Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "The Sky is Falling"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
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Comment from rmj09
Sorry I'm out of sixes, we should get at least 10.
The focus is Sally evil.
The storyline development Sally is older so she gets the upper bunk 'her space' no one may enter. Her world turned upside down when Tammy convinces her parents the upper bunk is going to fall on her. They take the bunks apart and turn it into twin beds. Sally goes into the bathroom as she couldn't sleep. Looking in the mirror with a wicked grin and as the bedroom ceiling came down her eyes glow red. Poor Tammy, no sound she made as she was crushed by the ceiling, nor could her parents save her.
The suspense starts when her parents feel Sally is evil, and is resolved when she enters the bathroom to let the ceiling fall on Tammy.
The narration shows the action Tammy knowing and the upper bunk would crush her but it was the ceiling, her parents taking the bunk bed apart.
The emotion felt anger that her parents knowing her strengths left her in a room with her little sister.
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Sorry I'm out of sixes, we should get at least 10.
The focus is Sally evil.
The storyline development Sally is older so she gets the upper bunk 'her space' no one may enter. Her world turned upside down when Tammy convinces her parents the upper bunk is going to fall on her. They take the bunks apart and turn it into twin beds. Sally goes into the bathroom as she couldn't sleep. Looking in the mirror with a wicked grin and as the bedroom ceiling came down her eyes glow red. Poor Tammy, no sound she made as she was crushed by the ceiling, nor could her parents save her.
The suspense starts when her parents feel Sally is evil, and is resolved when she enters the bathroom to let the ceiling fall on Tammy.
The narration shows the action Tammy knowing and the upper bunk would crush her but it was the ceiling, her parents taking the bunk bed apart.
The emotion felt anger that her parents knowing her strengths left her in a room with her little sister.
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend. My family always has and always will consider me evil~Debbie
Comment from ellie6
Wow! creepy . Is Sally some kind of monster? Now I must go back and find the previous chapters, this has aroused my curiosity. Well done.
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Wow! creepy . Is Sally some kind of monster? Now I must go back and find the previous chapters, this has aroused my curiosity. Well done.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from royowen
What a horrid little girl Sally was, she must have had special powers of a telekinetic nature, eyes glowing red, in the bathroom, while her dear sister died without a whimper. I'm sure Dean would love this one, well done, Debbie, you've done yourself proud, good plot, super horror story. Blessings, Roy.
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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What a horrid little girl Sally was, she must have had special powers of a telekinetic nature, eyes glowing red, in the bathroom, while her dear sister died without a whimper. I'm sure Dean would love this one, well done, Debbie, you've done yourself proud, good plot, super horror story. Blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you, my friend. My family always has and always will consider me evil~Debbie
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I don't agree with them Debbie.
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
