The New Year's Rescue
Super Pig must rescue a frog on New Year's day17 total reviews
Comment from jmdg1954
You have a knack for the use of "creative license" through and through. I find your Super Pig stories fun and enjoyabl to read. Your charectors seem to come to life in your stories, and not only as to whst is written.
I can learn a lot from studying what you write! You are a good creator of stories for children.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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You have a knack for the use of "creative license" through and through. I find your Super Pig stories fun and enjoyabl to read. Your charectors seem to come to life in your stories, and not only as to whst is written.
I can learn a lot from studying what you write! You are a good creator of stories for children.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much John. Rox
Comment from Smoothiecool
great children story easy to read and follow with lots of adventure
couple typo errors second line in insert "of" sparkling snow
further down "Justus" Frog missed space
can't see any thing else at this read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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great children story easy to read and follow with lots of adventure
couple typo errors second line in insert "of" sparkling snow
further down "Justus" Frog missed space
can't see any thing else at this read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Will fix that error. Thanks so much Smoothie. =} ROX
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welcome...SC
Comment from Cindy Warren
Those were some very lucky frogs. They could have been frozen till spring. I've heard frogs can survive that, but it doesn't sound like much fun. Much better to sip hot cocoa in the barn with Super Pig. Cute, fun story.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Those were some very lucky frogs. They could have been frozen till spring. I've heard frogs can survive that, but it doesn't sound like much fun. Much better to sip hot cocoa in the barn with Super Pig. Cute, fun story.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Frogs do freeze in the winter when they hibernate. My frogs should have been doing that, but they want to play instead of sleep. Like most kids. =} Thanks so much Cindy
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, roxanna, you did an excellent job writing this super pig adventure where super pig had to rely on help from her other friends to recue the frogs. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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this is very well written, roxanna, you did an excellent job writing this super pig adventure where super pig had to rely on help from her other friends to recue the frogs. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much. Rox
Comment from Cajungirl
This is a very wonderful story. The dialog between the animals was very good. I found the story interesting from the very beginning. Only thing check your last sentence the Farmers
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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This is a very wonderful story. The dialog between the animals was very good. I found the story interesting from the very beginning. Only thing check your last sentence the Farmers
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Yes I was told about that and have fixed it. I made a number of errors. It's amazing how much I miss when I read them over. It take another eye to see it. Thank you so much
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I also am not good a reviewing for my own errors. I once left off the word WORK so my correspondence read THANK YOU FOR YOUR HARD
Needless to say, my co-workers laughed all week about that. :}
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Comment from evrenios
Cute children's story that will charm young children I am sure - especially if you get the right illustrator.
There are a few places that you could work on that are a little inaccurate: over night (should be overnight); scrapping (should be scraping) webbed foot wavy from (should be waving from ) lay in the hay, under blankets (omit the comma here) Farmer's (not possessive here, merely pleural) but tot he Farmers (but to the Farmers)
Once you have checked for inaccuracies this will be a gem!
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Cute children's story that will charm young children I am sure - especially if you get the right illustrator.
There are a few places that you could work on that are a little inaccurate: over night (should be overnight); scrapping (should be scraping) webbed foot wavy from (should be waving from ) lay in the hay, under blankets (omit the comma here) Farmer's (not possessive here, merely pleural) but tot he Farmers (but to the Farmers)
Once you have checked for inaccuracies this will be a gem!
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much. I will fix those errors right away. =} rox
Comment from country ranch writer
The last sentence needs to be but to the Farmers a typo, so when you get a chance re-read this last sentence and you will see the typo
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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The last sentence needs to be but to the Farmers a typo, so when you get a chance re-read this last sentence and you will see the typo
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you, I fixed it. =} Rox
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