Comment from MidnightWriter4U

Excellent

A very funny, nonsense poem. Excellent flow and rhyming scheme. Reminded me of some of Dr. Seus'es (sp?)works. A most enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you!

Steve

reply by MidnightWriter4U on 26-Sep-2013

You are welcome. MN :)

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

This is delightful. I can see why it won. I like the last line quite a lot. Think I would put a comma after 'threes' in the second to last line.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from visionary1234

Exceptional

OMG NO WONDER YOU WON THIS ONE STEVE! Lewis Carroll and Ogden Nash will be saving space for you at their Higher table, methinks! WELL DONE LADDIE! :)s

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Sounds like fun sitting in between those two - will the dormouse and the mad hatter be there too?

Steve

reply by visionary1234 on 25-Sep-2013

AND ME!! DON'T FORGET ME!!!!

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

Ah! Being young. What a delight.
The world is waiting for us.
Beyond our reach and out of sight
We see these things. What is the fuss?

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you, I think!

Steve

Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

Well, I sure couldn't disagree that you have a championship poem here, definitely something I couldn't do. Congratulations. God loves you and I do too. Tagging for miss Evelyn.

I've done all the Private messages allowed for one day so I am making contact this way. Thanks for the review. Urgent Prayer request. I have just been notified Miss Evelyn is having chest pain and they are transferring her from Hiram Shaddox by ambulance. Please take time to pray for her now. i will post updates on her Profile page. God bless. janie

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you.

Sorry to hear Evelyn is not well - I hope for the best.

Steve

Comment from amahra

Excellent

Absolutely loved your poem. Deserved to win. The rhyming was awesome and the rhythm was fine. Just one thing below bothered me. The word terse doesn't seem to belong in that sentence. Terse means brief, short or abrupt. Looked for other meanings and couldn't find one. "The pirates grew abrupt, short, brief, it doesn't make sense. But I still loved the poem.


"...the pirates grew terse,"

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks for the review and the kind words.

re 'terse' Yes, it does mean brief and abrupt but you can also use it to describe a person. Cambridge gives this definition ' using few words, sometimes in a way that seems rude or unfriendly' and that's what I intended here i.e. they were getting irritable in the bathroom queue
In fact it's a marvellous word to use because it not only describes behaviour (not saying much) but also an attitude (rude/unfriendly)

Thanks again.

Steve

reply by amahra on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks for taking the time to clear that up for me. Appreciations. Smile!

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Steve, What a wonderful childs poem...Yes if we could only live on the moon. So very funny and I love the wording. Have to read it my grandkids...Love it... Luff Linda xoo

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks, Linda.

Will definitely read it to my granddaughter next week.

Steve

Comment from pbroussard209

Exceptional

I love nonsense poems, I have to say they are one of my favorite types of poems to read. They are so clever and funny and yours was suburb. Great job.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks for the kind words and the six stars.

Steve

Comment from denhagan

Excellent

This is a nice funny nonsense poem for the contest, written in rhyming couplets with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. Nice picture.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks, Denis.

Steve

reply by denhagan on 27-Sep-2013

You're welcome Steve,
Dennis

Comment from pattipac

Exceptional

Congrats. on your well penned tale of life on the moon. This family of different characters- that any child can realate to- lives an unusaual life on the moon. Excellent word choice and rhyme scheme show much thought, humor, and creativity on the part of the poet.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks, Patti - glad you enjoyed and I appreciate the six shiny stars.

Steve