Melusina - Goddess of the Waters
A Knight breaks his promise to the Goddess.15 total reviews
Comment from RodG
This story of hero or knight who is dazzled by a goddess or nymph is told in many cultures, but it's a story that never grows old. I like how YOU tell it with your Virgin Knight and the goddess Melusina. Some nice imagery that sets the scene. The tragic ending is not unexpected, but is in keeping with the tradition of such stories. Nicely done. RodG
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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This story of hero or knight who is dazzled by a goddess or nymph is told in many cultures, but it's a story that never grows old. I like how YOU tell it with your Virgin Knight and the goddess Melusina. Some nice imagery that sets the scene. The tragic ending is not unexpected, but is in keeping with the tradition of such stories. Nicely done. RodG
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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G'day RodG, Thanks so much for reading; men will be men and take a peep - she dragged him in a drowned him in her keep! Cheers, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
I reserved a spot for this contest but have no idea what the picture is saying to me yet :-)
good use of alternate-line rhyming
excellent use of alliteration
This is a new goddess for me - always fun to learn something new
wow, that is one tragic ending - that's what he gets for peeking at a nudie :-)
You tell the story very well in poetic form and you've paired the art with your story well :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I reserved a spot for this contest but have no idea what the picture is saying to me yet :-)
good use of alternate-line rhyming
excellent use of alliteration
This is a new goddess for me - always fun to learn something new
wow, that is one tragic ending - that's what he gets for peeking at a nudie :-)
You tell the story very well in poetic form and you've paired the art with your story well :-) Brooke
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Hello Mrs. Pearl, Yes, I did some research on the theme; illustration (for me) was dreadful. Thanks for reading my friend. Chin up chest out - no such thing as self doubt. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh boy she certainly takes it to a new level of love. I haven't heard of this or forgotten so I really enjoyed the story of the water goddess. Well done, nice flow, imagery was great and overall a great submission.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Oh boy she certainly takes it to a new level of love. I haven't heard of this or forgotten so I really enjoyed the story of the water goddess. Well done, nice flow, imagery was great and overall a great submission.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Hello Maureen, Thank you for reading, glad you enjoyed. Happy Easter to you. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written you tell the story well using this art work to its full potential I enjoyed well done regards Jill
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Yes my friend this is well written you tell the story well using this art work to its full potential I enjoyed well done regards Jill
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Jill, Bless you for reading, glad you enjoyed - Happy Easter. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Gungalo
An interesting tale you sin Aussie. Sounds lie a true make believe story to me. Imagine being drowned because you saw you lover taking a bath?
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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An interesting tale you sin Aussie. Sounds lie a true make believe story to me. Imagine being drowned because you saw you lover taking a bath?
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Well, she had rules and he broke them. You should be in bed. Again? Thank you P for your review. Loads of Easter eggs for you. Kay XX
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Nah mom said I could stay up tonight. LOL
