Unsettled (a nonet)
I know you've had a day like this!!!!23 total reviews
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-crafted writing as melancholy moments pass with the ticking of a clock;
We all have unhappy moments, expressing uneasy thoughts with others helps us cope as days quickly lapse.
May you feel better soon, mystery poet.
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A well-crafted writing as melancholy moments pass with the ticking of a clock;
We all have unhappy moments, expressing uneasy thoughts with others helps us cope as days quickly lapse.
May you feel better soon, mystery poet.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from Eternal Muse
An excellent entry, I love it. So true for many, you just pinpointed it (smile). Try centering it - it would bring up the presentation considerably, IMHO. A beautiful picture to accompany. Terrific verse, should do well in the contest.
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An excellent entry, I love it. So true for many, you just pinpointed it (smile). Try centering it - it would bring up the presentation considerably, IMHO. A beautiful picture to accompany. Terrific verse, should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Many readers will relate to this feeling. The reader-
friendly language makes it easy to comprehend. I like
the way that the words are arranged on the page. The
attached photo is a nice accent. Thank You for your
creation.
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Many readers will relate to this feeling. The reader-
friendly language makes it easy to comprehend. I like
the way that the words are arranged on the page. The
attached photo is a nice accent. Thank You for your
creation.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from IridescentThoughts
Yes, such a day really passes in all lives. Brings back memories. We can't always give reasons as to why we feel down and low spirited. Good luck with writing!
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Yes, such a day really passes in all lives. Brings back memories. We can't always give reasons as to why we feel down and low spirited. Good luck with writing!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from TAB_that's me
I assume the emotion that you write about is just unsettled. nice nonet with the perfect syllable count. Good luck.
~Teresa~
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I assume the emotion that you write about is just unsettled. nice nonet with the perfect syllable count. Good luck.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from michaelcahill
A very wise choice for this feeling that we have all felt. I like how it just dwindles away visually just as the wind that never quite reaches our sails. Have you tried advanced editor to center it? Just a thought. Took me forever to figure it out. Beautiful and thoughtful entry. Well done. Mike
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A very wise choice for this feeling that we have all felt. I like how it just dwindles away visually just as the wind that never quite reaches our sails. Have you tried advanced editor to center it? Just a thought. Took me forever to figure it out. Beautiful and thoughtful entry. Well done. Mike
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Very powerful ending to a beautiful piece of poetry about a day that just does not work for the writer. Yes, i guess we all have encountered such unproductive days when we are not just part of everything. kudos
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Very powerful ending to a beautiful piece of poetry about a day that just does not work for the writer. Yes, i guess we all have encountered such unproductive days when we are not just part of everything. kudos
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author what you quoted so well in you nonet is very good about the emotion of what I call emptiness does occur too many of us.
Good entry
Gert
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Hello author what you quoted so well in you nonet is very good about the emotion of what I call emptiness does occur too many of us.
Good entry
Gert
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from barleygirl
I love this. I've rarely read a poem that "hits-the-nail-on-the-head" as much as this one. This is a testimony to our humanness, & you've presented it without judgment, & with utter honesty. Love this: "I plodded through the day" (this can be the case half the time!) But the true victory of your poem & what sets it above the rest is the last 3 lines. The nonet structure (tho I'm not a fan of convoluted poetry formatting) fits this message perfectly, becuz of the way the last 3 lines fall out . . . giving these 5 words extra emphasis. Great job!
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I love this. I've rarely read a poem that "hits-the-nail-on-the-head" as much as this one. This is a testimony to our humanness, & you've presented it without judgment, & with utter honesty. Love this: "I plodded through the day" (this can be the case half the time!) But the true victory of your poem & what sets it above the rest is the last 3 lines. The nonet structure (tho I'm not a fan of convoluted poetry formatting) fits this message perfectly, becuz of the way the last 3 lines fall out . . . giving these 5 words extra emphasis. Great job!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
Comment from Cookie333
Oh, I think we have all had these days. When you get to the end you wonder what happened to the rest of the day?
Just one thought:
perhaps to center your piece? to enhance presentation?
thank you and best of luck,
karen
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Oh, I think we have all had these days. When you get to the end you wonder what happened to the rest of the day?
Just one thought:
perhaps to center your piece? to enhance presentation?
thank you and best of luck,
karen
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013