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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "You Must Be Joking!"A book of a mixture of stories
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Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
I'd flip my lid if my friends did that to me. I have a gun and I know how to shoot, don't let my wheel chair fool you. Your story is very well written as always with excellent dialogue, wonderful narrative and great descriptive writing. You painted a picture in the readers head. I was fooled until the joke hit me. You managed to established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Those guys were stinkers to poor Shelly. I enjoyed this line: "Kate, Rob, and two other girls from the office were convulsing in the booth behind her. Margie, Pam and Hank stood in the kitchen door laughing." You did a marvelous job. Keep up the excellent writing. Have a nice day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Carol,
I'd flip my lid if my friends did that to me. I have a gun and I know how to shoot, don't let my wheel chair fool you. Your story is very well written as always with excellent dialogue, wonderful narrative and great descriptive writing. You painted a picture in the readers head. I was fooled until the joke hit me. You managed to established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Those guys were stinkers to poor Shelly. I enjoyed this line: "Kate, Rob, and two other girls from the office were convulsing in the booth behind her. Margie, Pam and Hank stood in the kitchen door laughing." You did a marvelous job. Keep up the excellent writing. Have a nice day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I truly appreciate your support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
Well, you sure got me with this one, Carol!! Had me believing from the start that Shelly was having the worse day ever! Great surprise ending ... I wonder if Shelly barfed on her friends after that. LOL
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Well, you sure got me with this one, Carol!! Had me believing from the start that Shelly was having the worse day ever! Great surprise ending ... I wonder if Shelly barfed on her friends after that. LOL
Indy :>)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I truly appreciate your support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. You did a great job convincing me what was going on was the truth, so I was not at all surprised by Shelly's surprise.
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This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. You did a great job convincing me what was going on was the truth, so I was not at all surprised by Shelly's surprise.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I truly appreciate your support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Writeaway...
Bravo Begin Again, you had me in thrall there from beginning to end, well done. Your writing is always a pleasure to read and your talent exceeds itself yet again, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
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Bravo Begin Again, you had me in thrall there from beginning to end, well done. Your writing is always a pleasure to read and your talent exceeds itself yet again, excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I truly appreciate your support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from lola29
That was an awful joke to play on Shelly. The poor girl was to the point of throwing-up when the laughter began. I feel sorry for her, but at least she mustered up a laugh.
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That was an awful joke to play on Shelly. The poor girl was to the point of throwing-up when the laughter began. I feel sorry for her, but at least she mustered up a laugh.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I truly appreciate your support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from patwannabe
Well, Carol, you topped my list of surprise stories. I thought sure Rob and Kate had run off to get married. Never suspected an April Fool's trick. I think it would have taken me a bit longer to join in the laughter, but I guess if you're that far under the table, it would be a marvelous release.
Great job, pat
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Well, Carol, you topped my list of surprise stories. I thought sure Rob and Kate had run off to get married. Never suspected an April Fool's trick. I think it would have taken me a bit longer to join in the laughter, but I guess if you're that far under the table, it would be a marvelous release.
Great job, pat
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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My apologies for being so late..but your support is no less appreciated. Thank you..Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This was an very clever but in a way cruel joke to play on a coworker. I can imagine her relief when the realized it was a joke they everyone seemed to be in on.
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This was an very clever but in a way cruel joke to play on a coworker. I can imagine her relief when the realized it was a joke they everyone seemed to be in on.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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My apologies for being so late..but your support is no less appreciated. Thank you..Carol
Comment from misscookie
Love the artwork, What a beautiful setting.
I could vision having lunch there.
But most of all I love the flow of your story.
Your story gave me my second smile this morning, my first was when I thank God for a new day.
This is is very cute and refreshing story.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Love the artwork, What a beautiful setting.
I could vision having lunch there.
But most of all I love the flow of your story.
Your story gave me my second smile this morning, my first was when I thank God for a new day.
This is is very cute and refreshing story.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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My apologies for being so late..but your support is no less appreciated. Thank you..Carol
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no problem, have a nice week-end.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is so funny, that was a cruel, cruel trick they were playing on her. i think i would have hurt them badly if they did that to me. i enjoyed reading this, you have a wicked mind, lol. just kidding.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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this is so funny, that was a cruel, cruel trick they were playing on her. i think i would have hurt them badly if they did that to me. i enjoyed reading this, you have a wicked mind, lol. just kidding.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2010
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My apologies for being so late..but your support is no less appreciated. Thank you..Carol
Comment from RebelRose
I kept thinking some kind of surprise or joke was in store but I couldn't guess what it was. Pretty clever ending. A good, interesting read.
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I kept thinking some kind of surprise or joke was in store but I couldn't guess what it was. Pretty clever ending. A good, interesting read.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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My apologies for being so late..but your support is no less appreciated. Thank you..Carol