Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Leslie Ann's millions"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
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Comment from sunnilicious
Leslie doesn't look so exotic. She seems to be an above average all-american girl. Why isn't she after a football player? The mvp kind with money?
White bean soup should be followed up by a good seafood dish like Salmon with Pistacio Pistou. I'm being a stickler for details, however, changes to the story are not necessary.
Her allowance is ridiculous. I would think even for Texas oil barons too. You better research that out too.
The story is coming along quite well. Enjoyable to read. Great work.
Have a great weekend :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Leslie doesn't look so exotic. She seems to be an above average all-american girl. Why isn't she after a football player? The mvp kind with money?
White bean soup should be followed up by a good seafood dish like Salmon with Pistacio Pistou. I'm being a stickler for details, however, changes to the story are not necessary.
Her allowance is ridiculous. I would think even for Texas oil barons too. You better research that out too.
The story is coming along quite well. Enjoyable to read. Great work.
Have a great weekend :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks a million!!
Comment from adewpearl
good abcb rhyming including proximate rhyming like kind/line
good alliteration in tactic this time
I laughed out loud when he doubled her allowance from one million - boy, do I need me some rich parents LOL
you do a great job of showing how manipulative she is
Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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good abcb rhyming including proximate rhyming like kind/line
good alliteration in tactic this time
I laughed out loud when he doubled her allowance from one million - boy, do I need me some rich parents LOL
you do a great job of showing how manipulative she is
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Brooke!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
She sounds a bit like my husband's eldest daughter, whom we only see when there's something she is after -
I must applaud you for this, Dossie - it's a most impressive
poem, which reveals all -- and left me wanting more.
most enjoyable, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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She sounds a bit like my husband's eldest daughter, whom we only see when there's something she is after -
I must applaud you for this, Dossie - it's a most impressive
poem, which reveals all -- and left me wanting more.
most enjoyable, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Many, many thanks for your encouragement, Margaret!
Comment from God's Writer
A beautiful story my friend. You have such a beautiful mind. This story is well balanced with feelings and emotions. You painted such wonderful word pictures for me to view. Thank you
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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A beautiful story my friend. You have such a beautiful mind. This story is well balanced with feelings and emotions. You painted such wonderful word pictures for me to view. Thank you
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Jill, for your continued support!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That allowance is unbelievable Dossie. Why does anyone need that much money especially a young college girl? I don't know if it will help her. Not everyone
can be bought and I'll just bet Jonathan can't.
XSX Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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That allowance is unbelievable Dossie. Why does anyone need that much money especially a young college girl? I don't know if it will help her. Not everyone
can be bought and I'll just bet Jonathan can't.
XSX Nancy
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Nancy!
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Dossie,
The poem is outstanding, and the story is compelling and believable. Leslie Ann is a spoiled brat that will let nothing stand in the way of her wants and desires. To break up a happy home means nothing to her, and I have to wonder how long it will take for her to be ready to cast Jonathan aside for another lover? It is interesting, and I enjoyed the read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Dossie,
The poem is outstanding, and the story is compelling and believable. Leslie Ann is a spoiled brat that will let nothing stand in the way of her wants and desires. To break up a happy home means nothing to her, and I have to wonder how long it will take for her to be ready to cast Jonathan aside for another lover? It is interesting, and I enjoyed the read.
Curtis
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks again, Curtis, for the STARS!
Comment from steevie
I'm so sorry, Dossie, but I'm really getting to like Leslie Ann a lot!!! There is something about a scheming, conniving, blond temptress that has me enthralled.
Why doesn't something like this ever happen to me? I have money issues too, but no blonds are currently chasing me, lusting after my body. LOL My question is rhetorical of course. LOL
I am liking where this story is headed. But I have a feeling that like most things in life, the wanting of something unattainable is usually sweeter than the actuality of it.
Whenever I see your name in my P/M box, I know there will be more Leslie Ann. Perfect name for her too. The two part first name is classy, many French up here in Canada give their children two part first names.
until next time
smiles
steve
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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I'm so sorry, Dossie, but I'm really getting to like Leslie Ann a lot!!! There is something about a scheming, conniving, blond temptress that has me enthralled.
Why doesn't something like this ever happen to me? I have money issues too, but no blonds are currently chasing me, lusting after my body. LOL My question is rhetorical of course. LOL
I am liking where this story is headed. But I have a feeling that like most things in life, the wanting of something unattainable is usually sweeter than the actuality of it.
Whenever I see your name in my P/M box, I know there will be more Leslie Ann. Perfect name for her too. The two part first name is classy, many French up here in Canada give their children two part first names.
until next time
smiles
steve
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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It's me again, Steevie. Thanks, my friend. How's The Kiss" coming along?
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Really good. Big chapter coming up. Probably a fairly long chapter
Thanks for asking, Dossie. My inspiration!!
hugs
steve
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is again well written all Leslie Ann wanted was money so spoilt her parents believed her and gave in and now all she has to do is reel Jonathan in well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Yes my friend this is again well written all Leslie Ann wanted was money so spoilt her parents believed her and gave in and now all she has to do is reel Jonathan in well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Jill!
Comment from Larissa B
Terrific portrayal of an over indulged spoiled brat. lol!! Great descriptions and I must say, very beautifully chosen words that made reading this story like it is poetry. I wonder if this spoiled, dreamy young lady will get her man? Thank you for this entertaining read!;)
Larissa
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Terrific portrayal of an over indulged spoiled brat. lol!! Great descriptions and I must say, very beautifully chosen words that made reading this story like it is poetry. I wonder if this spoiled, dreamy young lady will get her man? Thank you for this entertaining read!;)
Larissa
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Larissa. I'm sorry for the delay, but thanks for this great review. I'm happy your enjoyed my Leslie Ann saga. Dossie
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Hi, no prob. I don't review much & stumbled on your post one night as I was looking for stuff to read on my coffee break at work. Might seek out the next post just coz I got curious. lol;)
Great job.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I love your style. I guess you intend to publish the story of Leslie Ann in a poetic form. I really enjoyed reading this one. She is subtle but very effective in her devious ways. kudos
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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I love your style. I guess you intend to publish the story of Leslie Ann in a poetic form. I really enjoyed reading this one. She is subtle but very effective in her devious ways. kudos
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Perp Iheborn. I don't know what I plan to do with this effort. When I wrote the first poem, it begged for a follow up, so I continued writing - LOl. Thanks for your support and encouragement! Dossie