The Red Dress
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "The Red Dress chapter forty-six"The story of a teenage girl
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Comment from Malerie
Wow, totally unexpected the end of this chapter; very well done. Poor Lisa; three men in love with her. I'm wondering what Nick will do now; perhaps Alan and Richard will come to her rescue. I fear death is in the future for maybe a couple of these character (not Lisa or Alan). Thanks for this chapter; keep writing, I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Wow, totally unexpected the end of this chapter; very well done. Poor Lisa; three men in love with her. I'm wondering what Nick will do now; perhaps Alan and Richard will come to her rescue. I fear death is in the future for maybe a couple of these character (not Lisa or Alan). Thanks for this chapter; keep writing, I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Yes I know, you would think that having three men in love with you could be regarded as lucky, but it doesn't seem to be working out like that for Lisa! Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
What an ending to this chapter! Always hanging lol I'm glad she didn't sleep with Richard, I don't think they are right together, better as friends. She needs good friends. Good descriptions, I liked it wen karen told her about Carla but yet again she thought about it the wrong way!! Good pace. Alex :)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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What an ending to this chapter! Always hanging lol I'm glad she didn't sleep with Richard, I don't think they are right together, better as friends. She needs good friends. Good descriptions, I liked it wen karen told her about Carla but yet again she thought about it the wrong way!! Good pace. Alex :)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Yep, she's not the slapper she thought she was. We all know she loves Alan, the only problem now is, so does Nick! Not far to go. Alexis x
Comment from MumEsGirl
I enjoyed this chapter. Lisa bounced back a b it too quickly from all her misery. Now she has landed in more hot water.
Love the twist at the end
kate
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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I enjoyed this chapter. Lisa bounced back a b it too quickly from all her misery. Now she has landed in more hot water.
Love the twist at the end
kate
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Yes, we all know she loves Alan! Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from hellion5
Great chapter. You've made it easy to follow the story even though I've missed a few.
Some things I found:
the anti rooms--ante-rooms or anterooms, not sure about -
not your fault, it's just a--fault; it's
tried to rape her because I beat the--her, because
after he had shaken it, looked--not clear who's speaking
live life to the full and--fullest
her with a big cheesy grin.--big, cheesy
, and she was delighted to see her.--don't need this
word in edgeways,--edgewise
Great job--
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Great chapter. You've made it easy to follow the story even though I've missed a few.
Some things I found:
the anti rooms--ante-rooms or anterooms, not sure about -
not your fault, it's just a--fault; it's
tried to rape her because I beat the--her, because
after he had shaken it, looked--not clear who's speaking
live life to the full and--fullest
her with a big cheesy grin.--big, cheesy
, and she was delighted to see her.--don't need this
word in edgeways,--edgewise
Great job--
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much. That's one thing I love about this site, great constructive reviews like this. Well spotted! Alexis x
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Glad I could help. I'm really enjoying the story, too--
Sue
Comment from debskatz
Hi alexis,
Jesus, that bastard just continues to show up! I think you may have a sadistic side to you, my friend! lol
No spag, but one suggestion: "a bitter pill to swallow" - you use that expression twice in quick succession. I think you need to kick one of them.
Great chapter! Look forward to the next one!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Hi alexis,
Jesus, that bastard just continues to show up! I think you may have a sadistic side to you, my friend! lol
No spag, but one suggestion: "a bitter pill to swallow" - you use that expression twice in quick succession. I think you need to kick one of them.
Great chapter! Look forward to the next one!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Well spotted, Boss! I was obviously on pills of some sort the day I wrote this, and needed reminding. lol! Thank you for your eagle eye, Alexis x
Comment from James McCorkle
Always a kick in the pants just as we think we have it all wound up into a nice jumble. Lisa sure is one crazy mixed up young lady who needs a compass to find out where she is, and with whom she is in love.So many twists and turns in her life, and now she is in danger again. How will this chapter work out I wonder ? James
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Always a kick in the pants just as we think we have it all wound up into a nice jumble. Lisa sure is one crazy mixed up young lady who needs a compass to find out where she is, and with whom she is in love.So many twists and turns in her life, and now she is in danger again. How will this chapter work out I wonder ? James
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Oh, James, you didn't expect it all to be easy, did you? She'snot crazy, just young. Remember? Love your reviews my friend. Give my love to your lady. Alexis x
Comment from Maureen's Pen
OMG this was just a great chapter...I'm sorry but I don't give a wit about spag at this moment. If it doesn't jump out and bite me someone else can grab it.
The story itself is a excellent chapter. Penned perfectly. I'm so glad she didn't do the 'nasty' with Richard, keep the friendship alive. Lisa is starting to grow within herself I think, and not just run with the flow.
A fantastic work as always.....Nick is like a bloody weed popping up all over the bloody place....
And I'm left hanging once again....:)
Thanks for a great read.
Maureen
xxo
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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OMG this was just a great chapter...I'm sorry but I don't give a wit about spag at this moment. If it doesn't jump out and bite me someone else can grab it.
The story itself is a excellent chapter. Penned perfectly. I'm so glad she didn't do the 'nasty' with Richard, keep the friendship alive. Lisa is starting to grow within herself I think, and not just run with the flow.
A fantastic work as always.....Nick is like a bloody weed popping up all over the bloody place....
And I'm left hanging once again....:)
Thanks for a great read.
Maureen
xxo
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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XXXXXXX you wonderful woman. Thank you! Alexis x
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Yes I Am...... LOL couldn't resist, not bloody often I get told that! xxxxx
Big Hugs
HWC
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Great job with the flow in this piece. It was a wonderful read. Nice dialogue making for a dynamic read. Kept me interested. Nice!
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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Great job with the flow in this piece. It was a wonderful read. Nice dialogue making for a dynamic read. Kept me interested. Nice!
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2012
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I really appreciate your wonderful review, thank you so much. Alexis x
