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Comment from vapros
This is an exciting story, very well told and with a surprise happy ending. What more can a story offer to readers? Genuinely good news, since you are still here. There is a moral here, as well. Beware with whom you trust your nuts!
Bill
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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This is an exciting story, very well told and with a surprise happy ending. What more can a story offer to readers? Genuinely good news, since you are still here. There is a moral here, as well. Beware with whom you trust your nuts!
Bill
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you Vapros. For sure!
Comment from Siouxsun
This must of slipped through the cracks. When I give a four because of corrections needed I try to make a practice of going back to re rate after the revisions. Better late than never but I apologize for the delay. =)
This is a wonderful entry. My heart was with you all the way. Your thought process of one going through this type of experience was well described.
1.where m7y brother
2.very large medical expenses,- no comma needed
3.Who was it benefitting, if I died anyway.-[benefiting, one "T", and sentence needs a question mark]
4.I was going to call on[the] next day,- can eliminate "on " also.
Miracle or mistake it was a triumphant journey. I am happy you are doing well. Congratulations and good luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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This must of slipped through the cracks. When I give a four because of corrections needed I try to make a practice of going back to re rate after the revisions. Better late than never but I apologize for the delay. =)
This is a wonderful entry. My heart was with you all the way. Your thought process of one going through this type of experience was well described.
1.where m7y brother
2.very large medical expenses,- no comma needed
3.Who was it benefitting, if I died anyway.-[benefiting, one "T", and sentence needs a question mark]
4.I was going to call on[the] next day,- can eliminate "on " also.
Miracle or mistake it was a triumphant journey. I am happy you are doing well. Congratulations and good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you Siouxsun. I fixed them, I appreciate you catching the typos, and your time reviewing.
Comment from Matoshka
Praise God, it was a miracle, send by the Lord our God, I have no doubt whatsoever. The electricity you felt was the healing that happened, this I know for sure. I praise God, and pray many blessings upon you, for you have such a strong testimony that may bring someone to the Lord. I believe in Miracles and know they exit. God Bless you for sharing and many blessings
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Praise God, it was a miracle, send by the Lord our God, I have no doubt whatsoever. The electricity you felt was the healing that happened, this I know for sure. I praise God, and pray many blessings upon you, for you have such a strong testimony that may bring someone to the Lord. I believe in Miracles and know they exit. God Bless you for sharing and many blessings
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you Matoshka, I believe that too. I appreciate you comments and well wishes.
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You are so welcome. I loved it. Blessings
Comment from mrsmajor
Hi,
What a wonderful story, and I'm so glad that things turned out well for you...I have read things like your experience before, and I prefer to believe it was a Medical Mistake...
But it really doesn't matter since you are alive and well.
I'm not being picky, but I did see some tiny things that if you read the piece again, I'm sure you would notice..
However, this is a story well worth 5 stars...Thanks so much for sharing this with us, again, I'm so glad things went well...
Hugs,
Victoria
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Hi,
What a wonderful story, and I'm so glad that things turned out well for you...I have read things like your experience before, and I prefer to believe it was a Medical Mistake...
But it really doesn't matter since you are alive and well.
I'm not being picky, but I did see some tiny things that if you read the piece again, I'm sure you would notice..
However, this is a story well worth 5 stars...Thanks so much for sharing this with us, again, I'm so glad things went well...
Hugs,
Victoria
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much Victoria.
You're very welcome!
Hugs!
Comment from Gungalo
Wow Tom, that's quite a story you tell. It must have been hell waiting for that op. Thank goodness you had decided against it, you would be a different man today. I'm glad you had your miracle ... or not ... and you are with us today.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Wow Tom, that's quite a story you tell. It must have been hell waiting for that op. Thank goodness you had decided against it, you would be a different man today. I'm glad you had your miracle ... or not ... and you are with us today.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much, Gungalo. I'm pretty sure I had made the right decision, no matter what happened. I appreciate you comments and taking the time to read it. I don't usually write prose.
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I know you don't which is why I read it. LOL.
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:0))
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LOL.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Imagine my surprise when I opened this post from the indomitable poet, Mr. 'T', only to find a work of non-fictional prose. That being said...
I liked the fact that you left it up for the readers to decide whether or not your turnabout prognosis was a miracle from the hands of God, Himself, or just some medical malfunction and a false diagnosis. Who can say for sure?
The main thing is that you survived your harrowing ordeal, and are still here to grace us with your talented poetic efforts, and the pleasure of your friendship. To me, that is the most important thing of all...
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Imagine my surprise when I opened this post from the indomitable poet, Mr. 'T', only to find a work of non-fictional prose. That being said...
I liked the fact that you left it up for the readers to decide whether or not your turnabout prognosis was a miracle from the hands of God, Himself, or just some medical malfunction and a false diagnosis. Who can say for sure?
