so, or education, or music, or art, we have to find an area where we can take part.
So when we write we try to use common words and phrases, because the oblique kills the story.
Great poem.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from Cookie333
Oh, thank you so much for re-posting this one. I had not seen it before....what a treat you have shared with us, easy to see why this one won the blue ribbon.
thanks again,
karen
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Oh, thank you so much for re-posting this one. I had not seen it before....what a treat you have shared with us, easy to see why this one won the blue ribbon.
thanks again,
karen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
Comment from simplyteresa
I totally enjoyed this poem and the adorable story you portrayed. Your creativity, imagination and skill shinned threw in this one. It is obvious why you won this contest.
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I totally enjoyed this poem and the adorable story you portrayed. Your creativity, imagination and skill shinned threw in this one. It is obvious why you won this contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013