Comment from angelmagnet

Excellent

This is a surprise. I'm sure she has something up her sleeve. I don't trust this girl has far as I can see her. Her failure with Jonathan and running to Thomas is so needy that I don't think she can get away with it. She certainly doesn't have me in her corner. Interesting story. I really like the poem format.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks for this encouraging review!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent detail of her outfit
good alliteration in pirouette/ perfect and elsewhere
good use of abcb rhyme
witty and risque simile of rising like yeast in a braided bun LOL
she maybe there - may be
vivid detail of their passionate lovemaking
Brooke

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks for this encouraging review!

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

yes this is well written my friend again, very well written you cover the scene of making love very well i enjoyed my friend regards jill

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks for this encouraging review!

Comment from vee91113

Good

I like the general idea. I'm all for the use for the use of a thesaurus but there is sure thing as over using it. The different wording took away from the point of the story.
-Vee

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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

What was the "different wording?" I went to college, so I must make it pay off in some way. I don't recall using words a fifth grader wouldn't know. Evidently, you have not been following the story poem, because I didn't stray from the level of wording, I've used throughout. Have a blessed day!

Comment from dmt1967

Exceptional

This is another good chapter my friend I liked it very much I liked the picture and the whole thing very well written thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks for this encouraging review and WONDERFUL stars!!

Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

First off, I love your saying; the one on your profile.

Okay, this was extremely good. My limited vocabulary slowed my reading in the beginning. However, your words still made easy to understand. This held my interest all the way through it. I enjoyed the piece.

Always with respect,



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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks for this encouraging review! You're kind!