Comment from TonyD

Excellent

Your words so poignantly express a feeling of hopelessness as I read on hoping that a hero would appear and free the young girl from such a monstrous death. But no one came to her rescue and she is gone.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Holy crap, woman. What are you doing? You really have an edge on this stuff. What a post, Ine. All your fans will be saying 'WTF?' LOL!

It's very good. So well done. Your command of the language is excellent. You set a real mood of horror and fear. What a horrible way to die.


"The life of every creature is it's blood. - its blood. Lose the apostrophe. You did the same thing a bit later too, I noticed.

BUT otherwise, bravo! For what it's worth, I'm very impressed.

Av

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from MumEsGirl

Excellent

You sure have the makings of another Hitchcock. I enjoyed this poem immensely.

Interesting words used at the conclusion. Tranquil Panic Forever. This leaves the reader with something to ponder on
hugs
kate

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from October21

Excellent

Oh good lord Ine, I never knew you were so great at writing prose! It's brilliant and so vividly descriptive, real and well-written. The gruesome details did the piece justice and there was effective suspense in all the right practise! Well done!

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from sparkie67

Excellent

you are very created. Telling about this girl drowning. I wasn't expecting this to be the end...her in tranquil panic forever. frozen in time.. How is it you can take your readers under water with your writing. that's truely a gift. Keep up the good work, thank you for your rating.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

eveniong line. WOW girl what a vivid write of a girl tide and brutally mistreated left drowning in the ocean. excellent written free verse,story/poem.

great job, well enjoyed

Regards
tia

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

ooo and this one is scary indeed what an awful picture heart breaking and your words bring all the drama of a dreadful crime well written xxgazzaxx

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

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Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Yikes! What a horrifying poem, Ine, so dark and so full of despair. This is absolutely wonderful in it's ability to evoke imagery and emotion. (And I am such a fan of anything that can do that - fabulous!)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

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Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Wow, Ine, You're really good at writing stories. This kept me interested from beginning to end. You use words very well to keep the person reading. Kat

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Oh my goodness I can't believe I read the whole thing
This is not what I like to read I hope Ican sleep tyonight and don't see her floating in my dreams. I must confess this 9is a good write.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013

Thanks for your time and kind review. Have a lovely week, Ine