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Life, Love, and Other Disasters

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A collection of poems on these themes

54 total reviews 
Comment from JeanneHP
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Loved it, loved it. Face death square in the face and tell it to get lost. This one put a smile on my face. The wording and rhyming are perfect. I must have my husband read this one. Thanks for the laugh. :-) Jeanne

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2015
    Thanks, jeanne.

    Really just saying 'Do not go gentle...'

    Steve
Comment from Rubylou
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I really like the way you told him. LOL You let him know three's no messin' with you!
Great rhyme in quatrains and packed with laughs. Very nicely done.
Rubylou

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2015
    Thank you. I keep a spare scythe behind the door so at least we'll be evenly matched!

    Steve
Comment from nancyjam
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You tell him, Steve. Once again your cleverly
Rhymed lines are a gift of enjoyment to your readers.
This is very cute in the dialogue format. Nancy

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Nancy - glad you enjoyed.

    Steve
Comment from giraffmang
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Nicely done.

I had to laugh at this one. Great imagery and very funny.

If only this could be done.
For some reason I was reminded of Bill & Ted playing Twister with Death...

Great job.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2015
    Thank you!

    Steve
Comment from mountainwriter49
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Hi, Steve
OMG, I am still laughing at this one. It's priceless! You've a wonderful gift of humor. The poem flows wonderfully, except I did hesitate in S2-L2. The end rhymes are perfect and the resolution of the poem is perfect.

May I suggest a slight tweak to S2-L2 as follows?
With yer [dang] bloomin' ten-foot knife,

A fun read this afternoon!
Ray

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Ray - glad you enjoyed.

    Steve
Comment from Glasstruth
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Great picture. That's the attitude. Tell Death to get lost cause you livin' to do. The second verse took a positive turn from doom and gloom. Short, but very powerful. Les

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Les.

    Steve
Comment from Zue65
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I like the funny way you presented this poem. It did elicit the fun, this poem intend it to be. the lines too are quite funny and even though the subject is about death, it is not even scary and the dread is converted to a smile. Thanks for sharing, God bless.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2015
    Thank you!

    Steve
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Steve,

What a hoot. No time to cork off just yet. This fella doesn't look like anyone I want to tangle with. He does look fool of doom and gloom.

Love the dialect and rhyming---right on target. Enjoyable read.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Jax - glad you enjoyed.

    Steve
Comment from Irish Rain
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Ha ha...this sounds like me! I refuse to hear what I don't want to hear, and death can go elsewhere, I plan to live to be 112...was 102...but I decided to throw in an extra decade! I love this!

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thank you.

    I think the main thing is not to throw in the towel.

    Steve
reply by Irish Rain on 07-Jan-2015
    That is so true...blessings!
Comment from seaglass
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I love these Rhyming Quatrains. The accent really makes it effective, painting an image of a very tough old crusty gentlemen.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the kind words.

    Steve