Follow the leader
False profits-To the music of 'Sugar Man'16 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I found your free verse flow of lyrics very well written. I am not familiar with the 'tune' so to speak. But you are, and that's what counts. Good job, good message and good luck in the contest. Carolyn
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I found your free verse flow of lyrics very well written. I am not familiar with the 'tune' so to speak. But you are, and that's what counts. Good job, good message and good luck in the contest. Carolyn
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Carolyn, thank you for your review and kind comments.
Regards
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I think without the cesspool line this would have been okay. Maybe a more creative refrain too. I do wish you luck in the contest~~~ Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I think without the cesspool line this would have been okay. Maybe a more creative refrain too. I do wish you luck in the contest~~~ Debbie
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Debbie,
thank you for your review.
Kind wishes
Comment from vapros
I'm not familiar with the melody to which you have written your lyrics, but I can follow the theme of this effort, which is a warning not to follow the wrong leaders. (prophets, not profits) I enjoyed your song.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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I'm not familiar with the melody to which you have written your lyrics, but I can follow the theme of this effort, which is a warning not to follow the wrong leaders. (prophets, not profits) I enjoyed your song.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Vapros,
thank you for your review and spelling correction.
Regards
Comment from Crystal Carey
With you there, I saw a preacher one Sunday morning and directly after he did an interview. His kitchen is Granite, all wood. Hmm I don't think so he won't be getting my dollars. Time to live like we are truly free. Great song!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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With you there, I saw a preacher one Sunday morning and directly after he did an interview. His kitchen is Granite, all wood. Hmm I don't think so he won't be getting my dollars. Time to live like we are truly free. Great song!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Crystal,
thank you very much for your review and kind comments.
Kindest wishes xx
Comment from chasennov
'Follow The Leader.' This is what most of us do most of our time, follow the leader. It is very seldom that we take the lead ourselves. Is it because we're too lazy, or are we simply just too in competent? Well done.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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'Follow The Leader.' This is what most of us do most of our time, follow the leader. It is very seldom that we take the lead ourselves. Is it because we're too lazy, or are we simply just too in competent? Well done.
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Chasennov,
thank you for this review and your insightful comments, much appreciated.
Kindest wishes
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
This is an intriguing poem for the "Searching for the
Sugar Man Fans" contest. I have to admit to having no
knowledge of the Sugar Man but I don't think that detracts
from my liking your poem. There are so many false prophets today it is often difficult to tell them apart.
I have noted some spag issues for you below.
good luck in the contest
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
I'm a profit >>> I'm a prophet
sure your on his list >>> sure you're on his list
money to false profits >>> money to false prophets
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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This is an intriguing poem for the "Searching for the
Sugar Man Fans" contest. I have to admit to having no
knowledge of the Sugar Man but I don't think that detracts
from my liking your poem. There are so many false prophets today it is often difficult to tell them apart.
I have noted some spag issues for you below.
good luck in the contest
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
I'm a profit >>> I'm a prophet
sure your on his list >>> sure you're on his list
money to false profits >>> money to false prophets
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Hi Jan,
thank you very much for your review and your spelling corrections, truly appreciated.
Kindest wishes, xx