Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

chill, sipping her coffee - I added the comma
flurries this morning, and - added comma
Vivid detail of setting creates mood well
during the night, and she - add comma
play on the phone, but - add comma
emotions like snowflakes - I like that imagery
An emotionally powerful closing
You get inside this woman's innermost thoughts and emotions in a really compelling way :-) Brooke

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 Comment Written 19-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013

Thank you so very much for not holding back on my punctuation. That is what I want in a review. What I need to work on and I know I need to brush up on punctuation and intend to do so with one of the classes. Thank you again.

reply by adewpearl on 19-Sep-2013

I'm so glad you are a writer who appreciates constructive criticism since that is the only way to perfect one's craft. :-) I would love to see you in the SPAG class. We need more people with your attitude.

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

A bit sad to lose what one tries to hold on to. And here it is heartbreaking and send flurries of emotion.
Big effort. The story flows without hiccup and catches the reader.
The language makes it easy to follow and want to comfort the writer.
I like the writing.

Benny Beeharry

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 Comment Written 19-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2013

I do appreciate and thank you for your review. This was hard to post for personal reasons.