Comment from thee-name

Excellent

Excellent poem. Seen no mistakes. I counted 100 words to. Writing was interesting.

We swore an oath. before God, we declared our love to the world.

I'll keep my solemn oath
till death do us part.

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Good, I'm glad to know you counted them too. I did, several times - by hand - before submitting it. Thanks for having my back.

reply by thee-name on 27-May-2015

thank you!

reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Um-m-m-m-mmmmmmmmm...

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Well written and great photos! I think that the husband was jealous and betrayed. He'll teach them a lesson about life and death... Shine the light in evilness. God sees. Where was she when he needed help? Did he forget his meds? Lives lost and destroyed. No more campfires, BBQ's and s'mores for them. flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

No, their campfire days are no s'more...heh-heh.
Thanks for reading, Nancy. I sincerely appreciate you doing so...

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Creative Writer defines justice through their own sworn commitments this particular case his wife Found to be untrustworthy story evolves with her and new mate joined being shoveled with dirt Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Yeah, that's about the long and short of it, TPAC.
Thanks for your time...

Comment from Antoine Charlemaine

Excellent

Gosh! That's blood curdling. Being buried alive must be a fear shared globally by every human, surely? You brought the true horror of this terrible situation to a new level with the setting for this story. Wow. Talk about vengeance! Thanks, and all the best with the competition.

Anthony

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you for taking time out to read & review the story, Antoine. I very much appreciate your time...

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 27-May-2015

You're very welcome.

Comment from joann r romei

Excellent

some will say she got what she deserved, i dont know why but this actually reads like a real life story of some of the crazy people we have in our society.good luck

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

Thank you for reading, Joann.
I do appreciate your opinion, and your time...

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Jeez! Remind me never to piss you off!
Yikes!
Let's see... you put arsenic in the the number one writer's drink... you buried the cheating wife...
you...
oh man...
you're an interesting man, Dean. lol
I'm going to learn how to do this... (believe it or not)...
and you've GOT to teach me how to post these photos... awesome. definitely.
Cat

 Comment Written 27-May-2015

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reply by the author on 27-May-2015

I'll be glad to teach you how to do the pictures and so on, Cat. Just drop me a message in my inbox and I'll walk you through it step by step.
Thank you very much for your encouraging review. I'm glad the story...entertained you. ~Me

reply by I am Cat on 27-May-2015

Well.. that, and it scared the crap out of me! LOL

reply by the author on 27-May-2015

:} **Grinchy Grin**

reply by I am Cat on 27-May-2015

Ah, a Seuss fan as well?
Poe and Seuss, my favs!

Comment from Stacia Ann

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this work! Very powerful indeed, scary, more Edgar Allen Poe than Stephen King in its creepiness:)
The visuals are very strong and add to the poem well. The image of hate, rather than love, burning brightly is particularly compelling. We can see why the wife cheated on this guy!
A couple of questions:
Why, in the description, is it "Karma's a bitc..." rather than simply "bitch"? Is this a typo or to avoid a language warning? If the latter, I'm not sure that would be enough to warrant a warning; or you could consider going forward and giving a warning for language, anyway, as there's already one for violence (go all out:)
Just a consideration.
Thanks for sharing this!
Stacia

 Comment Written 26-May-2015

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reply by the author on 26-May-2015

Thanks for your suggestions and thoughtful comments in your review, Stacia Ann. I thought perhaps that word would put a few people off their feed, so to speak, and they may simply skip the story altogether. Perhaps I should simply say, "Karma ia a...well, you know." What do you think?
Anyhow, thanks so much again!

reply by Stacia Ann on 26-May-2015

I see what you mean--yes, in the author's notes, when the language warning has yet to appear, the "b" word might be problematic--a number of readers on the site have easily offended sensibilities:)
Your idea of
a...well, you know
works well! The reader can then supply the missing word mentally and then can hardly blame you if she is then offended:)
Thanks again for sharing this:)
Stacia

reply by the author on 26-May-2015

I've already made the changes, my friend. Thanks for the great feedback! ;)

reply by Stacia Ann on 26-May-2015

Glad to help:) Have a great week.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

As always true horror in this little story, unfortunately it also happens in real life not just in fiction. Great artwork to compliment, and - the eyes open, pleading -
really adds to the horror. Good luck in the comp Dean

valda

 Comment Written 26-May-2015

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reply by the author on 26-May-2015

Thanks, Pearl. I'm glad you decided to give this a go. I have a sneaking suspicion that I'm going to need all of the luck that I can get, my friend.
Thanks again! ~Me

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, mystery writer (either dean or Michael probably, lol) great imagery about the gravedigger's thoughts of his victim. I enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-May-2015

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reply by the author on 26-May-2015

Thank you for giving it a shot, Pam. I very happy to get your opinions on the story. Your kind comments and contest well wishes are appreciated and duly noted.
Thanks again. ~Me :}

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I can dig this one, Dean. You know what happened to my first wife? Neither does anyone else. Guess she felt boxed in. Okay, that's all. Great little story. Bill

 Comment Written 26-May-2015

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reply by the author on 26-May-2015

Heh-heh... You slay me, Bill. And perhaps your first wife as well...who can say for certain?
Thanks for having a run at this one. I realize it's quite lengthy, lol.
~Dean