The I in Me
Joining of the self32 total reviews
Comment from speakup
Good one Jumbo, loved the read, rhyme and meter was great and made me want to read more. The pic and color combo worked well also.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Good one Jumbo, loved the read, rhyme and meter was great and made me want to read more. The pic and color combo worked well also.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Speakup,
thank you for your fine review and rating, it is appreciated.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from GregoryCody
Oh so it is not about God? It is about yourself and your own relationship. Well it is well written, great flow, great dialogue in essence, and a great form overall. Solid piece!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Oh so it is not about God? It is about yourself and your own relationship. Well it is well written, great flow, great dialogue in essence, and a great form overall. Solid piece!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Gregory,
thanks for the fine review, not sure how to take the God remark?
I suppose it could be about our higher self, which in essence could be about God. But no it's just about me.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from Kiki12
I love this, it's tremendous. You've really captured the internal conflict we all struggle with. We are so often our own worst enemy, self-doubt, self-loathing, insecurities, these are all so hurtful to our sense of being and chip away at the self-worth that we need to embrace in order to be healthy.
Not to know our true path or know just what to say
The confusion that it causes... --> this line struck me, as often the ambiguity of our path lends itself to anxiety which opens the door to other doubts.
Someone once asked me why I chose to worry when it won't change the outcome? The day will keep moving forward and we will have the same choices every time we wake up, what we chose won't change anything except our emotional state, so why not choose happy? it made so much sense, but it is much more difficult than it seems. Your poem reminds me of this struggle, we know what we want, we try to be happy, why do we stand in our own way?
..or something...lol, hope this is close to what you had intended :)
excellent write james, so glad I have a six, thanks for sharing-
xx
Kiki
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I love this, it's tremendous. You've really captured the internal conflict we all struggle with. We are so often our own worst enemy, self-doubt, self-loathing, insecurities, these are all so hurtful to our sense of being and chip away at the self-worth that we need to embrace in order to be healthy.
Not to know our true path or know just what to say
The confusion that it causes... --> this line struck me, as often the ambiguity of our path lends itself to anxiety which opens the door to other doubts.
Someone once asked me why I chose to worry when it won't change the outcome? The day will keep moving forward and we will have the same choices every time we wake up, what we chose won't change anything except our emotional state, so why not choose happy? it made so much sense, but it is much more difficult than it seems. Your poem reminds me of this struggle, we know what we want, we try to be happy, why do we stand in our own way?
..or something...lol, hope this is close to what you had intended :)
excellent write james, so glad I have a six, thanks for sharing-
xx
Kiki
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Kiki,
yeah!! Someone that totally gets the poem, thank you. This was a truly comprehensive and accurate break-down. And whoever that someone was he or she knows the truth, so many people worry about the end journey without even taking one step.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from lorijean
A great poem, a lesson in finding yourself, you have to know yourself and is great if you can also find someone who knows you that well too.....perfect life..
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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A great poem, a lesson in finding yourself, you have to know yourself and is great if you can also find someone who knows you that well too.....perfect life..
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Lori J,
thank you for the fine review Lori. It's taken me over 50 years to get to knowing most of who I am, but one thing I know for sure I do trust myself. Take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from MM lives on :)
WOW, the "I" in "ME" this sounds like a Metaphorical gem of an analogy my friend..an awesome portrait of self reflection good buddy!
this deserves a 7 star, site stifled from 6's for you this week
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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WOW, the "I" in "ME" this sounds like a Metaphorical gem of an analogy my friend..an awesome portrait of self reflection good buddy!
this deserves a 7 star, site stifled from 6's for you this week
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Christopher,
thank you for your virtual stars my friend. I am truly grateful for your support and ongoing encouragement.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
The rhythm is a bit unclear but the message is strong. You do not seem to have much confidence in yourself. I'm sure writing poetry will help you. From just reading this you are clearly capable of expressing yourself. You must try and do so in other ways also. I enjoyed the read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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The rhythm is a bit unclear but the message is strong. You do not seem to have much confidence in yourself. I'm sure writing poetry will help you. From just reading this you are clearly capable of expressing yourself. You must try and do so in other ways also. I enjoyed the read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Dorothy,
thanks so much for an insightful review and a generous rating, much appreciated. Take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from jmdg1954
Interesting take on the poem. It is easily identifiable to be about someone else but your note clarifies that. So, as you would want the trust and love from someone else you want it to first start within.
I guess that is something I/we take for granted, now you put the thought iny head. Can build a stronger individual.
James, nicely done. John
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Interesting take on the poem. It is easily identifiable to be about someone else but your note clarifies that. So, as you would want the trust and love from someone else you want it to first start within.
I guess that is something I/we take for granted, now you put the thought iny head. Can build a stronger individual.
James, nicely done. John
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi John,
thank you so much for this wonderful review and the very generous rating, I am very appreciative. To many of us try to love the wrong way around. We can never give genuine, authentic love, if it doesn't first start with ourselves.
Kindest thoughts,
James
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100% my friend, 100%!!!
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer delivers a message that is quite interesting yet deep in content. I'm living proof that you can be your worse enemy. It all boil downs to decisions and choices. I chose the light and so did you my brother. Praise the Lord.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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The writer delivers a message that is quite interesting yet deep in content. I'm living proof that you can be your worse enemy. It all boil downs to decisions and choices. I chose the light and so did you my brother. Praise the Lord.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi RR,
thank you for your insight, we are both living proof, bother. I truly appreciate your review and fine rating, take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from kiwijenny
I walk in the light as He is in the light... 1John 1:7 yay walk in the light choose the light. Flashes of colours....glazed by the light is my favorite line .god bless and thanks for this poem.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I walk in the light as He is in the light... 1John 1:7 yay walk in the light choose the light. Flashes of colours....glazed by the light is my favorite line .god bless and thanks for this poem.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Jenny,
thank you my sister from over the pond, loved the insight and appreciated your review, take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from Jaq Cee
James this is a very poignant and heartfelt poem. We fool ourselves daily
into thinking we are doing the right thing even when we know the heartache that will ensue because of our actions. Like you, I now choose the light. Spent far too long in the dark. lovely flow and rhythm my friend. :) Jaq xx flw an
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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James this is a very poignant and heartfelt poem. We fool ourselves daily
into thinking we are doing the right thing even when we know the heartache that will ensue because of our actions. Like you, I now choose the light. Spent far too long in the dark. lovely flow and rhythm my friend. :) Jaq xx flw an
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Hi Jaq,
you know I just got to ask the flw an reference at the end don't you? Thanks so much for getting what I was trying to say in my poem and thank you for this wonderful review, take care.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
