Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 " Leslie Ann goes to college"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
16 total reviews
Comment from steevie
Wow, Dossie, a story through poetry is very cool.
This woman is up to something I fear, as she seems like the type to want more than this meager man who is losing his job.
Her background has set the theme for the upcoming chapters. I shall stay tuned for more adventures of Leslie Ann.
hugs
steve
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
  |
Wow, Dossie, a story through poetry is very cool.
This woman is up to something I fear, as she seems like the type to want more than this meager man who is losing his job.
Her background has set the theme for the upcoming chapters. I shall stay tuned for more adventures of Leslie Ann.
hugs
steve
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
-
Thanks, Steevie! I appreciate your reading, commenting and rating this one. Peace and blessings!! I'm tickled that you like this story!!
-
You're most welcome, my friend. I love this series and should be all caught up today
Thank you for writing so well, Dossie
hugs
smiles
steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Oh, please hurry and tell us what happens next. What will she do with him and why and what will be the consequences.
their only child a woefully good-bye. << You mean WOEFUL, with no LY.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
|
Oh, please hurry and tell us what happens next. What will she do with him and why and what will be the consequences.
their only child a woefully good-bye. << You mean WOEFUL, with no LY.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
-
Thanks, Phyllis! I appreciate your reading, commenting and rating this one. Peace and blessings!!
Comment from sunnilicious
I love that swimsuit. I'll take one in palm tree green. Nice catalog photograph. Sexy.
I'd think she want a guy with the hottest sports car around. That Mercedes Roadster is my latest dream car. Business cards as a freshman in college. That sounds off-key. I can hardly wait to read more... This novel is coming along fabulous. Great work.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
 |
I love that swimsuit. I'll take one in palm tree green. Nice catalog photograph. Sexy.
I'd think she want a guy with the hottest sports car around. That Mercedes Roadster is my latest dream car. Business cards as a freshman in college. That sounds off-key. I can hardly wait to read more... This novel is coming along fabulous. Great work.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
-
Thanks so much, Sunni!
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of narrative poetry about a girl who went to college with a determination not to let the mistakes she made in high school be repeated. I enjoyed the simple diction and flow. kudos
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
|
This is a beautiful piece of narrative poetry about a girl who went to college with a determination not to let the mistakes she made in high school be repeated. I enjoyed the simple diction and flow. kudos
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
-
Thanks, Perp Iheborn! I appreciate your reading, commenting and rating this one. Peace and blessings!!
Comment from Eigle Rull
This piece was fantastic in my opinion. And the picture adds to define your piece, and your subject. I loved the flow of the entire piece. It made for a smooth and easy read. This held my attention very well. I enjoyed reading it. I found no errors.
Always with respect,
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
|
This piece was fantastic in my opinion. And the picture adds to define your piece, and your subject. I loved the flow of the entire piece. It made for a smooth and easy read. This held my attention very well. I enjoyed reading it. I found no errors.
Always with respect,
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
-
Thanks so much!!
Comment from EMB
Hmm. A business card, huh? Now I'm wondering what kind of "business" she's into. LOL This was a different sort of work. It took me a moment to realize that you were rhyming everything, so I guess this is really prose poetry, right? Interesting character you've created. It seems as though this story has some more life to it. The ending was kind of abrupt, but I enjoyed what you gave me. :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
|
Hmm. A business card, huh? Now I'm wondering what kind of "business" she's into. LOL This was a different sort of work. It took me a moment to realize that you were rhyming everything, so I guess this is really prose poetry, right? Interesting character you've created. It seems as though this story has some more life to it. The ending was kind of abrupt, but I enjoyed what you gave me. :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
-
Thanks, Edward! I'm trying something different. I'm writing a small book in a story poem format. You read the second part, there's a first part. I plan to post around 13 or 14 parts. I am always open to constructive criticism. Thanks for stopping by!