The Trining
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Comment from GWHARGIS
I have one request, just a pet peeve of mine. The pictures are distracting. Not because I don't like pictures, but because they make me think of other characters from other shows and movies. I like the battle pictures, the landscapes, even the horse pictures. I don't know why it bothers me, but I guess I get a preconceived idea of who these people are. I like to build the character around what you have given me. Remember how I told you I thought John Rhys Davies should play Klasco? That's the kind of reader I am. I think you like honesty in your reviews. Some people use pictures of actors and I let it go, because I am not invested in their work. I am totally invested here. You write so well, you don't need to show me what Glnot looks like. I am casting him as I write this. LOL.
On to the review: I liked the way the brothers told Drtx about their inner problem. I kind of felt like they were letting him know they felt a bit deceived. The part about the dreams they each had, led me to believe either they were all suffering from mass hallucinations or this guy is unearthly powerful and they are about to start the battle of Armegdon. This chapter wasn't long but gave me enough information to chew on and now sets the stage for the brothers and Drtx's future relationship.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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I have one request, just a pet peeve of mine. The pictures are distracting. Not because I don't like pictures, but because they make me think of other characters from other shows and movies. I like the battle pictures, the landscapes, even the horse pictures. I don't know why it bothers me, but I guess I get a preconceived idea of who these people are. I like to build the character around what you have given me. Remember how I told you I thought John Rhys Davies should play Klasco? That's the kind of reader I am. I think you like honesty in your reviews. Some people use pictures of actors and I let it go, because I am not invested in their work. I am totally invested here. You write so well, you don't need to show me what Glnot looks like. I am casting him as I write this. LOL.
On to the review: I liked the way the brothers told Drtx about their inner problem. I kind of felt like they were letting him know they felt a bit deceived. The part about the dreams they each had, led me to believe either they were all suffering from mass hallucinations or this guy is unearthly powerful and they are about to start the battle of Armegdon. This chapter wasn't long but gave me enough information to chew on and now sets the stage for the brothers and Drtx's future relationship.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thank you SO much for your candid opinion of the picture. At first I thought you meant my written imagery. And, I DO agree with you about the picture. Yes it is supposed to be Glnot Rhuether. I wasn't thinking of the reader's visualization of HIM. I was thinking about characters active in the current chapter. I will work on finding another picture. Not easy. I have as much trouble with that as the editing of the chapter. Thanks again, Gretchen.
Comment from c_lucas
Evil has visit each of the three men and they reveal their dream/vision. plans are set for the final day of the trip. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Evil has visit each of the three men and they reveal their dream/vision. plans are set for the final day of the trip. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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I thank you, Charlie. We'll see how it plays out.
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You're welcome, Jay. Charlie
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 24 of the book The Trining The Last Leg of Their Journey to Camp Kabeez "THE VISIONS OF THE BROTHERS PROFUE" This is another one of those excellent chapters you have created here, my friend. Solid, measured and just about perfect. I enjoy your work (when I am allowed) and look forward to the next chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Chapter 24 of the book The Trining The Last Leg of Their Journey to Camp Kabeez "THE VISIONS OF THE BROTHERS PROFUE" This is another one of those excellent chapters you have created here, my friend. Solid, measured and just about perfect. I enjoy your work (when I am allowed) and look forward to the next chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Chase (?). I'm so happy you liked this. Hope to have you come back again and again.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from CR Delport
It was quite strange that they had the same dream or vision with the same message. Another interesting installment of this well written story.
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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It was quite strange that they had the same dream or vision with the same message. Another interesting installment of this well written story.
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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CR, thank you! Yes, dual dreams -- that pushes you right against the wall of believability, doesn't it?
Comment from Hareem.S
This is a very good fanatsy fiction story. I like the short story which has some very good dialogues. The notes at the end also help the reader a lot.
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This is a very good fanatsy fiction story. I like the short story which has some very good dialogues. The notes at the end also help the reader a lot.
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2014
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Of course you know this isn't a short story, don't you? It's part of a novel. Thanks for dropping by, Hareem. Hope to see you here again.