Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hey Dean,
Boy, anyone who had ever had to go under the knife will appreciate this sobering theme!
There are any number of frightening scenarios that go along with that experience and you, my friend, have exposed a grisly one with this story...help!

Another great installment, Dean, nice work.
Bill

I'll have to look back through some of my flash fiction horror stories and see if I have anything that might complement your book. I'll be in touch.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Great, Bill. No contributors yet, but hopefully it will pick up soon. I very much appreciate your comments and review. Something very similar to this happened to me, only not nearly as sinister, lol...~Dean

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

You really had me with this one, once the beeping starting I was searching all over my computer for the sound. I even checked my cell phone. YOU STINKER, I know you enjoy doing this too me. LOL

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Heh-heh, I enjoy doing it to anyone who cares enough to read my tiny tales of terror, Barbara, and you are certainly no exception, my friend. I try to use the sound FX to draw the reader in, make them feel more as if they're there -- a part of the story -- rather than simply reading it.

Much obliged for the awesome feedback, and the laugh, lol... ~Dean ;)

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Oh.......I never want to go in
hospital again - what horror...
if the cutting didn't kill her then
the shock would.

well written, Dean.

Margaret

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks for taking a loo at this for me, Margaret, and for your comments as well. As always, I sincerely appreciate it, my dear friend. :)

~Dean

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Ouch! That's going to hurt. A surgical nightmare. As always the grim and gruesome come through. I thought it was the tension of the worry, but you turned worry, then relief, into sudden terror with the deft hand of a sadistic surgeon.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks, Tom. I think a key element to making flash fiction successful, especially flash horror fiction, is to take a relatively normal circumstance and setting, then drop the bomb on your readers. Hopefully I was able to do that here.

Thanks very much for your review...~Dean

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

That's unique. Having other Writer's contribute to your book. Easy to see why this is an All Time Best. Story line easy to follow. Action flows smoothly. Picture adds depth to this short and sweet little tale. And, it is a horror story. Those are always enjoyable. Write on.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks very much for taking an interest in this series of tiny terror tales, Brett. Your feedback and comments are invaluable to me, and I certainly appreciate them. ~Dean

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

You had me wondering how they couldn't know she was awake. Naturally, one expects them to find out at the last minute. But, that revelation that the team knew to make a deep cut despite her consciousness is right on the money. Good flash, good horror.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thank you very much, Mark. I am happy to know that you enjoyed the story, my friend. Much obliged. ~Dean

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Dean. That would have to be the scariest happening apart from being buried alive in my opinion. I faint when I have to get a needle, let alone that! Great work, I really enjoy this series. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks, Fez, I'm really happy to know that you're enjoying this tiny snippets of terror, my friend. As always, I sincerely appreciate your comments, mate. ~Dean

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

LOL. That picture had me laughing right off the bat, Dean. Uh oh, until I got down to the fair maiden tied up then it wasn't so amusing.

Ooooooh, very creepy indeed, master of the macabre. That would be just so awful to be awake during surgery. Eeeeeeeeee.

Excellent addition to your book of tiny tales but BIG terrors.

Super job.

Gloria

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks so much, Gloria. I'm very glad you liked it. :) ~Dean

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Another scary one. Will written. I have a recurrent dream I might try in this form someday. I'll at least give it a try. I very much enjoy a challenge. Take care, my. friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

I'd really love to see what you might come up with, Debbie. I'm quite sure you have it in you. Everyone does...

Thanks so much for your outstanding review...~Dean

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Upon realization that the nurse knows - now that is one cold cut as in chilling, not bologna. His eyes in the light dilated - she notices that he is anesthetized completely? It threw me as under the harsh lights, his pupils constricting would be more a sign of life. Or do they constrict naturally at death? In any case, another excellent flash fiction.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015

In death, our pupils are fixed and dilated. Strong narcotics have a similar effect, like those used by anesthesiologists. Some drugs can paralyze the human body causing the heart rate to drip so low as to mimic death, dilated pupils and all.

Neuromuscular blocking agents bind to acetylcholine receptors postsynaptically and inhibit the action of acetylcholine. This blocks neuromuscular transmission and causes paralysis of the muscle.

Neuromuscular blocking agents are used as an adjunct to anesthesia, only when artificial ventilation is available, to produce muscle relaxation in order to prevent movement of muscle during surgery. That's where this poor doomed soul finds herself in the story.

Thanks very much for the review and comments, Ed. This is one nurse with a bedside manner no one would want!

~Dean