Illusion
A Man Finds Something From His Past.16 total reviews
Comment from jjstar
Well, wow! If I had six stars I would certainly award them to you. I thought this was very impressive. I would have never guessed it was a gun! Extremely well written, especially for a short piece.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Well, wow! If I had six stars I would certainly award them to you. I thought this was very impressive. I would have never guessed it was a gun! Extremely well written, especially for a short piece.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you very much.
Comment from rgabel
Wow! You did an awesome job on the building of suspense. Then a twist, a surprise at the end. I didn't see that one coming. It put a whole different bent on the sentences before. I had imagined something wonderful, not so deadly. Excellent job. I'm not normally taken off guard by a short story!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Wow! You did an awesome job on the building of suspense. Then a twist, a surprise at the end. I didn't see that one coming. It put a whole different bent on the sentences before. I had imagined something wonderful, not so deadly. Excellent job. I'm not normally taken off guard by a short story!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank You, for the positive review
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written contest entry. You leave your reader with several unanswered questions with numerous possible answers.
Errro
And like meeting and (an) old lover,
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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This is a very well written contest entry. You leave your reader with several unanswered questions with numerous possible answers.
Errro
And like meeting and (an) old lover,
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank You, for the positive review
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You're welcome.
Comment from Curly Girly
It was well written and I could only find one error:
You wrote:
And like meeting and old lover,
**suggest:
And like meeting AN old lover,
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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It was well written and I could only find one error:
You wrote:
And like meeting and old lover,
**suggest:
And like meeting AN old lover,
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank You i will make the changes.
Comment from Meta~Mark
A Man Finds Something From His Past. is a clever eye opening story in this Illusion Found It writing prompt
the old engagement ring yes I have old jewelry as well..
excellent!
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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A Man Finds Something From His Past. is a clever eye opening story in this Illusion Found It writing prompt
the old engagement ring yes I have old jewelry as well..
excellent!
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Misrael
I wish that you could have gone on with the story because it is not finished yet. I hope that there is more to come because it needs to have more added to it. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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I wish that you could have gone on with the story because it is not finished yet. I hope that there is more to come because it needs to have more added to it. Good read, good job and keep on writing.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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I will think of something to add, I appreciate your suggestion.
