The Old Witch House
A daring young man makes a fatal mistake34 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Oh my goodness! Your stories are so clever, and this is another of your really good ones! The friends weren't friends at all, and that makes the story even scarier! Who to trust?! Well done, excellent writing. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Oh my goodness! Your stories are so clever, and this is another of your really good ones! The friends weren't friends at all, and that makes the story even scarier! Who to trust?! Well done, excellent writing. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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He was definitely set up. But, what goes around, comes around. Witchy poo might get a hankering for those two. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
With Halloween coming soon I'm really in the mood for horror and thriller stories, and you do them so well. Thanks for sharing, it's always a pleasure.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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With Halloween coming soon I'm really in the mood for horror and thriller stories, and you do them so well. Thanks for sharing, it's always a pleasure.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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I like spooky, Ric. Not a blood and guts kind of girl but a good shiver is perfect. Thanks for this. Gretchen
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I'm with you. I like spooky, but hate blood and guts
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good use of the words. What the people said would happen did happen. He saw the dancing girls but only because of the drugged drink. You fit the words in smoothly and told a good story.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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This is a good use of the words. What the people said would happen did happen. He saw the dancing girls but only because of the drugged drink. You fit the words in smoothly and told a good story.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you liked it. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
An excellent story Gretchen, this is a ripper, this boy was lured by two friends who were in reality just agents for the benefit of this old ladies horrible kidnapping habits that were robbing the world of the young. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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An excellent story Gretchen, this is a ripper, this boy was lured by two friends who were in reality just agents for the benefit of this old ladies horrible kidnapping habits that were robbing the world of the young. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thanks, Roy. So glad you liked this. Thanks for this awesome review and the extra star. Gretchen
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Most welcome
Comment from w.j.debi
You are certainly in the Halloween mindset. Another wicked witch and this one eats young men. I wonder what she is paying John and Merwin to bring her her meals. Hehehehe. I wonder if she will eat them one day.
You do an excellent job setting up the scene and the dare given by the other boys. It's hard to wiggle out of it and so one more missing boy.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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You are certainly in the Halloween mindset. Another wicked witch and this one eats young men. I wonder what she is paying John and Merwin to bring her her meals. Hehehehe. I wonder if she will eat them one day.
You do an excellent job setting up the scene and the dare given by the other boys. It's hard to wiggle out of it and so one more missing boy.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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I think John and Merwin were definitely in cahoots with the old witch. Their time is coming. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Mrs. KT
Wonderful story, Gretchen!
It has all the necessary components to scare the "beejeezus" out of readers and a must for Halloween!
I loved your storyline but I truly enjoyed the fact that the old witch knew about John and Merwin. Makes me think those two were in cahoots with the witch!
Much enjoyed!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Wonderful story, Gretchen!
It has all the necessary components to scare the "beejeezus" out of readers and a must for Halloween!
I loved your storyline but I truly enjoyed the fact that the old witch knew about John and Merwin. Makes me think those two were in cahoots with the witch!
Much enjoyed!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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They were definitely in cahoots with the witch. Am currently in the Halloween mood. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another great story about an old witch, Gretchen! This is definitely your forte. Just a delicious read. One sort of guesses the outcome when it comes to naughty boys but that doesn't detract in any way. As ever, the witch's description is spot-on and, although I should be feeling sorry for her victim, the writer always manages to introduce an element of light-heartedness (with the apple and dancing girls) to remind the reader that this is all just plain old fun! Small edits: Gather wood for my fire pit....(y)our friends; I built the bed of stick...(as) per her request. The last line is superb - perfect ending. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Another great story about an old witch, Gretchen! This is definitely your forte. Just a delicious read. One sort of guesses the outcome when it comes to naughty boys but that doesn't detract in any way. As ever, the witch's description is spot-on and, although I should be feeling sorry for her victim, the writer always manages to introduce an element of light-heartedness (with the apple and dancing girls) to remind the reader that this is all just plain old fun! Small edits: Gather wood for my fire pit....(y)our friends; I built the bed of stick...(as) per her request. The last line is superb - perfect ending. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thanks, Debbie. I know it's August, but I'm really thinking about Halloween. Thanks for this. Gretchen
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You can never be too early in your preparations!
Comment from emjaihammond
You have written a story with intrigue and excitement. I knew where the boys were coming from, but even then, it was an exciting read. It holds a lot of intrigue and I liked the way the characters in the story are connecting. The dialogue is very good. I enjoyed.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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You have written a story with intrigue and excitement. I knew where the boys were coming from, but even then, it was an exciting read. It holds a lot of intrigue and I liked the way the characters in the story are connecting. The dialogue is very good. I enjoyed.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from EMB
I used to think of the old lady next to my childhood house as a witch, but she rarely stepped outside. I don't think I would've been able to take this dare. This was an engaging story. :)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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I used to think of the old lady next to my childhood house as a witch, but she rarely stepped outside. I don't think I would've been able to take this dare. This was an engaging story. :)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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I don't know why witches and zombies freak me out but they do. Something about eating and cooking people is just very wrong. I would never have do this either. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from angel123
Your poem was interesting, entertaining and creepy. I enjoyed reading it and I have no suggestions for any changes. Your artwork choice goes well with your story.
Angel123
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Your poem was interesting, entertaining and creepy. I enjoyed reading it and I have no suggestions for any changes. Your artwork choice goes well with your story.
Angel123
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you. Gretchen
