Hot Dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!
An ode to a hot dog stand.130 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Congratulations for your first Win! It is a thrill to be on top of your game. I loved it, you brought the reader to America and Hollywood boulevard. Not big fans of hot-dogs here, mad on meat pies instead! It was good to read a happy-go-lucky poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Congratulations for your first Win! It is a thrill to be on top of your game. I loved it, you brought the reader to America and Hollywood boulevard. Not big fans of hot-dogs here, mad on meat pies instead! It was good to read a happy-go-lucky poem. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Yes, Aussie, you should write a poem about how you are made about meat pies. Thank you for your review and congratulations.
Comment from victortouche
Very, very good.
Loved it.
Honest, simple feelings.
Nostalgic. (naturally)
How could it be otherwise?
Wished I was there with you,
sharing the food, lemonade,
and memories.
Good job.
victortouche
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Very, very good.
Loved it.
Honest, simple feelings.
Nostalgic. (naturally)
How could it be otherwise?
Wished I was there with you,
sharing the food, lemonade,
and memories.
Good job.
victortouche
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, victortouche, for your review and compliments. The last I looked, Skooby's was still on Hollywood Boulevard.
Comment from Bill Schott
This ode, Hot dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!, reads well, and sounds great. Your insert of an open mike night was a great idea to give an example of your poem's powerful reach back to sweet memories.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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This ode, Hot dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!, reads well, and sounds great. Your insert of an open mike night was a great idea to give an example of your poem's powerful reach back to sweet memories.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Yes, Bill, my repost of my poem from two years ago caused me to salivate so much that I submitted it to Dryland Literary Art Journal this morning. I love that poem. Readers love that poem. Audiences love that poem. I want to see it in a print journal.
Thank you for your delicious, encouraging review.
Comment from Ulla
Andre, what a lovely and carefree poem. Living at the Med in Spain I can imagine, your surroundings of your simple meal. In Fact I know Southern California so very well. Flew into LA every month during twenty years. Anyway, smells, sound and surroundings easily bring back happy memories. An unusual poem, and I liked it!. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Andre, what a lovely and carefree poem. Living at the Med in Spain I can imagine, your surroundings of your simple meal. In Fact I know Southern California so very well. Flew into LA every month during twenty years. Anyway, smells, sound and surroundings easily bring back happy memories. An unusual poem, and I liked it!. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Ulla, for your enthusiastic review of my delicious poem. I'm glad it brought back memories.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Nice work, Andre. I enjoyed you reminiscing about Yeller gal while drinking lemonade. Smells and tastes often bring back those sweet memories. Congrats on the win.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Nice work, Andre. I enjoyed you reminiscing about Yeller gal while drinking lemonade. Smells and tastes often bring back those sweet memories. Congrats on the win.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Yes, Russell, smells and tastes bring back memories. Thank you for your cheerful review and for congratulating me on my win.
Comment from Possummagic
I really enjoyed this poem. I love the artwork that accompanied it. I have a 35 year old lemon tree and at everyone's beck and call have to create lemon meringue pie, lemon cheesecakes and lemon sponge cake. I make the worlds best lemonade I am told and who am I to argue. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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I really enjoyed this poem. I love the artwork that accompanied it. I have a 35 year old lemon tree and at everyone's beck and call have to create lemon meringue pie, lemon cheesecakes and lemon sponge cake. I make the worlds best lemonade I am told and who am I to argue. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Possummagic, for your glorious review and memories of lemon delicacies. I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem.
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Oh, thank you, Possummagic, for your glorious review and memories of lemon delicacies. I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from jaded831
Your poem flowed like you were conversing with a friend. You kept the reader, me, very interested. I really like the way you wrote we ate our fries, one at a time, it made me feel I was there eating french fries with you guys.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Your poem flowed like you were conversing with a friend. You kept the reader, me, very interested. I really like the way you wrote we ate our fries, one at a time, it made me feel I was there eating french fries with you guys.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Yes, jaded831, I am glad my poem made you feel like you were there eating fries. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from poetsteve15
I could see this without a picture. That is how good this is. Great art work to go along side this. I could smell the lemons and hotdogs great job. GB
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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I could see this without a picture. That is how good this is. Great art work to go along side this. I could smell the lemons and hotdogs great job. GB
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thank you, GB, for your generous, six star review. I often write my poem first so that the reader can see, smell, hear, touch, and even taste what I am experiencing. The picture accompanying my post is secondary. Thanks again.
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I go the other way. LOL But all to our own.
Comment from seaglass
Your ode painted a picture that was easy for me to imagine. Part of my childhood in southern California holds memories of lemon trees and orange trees and sunshine. Even the most simple of meals can be remembered as a feast when it is paired with happy moments.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Your ode painted a picture that was easy for me to imagine. Part of my childhood in southern California holds memories of lemon trees and orange trees and sunshine. Even the most simple of meals can be remembered as a feast when it is paired with happy moments.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Yes, seaglass, I am a native of Southern California and you are right, "Even the most simple of meals can be remembered as a feast when it is paired with happy moments." Thank you for your generous review.
Comment from catch22
Hi SC, you've penned a very cool free verse ode about a moment in time from the past. I thought you used sensory descriptions well to evoke a sense of time and place. The formatting and presentation was very clever and thoughtful as well. Excellent flow due to a judicious use of poetic sound devices. THanks for sharing this lovely and authentic memory.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Hi SC, you've penned a very cool free verse ode about a moment in time from the past. I thought you used sensory descriptions well to evoke a sense of time and place. The formatting and presentation was very clever and thoughtful as well. Excellent flow due to a judicious use of poetic sound devices. THanks for sharing this lovely and authentic memory.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Thank you, catch22, for your generous, six star review. I used poetic sound devices to invite readers to experience what I felt. Thanks again for reading my poem about this authentic moment.