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Comment from Cumbrianlass
Good alliteration throughout. Clever use of words, too, as in 'luminal life-liquor'. Sums up the vampire's need for blood very well. The author notes made me think! Reincarnation is right - for all eternity!
Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Good alliteration throughout. Clever use of words, too, as in 'luminal life-liquor'. Sums up the vampire's need for blood very well. The author notes made me think! Reincarnation is right - for all eternity!
Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your comments.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from S.Yocom
I enjoyed reading your 5/7/5 poem, ANUPAM SHARMA. You used nice alliteration and the correct number of syllables for each line. It's a scary little poem.
Sally
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I enjoyed reading your 5/7/5 poem, ANUPAM SHARMA. You used nice alliteration and the correct number of syllables for each line. It's a scary little poem.
Sally
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Jackarrie
This is really a brilliant 5-7-5 Poem.
Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
It is very well put together, I love it. Mary
good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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This is really a brilliant 5-7-5 Poem.
Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
It is very well put together, I love it. Mary
good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Wow!I am amazed and so glad.i appreciate your thoughts and 6 stars.it means a lot.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
Comment from ruhama
Outstanding. I am blown away by the alliteration and the picture it evokes.Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
Beautifully crafted and well-honed. congratulations
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Outstanding. I am blown away by the alliteration and the picture it evokes.Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
Beautifully crafted and well-honed. congratulations
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your comments.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from wiljacro
HI! Anupam Sharma. This is a terrific example of how to go about describing the thoughts and desires of a vampire in only 17 syllables and the artwork is the perfect accompaniment. wiljacro.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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HI! Anupam Sharma. This is a terrific example of how to go about describing the thoughts and desires of a vampire in only 17 syllables and the artwork is the perfect accompaniment. wiljacro.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Wow!I am amazed and so glad.i appreciate your thoughts and 6 stars.it means a lot.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
Comment from elchupakabra
I enjoy the inclusion of the artwork and the choice in coloring for your haiku. I'm not the biggest fan of vampires anymore since Twilight and True Blood have come into existence, but I did like the Blade movies and the Tarantino vampire movie with George Clooney that I always forget the name of. Anyways, back to your poem, I like the dark imagery to highlight the subject and the use of the same letter to start the words of the first two lines. It reads easily and is entertaining. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I enjoy the inclusion of the artwork and the choice in coloring for your haiku. I'm not the biggest fan of vampires anymore since Twilight and True Blood have come into existence, but I did like the Blade movies and the Tarantino vampire movie with George Clooney that I always forget the name of. Anyways, back to your poem, I like the dark imagery to highlight the subject and the use of the same letter to start the words of the first two lines. It reads easily and is entertaining. Excellent work.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your sharing of thoughts.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from beccabootie123
profound in its thinking and scrip. enjoyed short and sweet yet says so much. the picture adds dimension. like the rhyming adds impact well done. adele
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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profound in its thinking and scrip. enjoyed short and sweet yet says so much. the picture adds dimension. like the rhyming adds impact well done. adele
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I am amazed and so glad.i appreciate your thoughts and 6 stars.it means a lot.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
Comment from Bayberry
This is an excellent entry for the 5-7-5 contest. It's dark and delicious. Wonderful imagery in both the words and the artwork selected to add to the ambiance.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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This is an excellent entry for the 5-7-5 contest. It's dark and delicious. Wonderful imagery in both the words and the artwork selected to add to the ambiance.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I am happy that you liked this little work.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from JesusLuvsU
An interesting piece of writing! It definitely makes me think, spurring on all types of different emotions in so few words. The picture choice adds to the dark affect and the choice of words further added to it. Well done on your dark piece! God bless :)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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An interesting piece of writing! It definitely makes me think, spurring on all types of different emotions in so few words. The picture choice adds to the dark affect and the choice of words further added to it. Well done on your dark piece! God bless :)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
A very good piece of poem. Interesting and well thought idea to come out with. I really like the whole mystery concept. Nice picture too. Best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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A very good piece of poem. Interesting and well thought idea to come out with. I really like the whole mystery concept. Nice picture too. Best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)