The Trining
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "DISILLUSIONMENT"A man must discover his identity and destiny.
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Comment from debhuitt
I was delighted to be able to read another chapter of your book. I have been very interested in the progression of your story. I felt like I knew everything you were trying to get across here and was interested in the part about the child coming into play. It was the first I'd been introduced to the child. Your writing style and ideas are so original and fresh that this story just gets better as it continues. I would make one suggestion though, watch those run-on sentences. I know it's hard when trying to get a point across. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I was delighted to be able to read another chapter of your book. I have been very interested in the progression of your story. I felt like I knew everything you were trying to get across here and was interested in the part about the child coming into play. It was the first I'd been introduced to the child. Your writing style and ideas are so original and fresh that this story just gets better as it continues. I would make one suggestion though, watch those run-on sentences. I know it's hard when trying to get a point across. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Oh, my goodness! Thanks for that warning. I see them so much in others' postings, chastise them for it unremittingly. That's because I am so susceptible to them myself. I'm even a run-on talker, when I'm urged out of my reticence to start talking!
After all that, you'd think I'd be more observant for what's right under my nose! Dear, Deb! Thank you for the 6 stars! That's so kind of you.
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Anytime man.
Comment from c_lucas
One who speaks the truth does not have to remember the lies he told. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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One who speaks the truth does not have to remember the lies he told. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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But, it's not bad to keep a couple of them in the back of your mind, just to be on the safe side. Thanks, Charlie.
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you're welcome, Jay. Charlie
Comment from dreamin'
That's what happens when you involve someone else's children. I was wondering if Doc would ever tell how he got there. Well done, Jay. You've ripped a hole in a friendship that happened too soon. You've allowed the truth to come out. Now we wait and see what comes of it.
No edits. I just enjoyed it.
Debbie
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reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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That's what happens when you involve someone else's children. I was wondering if Doc would ever tell how he got there. Well done, Jay. You've ripped a hole in a friendship that happened too soon. You've allowed the truth to come out. Now we wait and see what comes of it.
No edits. I just enjoyed it.
Debbie
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Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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I'm so glad you caught that, Debbie! I was so afraid that the reader would wonder what Klasco's being such a drama "king" about. I love the slant you put on your reviews. Thank you!
Comment from Ritsal
Another enjoyable chapter that captured and held my attention. I'm curious as to what we'll discover in Kabeez. Good job as usual.
Best wishes,
Rita
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reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Another enjoyable chapter that captured and held my attention. I'm curious as to what we'll discover in Kabeez. Good job as usual.
Best wishes,
Rita
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Comment Written 30-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Wit-ches! mwahahaha. Thanks Rita, for being a regular here. I don't know whether I told you how much I appreciate your being here. So, I'm saying it now!