Dust Bunnies
a woman cleaning/subtle horror/no gore28 total reviews
Comment from sibhus
Wow, now I'm afraid of what will happen with the dust dinosaurs, under my bed, now that I have read your story. Great story with wonderful descriptions that, I'm sure, we all can relate to, ha, ha. It had a good pace to it making it an ejoyable read. The ending was good.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Wow, now I'm afraid of what will happen with the dust dinosaurs, under my bed, now that I have read your story. Great story with wonderful descriptions that, I'm sure, we all can relate to, ha, ha. It had a good pace to it making it an ejoyable read. The ending was good.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Sibhus! Dust DINOS! Oh...I wish I had included them in this! Get your dustmop! ") Thanks you, I love this review...susan
Comment from RKagan
An interesting story of how loniliness and missing a loved one can drive a person crazy. It is well written and very sad. good job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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An interesting story of how loniliness and missing a loved one can drive a person crazy. It is well written and very sad. good job.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Roberta! Thank you very much. I feel this nuts at times...oh well. Thanks for being here for me! ") Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A story of horror, this
one, Susan - just imagine..
alone and choking to death
.... creepy.
And all your "its" are 100%
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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A story of horror, this
one, Susan - just imagine..
alone and choking to death
.... creepy.
And all your "its" are 100%
Margaret
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Margaret!! SO Sorry for this late reply! Wow, I got the it's /its right???? I am shocked. Maybe it was a fluke. ha! Thanks Margaret. Great to hear from yoU!!! xoxo. Susan
Comment from JW
Wow. After reading this story, it almost makes me want to go through the house with a feather duster and vacuum. I wonder what dust bunnies might be lurking here?
Great job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Wow. After reading this story, it almost makes me want to go through the house with a feather duster and vacuum. I wonder what dust bunnies might be lurking here?
Great job.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Jonathon! THANK YOU! You will be surprised at how many there are! AND they will RUN too! I swear...thank you for reading this and for this great review...SO sorry I'm late in thanking you!! Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
those damned dust bunnies are evil. Your story is very well written. I enjoyed the humor in parts when she started talking to her mop. This lady is a few french fries short of a Happy Meal. There's dust bunnies in her head. I love the dark humor/horror in this story. I think this is the story about the crazy up the street with aluminum foil as window dressings that swears every person is out to get her. Keep up the wonderful writing.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Susan,
those damned dust bunnies are evil. Your story is very well written. I enjoyed the humor in parts when she started talking to her mop. This lady is a few french fries short of a Happy Meal. There's dust bunnies in her head. I love the dark humor/horror in this story. I think this is the story about the crazy up the street with aluminum foil as window dressings that swears every person is out to get her. Keep up the wonderful writing.
Melissa.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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You too my friend! You are a great fan, and I appreciate you so much. I will PM you with something asap...thanks again! LUV YOU> Susan
Comment from Fireshadow
Susan, this is quite an unusual take off on a thriller / horror write. Very well penned (as always), and you selected the perfect artwork to match this piece. Very well done, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Susan, this is quite an unusual take off on a thriller / horror write. Very well penned (as always), and you selected the perfect artwork to match this piece. Very well done, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Ama! You read my fav! I like that odd bunny too! He's creepy! Thank you so much...what a kind and fun review...HUGS! Susan
Comment from anne1204
A woman living with a man can go crazy too. You are so funny. I agree with the lady in the story. Life is more than just pushing dust bunnies around. Even if you clean they are back tomorrow. Very funny little piece and well written. Anne
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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A woman living with a man can go crazy too. You are so funny. I agree with the lady in the story. Life is more than just pushing dust bunnies around. Even if you clean they are back tomorrow. Very funny little piece and well written. Anne
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Anne! Thank you!! Yes, how right! As I always am, I'm thrilled that you liked this. I had fun with this one! HUGS! Susan
Comment from Mustang Patty
Yes, . . . this is subtle horror. It is not difficult to imagine that a woman could go crazy if the dust bunnies started demanding attention! This is a cute story, and it is told well. ~patty~
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Yes, . . . this is subtle horror. It is not difficult to imagine that a woman could go crazy if the dust bunnies started demanding attention! This is a cute story, and it is told well. ~patty~
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Patty! SO sorry this is late...thank you for reading this! I havn't gotten this bad yet... but who knows? I am happy to hear from you and will read your latest tomorrow night? I am behind with everyone!! HUG! Susan
Comment from E.P. Thomas
Suse,
I like the theme and mood of this piece. Your character's predicament reminded me of "Bugs," a play made into a movie about a woman and her male companion gradually sinking deeper and deeper into insanity in a desert motel. There's a very odd and intriguing darkness in this that contributes a great deal of depth to the conflict. My only meaningful suggestion is that it needs tightening.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Suse,
I like the theme and mood of this piece. Your character's predicament reminded me of "Bugs," a play made into a movie about a woman and her male companion gradually sinking deeper and deeper into insanity in a desert motel. There's a very odd and intriguing darkness in this that contributes a great deal of depth to the conflict. My only meaningful suggestion is that it needs tightening.
g
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi G! OH yes, I saw that film...a good show! CREEPY to the max. Ashley Judd was the gal. SHe's great too. THis is a great review...I will try to take some words out someday...hey, and the guy who was in Bugs, starred in a movie called "Let's Go To Prison", if you like silly, but FUNNY movies, you should try to see it someday? He is Leonard in it, a really bad guy who gets his. I am grateful for this time you gave me too. ") Suse
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No problem. Glad to help. g
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
I enjoyed reading this post about the dust critters who took over a house. She should've used the mop.
I found one small nit:
"...small beady eyes glaring through the fuzzy stuff that makes up it's [its] head. The word "it's" is a contraction of "it is."
Dave
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
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Susan,
I enjoyed reading this post about the dust critters who took over a house. She should've used the mop.
I found one small nit:
"...small beady eyes glaring through the fuzzy stuff that makes up it's [its] head. The word "it's" is a contraction of "it is."
Dave
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
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hi again! Thank you! I fixed this! SOMEDAY, hopefully, I will learn these things...in the meantime, what would I do without my friends! ") Thanks again Dave!! Happy New Year!! Susan