Little Mouse
Trick or Treat81 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
A very cute little poem. I had a lighthearted and loving theme. I love the cute picture to, it provides a great visual aid. Well done.
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A very cute little poem. I had a lighthearted and loving theme. I love the cute picture to, it provides a great visual aid. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from Allen Wolfe
First things first, your granddaughter is adorable! Secondly, the poem is very sweet and playful. Line 11 is the only line which is not constructed of 5 syllables. Is there a reason why?
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First things first, your granddaughter is adorable! Secondly, the poem is very sweet and playful. Line 11 is the only line which is not constructed of 5 syllables. Is there a reason why?
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from SimplyaStudent
You write very good children's poetry that has good flow and gentle humor, i truly enjoyed reading this. I look forward to reading more of your work. :-)Ss
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You write very good children's poetry that has good flow and gentle humor, i truly enjoyed reading this. I look forward to reading more of your work. :-)Ss
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Barbara,
This is such a sweet little write, with a wonderful picture of your granddaughter to compliment the piece. Loved the thought of the other animals in the house eyeing the large rodent. A very original, fun, seasonal read, well done, Ridley
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Hello Barbara,
This is such a sweet little write, with a wonderful picture of your granddaughter to compliment the piece. Loved the thought of the other animals in the house eyeing the large rodent. A very original, fun, seasonal read, well done, Ridley
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from jadapenn
You have a cute little granddaughter, Barbie. Does she have brown eyes like her gran? Loved your little mouse poem. It reads well. You know, I miss Missywriter98 - little Melissa who passed on last year. I hope she is happy with her sister. She was possibly the most positive person I ever met. Keep well. luv jada
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You have a cute little granddaughter, Barbie. Does she have brown eyes like her gran? Loved your little mouse poem. It reads well. You know, I miss Missywriter98 - little Melissa who passed on last year. I hope she is happy with her sister. She was possibly the most positive person I ever met. Keep well. luv jada
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
This is a lovely poem about your granddaughter and the story is vivid. As a grandparent, I can relate to every word. The accessories made the poem more meaningful.
Curtis
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Barbara,
This is a lovely poem about your granddaughter and the story is vivid. As a grandparent, I can relate to every word. The accessories made the poem more meaningful.
Curtis
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from ragamuffin
Adorable, both the photo and the poem. Brings memories of my own kids and grandkids. A very pleasant piece that brought a laugh and a smile from my lips. A very fun and clever read that flows well and is quite enjoyable.
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Adorable, both the photo and the poem. Brings memories of my own kids and grandkids. A very pleasant piece that brought a laugh and a smile from my lips. A very fun and clever read that flows well and is quite enjoyable.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from misscookie
I fell in love with the cuties mouse I every seen
I don't like them for real.
I thought your poem was a delight to read.
Thank you for sharing
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I fell in love with the cuties mouse I every seen
I don't like them for real.
I thought your poem was a delight to read.
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
Comment from CrystieCookie999
5 stars for cuteness. I would capitalize Mouse after Minnie. I think this is sweet and would look nice on a poster or card on your granddaughter's birthday, or the next family occasion, whenever that would be.
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5 stars for cuteness. I would capitalize Mouse after Minnie. I think this is sweet and would look nice on a poster or card on your granddaughter's birthday, or the next family occasion, whenever that would be.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
Comment from allborn66
This is a delightful poem. I love the reaction from the animals. The word choice is wonderful. The rhyming scheme is good.
Barbara
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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This is a delightful poem. I love the reaction from the animals. The word choice is wonderful. The rhyming scheme is good.
Barbara
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.