Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Max Edon
What a lovely little poem. So full of pain and heartache, yet it ends on a positive note. I loved the line 'Cold was her heart for the man she had loved'.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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What a lovely little poem. So full of pain and heartache, yet it ends on a positive note. I loved the line 'Cold was her heart for the man she had loved'.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Comment from Kingsland
The picture of the black rose in decay really adds to the thoughts in this poem. The poem is well written with good emotions in its poetic verve. I enjoyed reading this well written poetic message... John
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The picture of the black rose in decay really adds to the thoughts in this poem. The poem is well written with good emotions in its poetic verve. I enjoyed reading this well written poetic message... John
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Thanks john
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is always so sad, a break-up of a relationship. But, time is the best healer, they say. Your words are well chosen and tug at the reader's heartstrings. The picture is precious - the bleeding rose.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
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This is always so sad, a break-up of a relationship. But, time is the best healer, they say. Your words are well chosen and tug at the reader's heartstrings. The picture is precious - the bleeding rose.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you
Comment from playinaround
Better to have loved... So true and so sad. This is a beautiful poem and so well written.. Perfect picture for this write. Well presented. Thank you for sharing!
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Better to have loved... So true and so sad. This is a beautiful poem and so well written.. Perfect picture for this write. Well presented. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Comment from Smoothiecool
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the break up of the love between two
the game once played out no cold
good visual to portray message
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
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your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the break up of the love between two
the game once played out no cold
good visual to portray message
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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welcome..SC
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, deepwater, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the way the loss of love was danced around until only friendship was left behind
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this is very well written, deepwater, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the way the loss of love was danced around until only friendship was left behind
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Comment from T. J. Hamilton
Yes indeed. Well written, and well received by anyone who has ever experienced a break up. The rhythm and flow was great. I think this has earned its recognized status. -T. J. Hamilton
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Yes indeed. Well written, and well received by anyone who has ever experienced a break up. The rhythm and flow was great. I think this has earned its recognized status. -T. J. Hamilton
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you TJ
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your poem is very good, and what it is saying is so true. To go through life not knowing the joy of love would be an empty life. Even if it didn't last, it was there and you felt it for a while. Excellent poem and a joy to read. xsx Sandra
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Your poem is very good, and what it is saying is so true. To go through life not knowing the joy of love would be an empty life. Even if it didn't last, it was there and you felt it for a while. Excellent poem and a joy to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Pyrrho
Usually I ignore the illustrations on Fan Story because I am one of the few who find they subtract rather than add to poetry. I poem is a poem and a good poem paints a thousand pictures. To limit the my imagination by forcing but one picture on me stops an interaction between me and the poet which I enjoy and the poet can only imagine. It stops my visuals (which are my enjoyment) and takes from my enjoyment.
However, the black rose with blood a pricker beats any image I could conjure up.
Usually I offer constructive criticism based on my concept of a good (5*) poem but your post conjures up thoughts of a 6* rating. I do not offer one only because your switch from a first-person presentation in line one to a third-person presentation in line three was a disturbing transition and continued to be through my third and fourth readings.
You may have use such a switch for effect or for ease of wording, but it did not work for me.
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Usually I ignore the illustrations on Fan Story because I am one of the few who find they subtract rather than add to poetry. I poem is a poem and a good poem paints a thousand pictures. To limit the my imagination by forcing but one picture on me stops an interaction between me and the poet which I enjoy and the poet can only imagine. It stops my visuals (which are my enjoyment) and takes from my enjoyment.
However, the black rose with blood a pricker beats any image I could conjure up.
Usually I offer constructive criticism based on my concept of a good (5*) poem but your post conjures up thoughts of a 6* rating. I do not offer one only because your switch from a first-person presentation in line one to a third-person presentation in line three was a disturbing transition and continued to be through my third and fourth readings.
You may have use such a switch for effect or for ease of wording, but it did not work for me.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
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Thanks
Comment from persevere
Wow, it takes courage to acknowledge that one has reached the point of no return. There is no quick fix for a broken heart and,as you have succinctly stated,one must just move on.
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Wow, it takes courage to acknowledge that one has reached the point of no return. There is no quick fix for a broken heart and,as you have succinctly stated,one must just move on.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you
