Spring
Spring in all its glory24 total reviews
Comment from allborn66
This is a beautiful poem. You definitely brought spring into my imagination. I love the word choice. The theme was expressed well. The picture is a nice touch.
Barbara
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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This is a beautiful poem. You definitely brought spring into my imagination. I love the word choice. The theme was expressed well. The picture is a nice touch.
Barbara
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your kind review it is appreciated and always welcome. Robin
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
It is getting time for one to long for spring and this is a beautiful description of it. The last line kind of says it all...In a window of time called Spring. Very nicely done. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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It is getting time for one to long for spring and this is a beautiful description of it. The last line kind of says it all...In a window of time called Spring. Very nicely done. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your kind review it is appreciated so much.
Robin
Comment from Righteous Riter
The words bring the photo to life. This piece has a nice flow and the harmony is where it needs to be. The passion of the writer is felt as the writer does a good job of making the reader feel like the reader is a part of the piece. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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The words bring the photo to life. This piece has a nice flow and the harmony is where it needs to be. The passion of the writer is felt as the writer does a good job of making the reader feel like the reader is a part of the piece. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review it is appreciated very much. Robin
Comment from ravenblack
like your passage to spring, particularly the line " fingers of warmth stir to wakefulness/inhale and exhale heated breaths of sun". I don't like the intrusion of tick tock tick as it imposes the mechanical on nature which seems out of place as everything else in the poem flows naturally. just a few nitpicks -styanza 1, line 1 - winters should be winter's; "feathered sparks" should be ":feathers sparks.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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like your passage to spring, particularly the line " fingers of warmth stir to wakefulness/inhale and exhale heated breaths of sun". I don't like the intrusion of tick tock tick as it imposes the mechanical on nature which seems out of place as everything else in the poem flows naturally. just a few nitpicks -styanza 1, line 1 - winters should be winter's; "feathered sparks" should be ":feathers sparks.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review it is appreciated and also help with the proper wording. God Bless Robin
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This poetry transports the reader to a tranquil place.
It has all of the three S's: Sincere, Soft, Smooth.
The attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the vision of the poem. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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This poetry transports the reader to a tranquil place.
It has all of the three S's: Sincere, Soft, Smooth.
The attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the vision of the poem. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to review it is appreciated very much. God Bless Robin
Comment from Galactia
Excellent poem reflecting the beauty of spring time, birds singing joyously to thenew arival of spring as winter departs and ice melts.
Great job and GL
Regareds
Tia
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Excellent poem reflecting the beauty of spring time, birds singing joyously to thenew arival of spring as winter departs and ice melts.
Great job and GL
Regareds
Tia
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review it is appreciated a lot.
Robin
Comment from tedanytime
This beautiful verse describes the wakening Spring with words full of deep meaning.
Your last line frames Spring as a "window in time." A perfect ending to this work that enables clear visualization of your theme.
Your use of leave stopped me for a moment as I verified an old variant of leaf. It is great for an author to use words to jiggle some thinking from the readers.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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This beautiful verse describes the wakening Spring with words full of deep meaning.
Your last line frames Spring as a "window in time." A perfect ending to this work that enables clear visualization of your theme.
Your use of leave stopped me for a moment as I verified an old variant of leaf. It is great for an author to use words to jiggle some thinking from the readers.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for you kind words, it is the motivation I need to keep em comin. Thank you God Bless Robin
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I so enjoyed your poem about Spring. The flow of your free verse poem carried a very visual and resonate message about: Life's restoration bursting to regenerate old to new, sequential events, in a window of time called Spring. Great job, good luck in the contest, Carolyn
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I so enjoyed your poem about Spring. The flow of your free verse poem carried a very visual and resonate message about: Life's restoration bursting to regenerate old to new, sequential events, in a window of time called Spring. Great job, good luck in the contest, Carolyn
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment, it
is really appreciated. God Bless Robin
Comment from Allison78
I think this is a wonderful poem you have written. I'm so ready for spring to come and this gives me hope! Beautifully written, well done!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I think this is a wonderful poem you have written. I'm so ready for spring to come and this gives me hope! Beautifully written, well done!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much I believe a lot of people can't wait for Spring
to Sprung this year especially. Again thank you, Robin
Comment from TAB_that's me
Excellent job! This poem awakened all of my senses except maybe taste:) I could feel the icy waters, hear life's restoration and see the buds bursting. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Excellent job! This poem awakened all of my senses except maybe taste:) I could feel the icy waters, hear life's restoration and see the buds bursting. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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ty so much a (6) is greatly appreciated God Bless Robin
