The Red Dress
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Comment from Queexpressions
What ah story this is evolving into. I was engaged from the first paragraph. You very descriptive bringing the characters and the settings to life.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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What ah story this is evolving into. I was engaged from the first paragraph. You very descriptive bringing the characters and the settings to life.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. Alexis x
Comment from MumEsGirl
The closing comment, dont worry must be the biggest understatement yet.
Nice development of Lisas growing hated and anger at her mother. Alan is certainly in hotter water than he could ever have imagined
Moving onto chapter ten now
kate
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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The closing comment, dont worry must be the biggest understatement yet.
Nice development of Lisas growing hated and anger at her mother. Alan is certainly in hotter water than he could ever have imagined
Moving onto chapter ten now
kate
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yes, it is a bit of an understatement, but as you well know, that's fiction! Alexis x
Comment from cq257
Well written, had me captivated to the end. My only thing was the kiss before entering the police station. I know they are attracted to each other but with all the stress Alan is going through, I didn't think his character would kiss her until all was resolved. Just my take, doesn't make it bad that he did of course.
I did like the story but some sentences need a little editing/rewording. Still great though. Well done.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Well written, had me captivated to the end. My only thing was the kiss before entering the police station. I know they are attracted to each other but with all the stress Alan is going through, I didn't think his character would kiss her until all was resolved. Just my take, doesn't make it bad that he did of course.
I did like the story but some sentences need a little editing/rewording. Still great though. Well done.
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your lovely review. Yes you are right, I have tweaked the end a bit to justify the kiss! Alexis x