The main thing is that you survived your harrowing ordeal, and are still here to grace us with your talented poetic efforts, and the pleasure of your friendship. To me, that is the most important thing of all...
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you Dean, I really appreciate your sentiments, your right, I don't usually write prose, as I'm not that good a writer. When I do, it's usually autobiographical. Your friendship and support are truly what it's all about.
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I thought your prose was exceptionally well written. Whoever said you can't write prose is sadly mistaken.
Comment from emjaihammond
This was a beautifully written story of your life-changing experience. It is profoundly amazing just to read about. I can't imagine what it must of been like to have lived it. I do believe in the power of prayer and I also believe in a second opinion when receiving this kind of news. I am so happy for you that it turned out differently than it first appeared. I watched my brother die of a rare form of prostate cancer last year. He asked many of the same questions you wrote about. Unfortunately, he succumbed to the disease. Thanks for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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This was a beautifully written story of your life-changing experience. It is profoundly amazing just to read about. I can't imagine what it must of been like to have lived it. I do believe in the power of prayer and I also believe in a second opinion when receiving this kind of news. I am so happy for you that it turned out differently than it first appeared. I watched my brother die of a rare form of prostate cancer last year. He asked many of the same questions you wrote about. Unfortunately, he succumbed to the disease. Thanks for sharing your story.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much emjailhammond, for sharing your comments and experience top. I am very please with your award of so many stars.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Avoid excessive use of 'was' For ex:
"In my heart, I knew something WAS bad, but I
WAS afraid to really find
out what WAS wrong. I guess
I WAS just a coward at heart.
CONSIDER:
"In my heart, I expected something bad. But being afraid to find out, I resigned myself to the role of coward.
"... to talk about it. OMIT to her.
"No big deal(;) been done a thousand times.
Wordy..break it up, for ex:
"It involved removing... near the groin.
CONSIDER
"It involved removing both my testicles, then cleaning out any cancerous cells in the groin cavity (including the wall lining between that area and the stomach. After replacing it with a mesh), all my lymph glands, located under my arms and down my legs near the groin would be removed.
Lockheed Martin
Avoid excessive use of subject first sentences, for ex:
"We called him Uncle Lee.
He was more of an example
He died in 1987 of prostate cancer.
My mother moved down to Tucson,
My sister even held her wedding there,
He laid there in his hospital bed,
He planned every detail of his funeral mass too,
He died in the arms of his sister,
If true...great!!
Regards:
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Avoid excessive use of 'was' For ex:
"In my heart, I knew something WAS bad, but I
WAS afraid to really find
out what WAS wrong. I guess
I WAS just a coward at heart.
CONSIDER:
"In my heart, I expected something bad. But being afraid to find out, I resigned myself to the role of coward.
"... to talk about it. OMIT to her.
"No big deal(;) been done a thousand times.
Wordy..break it up, for ex:
"It involved removing... near the groin.
CONSIDER
"It involved removing both my testicles, then cleaning out any cancerous cells in the groin cavity (including the wall lining between that area and the stomach. After replacing it with a mesh), all my lymph glands, located under my arms and down my legs near the groin would be removed.
Lockheed Martin
Avoid excessive use of subject first sentences, for ex:
"We called him Uncle Lee.
He was more of an example
He died in 1987 of prostate cancer.
My mother moved down to Tucson,
My sister even held her wedding there,
He laid there in his hospital bed,
He planned every detail of his funeral mass too,
He died in the arms of his sister,
If true...great!!
Regards:
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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My gosh, Stephen. Here I thought I was doing pretty good getting through this fairly coherently without a ton of typos. I don't claim to be a writer. I don't expect this even to win since I can't even win a poetry contest. But I thought I had a story to tell. That's my motivation. Do you think these things will hurt me greatly? I ask, because I appreciate your opinion, but this seems like a lot of rewrite.
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Dear Rom: Wait rill all the reviews are in, then decide. As for myself there is a fine line between STYLE and COMPOSITION.
Cheers: Steve C
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Should be TOM..typo..sorry.
Steve
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Thanks Stephen. Good advice, as aways.
Comment from adewpearl
hold that light a little closer, Stacy - add comma for direct address
I was send home - sent
miracle or medical mistake - I'm with you, either way, congratulations on being alive, my talented friend -I'm so glad you're still here with your beautiful photographs and writing for me to enjoy :-) Brooke
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hold that light a little closer, Stacy - add comma for direct address
I was send home - sent
miracle or medical mistake - I'm with you, either way, congratulations on being alive, my talented friend -I'm so glad you're still here with your beautiful photographs and writing for me to enjoy :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Wow! You are a fast reader. OK, I fixed those typos. Appreciate it. As to that comment about still being around, me too!
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Yeah, I have always been a fast reader, just by nature. Now, give me a math problem to do and the tortoise comes out in me. LOL
