Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 81 "Gathering Seashells"My book of poems and stories
19 total reviews
Comment from RahulChadha
This is a very beautifully and perfectly written poetry, nicely shaped and put into words. Nice vocabulary used as well. I am not that good at writing reviews but I loved it.
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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This is a very beautifully and perfectly written poetry, nicely shaped and put into words. Nice vocabulary used as well. I am not that good at writing reviews but I loved it.
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I am glad you liked my poem. I really am a novice so appreciate reviews.
Comment from mermaids
I never thought of seashells as being poisonous. Your words teach the reader something new. spine edged shells colored pink and buff is a line that creates a clear scene of shells that attract us to touch them but may be dangerous.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I never thought of seashells as being poisonous. Your words teach the reader something new. spine edged shells colored pink and buff is a line that creates a clear scene of shells that attract us to touch them but may be dangerous.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your review. Indeed some of our sea creatures are poisonous but usually in the tropics.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Always an experience to pick up shells on the beach. We used to pick up every little shell we can find. Never come across these dangerous ones you mentioned, luckily.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Always an experience to pick up shells on the beach. We used to pick up every little shell we can find. Never come across these dangerous ones you mentioned, luckily.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind comments with your review.I appreciate the time you have taken to review my poetry.The dangerous ones are tropical.
Comment from Nosha17
I don't think we see those kind of shells on our seashores. Cockles, mussels, whelks, that is about it. Now you've scared me! Nice descriptions and good use of rhyming to convey your thoughts. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I don't think we see those kind of shells on our seashores. Cockles, mussels, whelks, that is about it. Now you've scared me! Nice descriptions and good use of rhyming to convey your thoughts. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind comments with your review.I appreciate the time you have taken to review my poetry.The Dangerous ones are tropical.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your minute poem. It is in good form. I like the message and the artwork. Thanks for sharing the info in your author notes. I did not think of this kind of danger.
I hope your near rhymes meet well with the judges.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I enjoyed your minute poem. It is in good form. I like the message and the artwork. Thanks for sharing the info in your author notes. I did not think of this kind of danger.
I hope your near rhymes meet well with the judges.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind comments with your review.I appreciate the time you have taken to review my poetry.The Dangerous ones are tropical.
Comment from Patricia Dsouza
The parameters of the contest are met! You write beautifully and I wish you all the best.
My favorite:
Spine edged shells colored pink and buff
Dwellings cast off
Subtly shed
Unlamented
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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The parameters of the contest are met! You write beautifully and I wish you all the best.
My favorite:
Spine edged shells colored pink and buff
Dwellings cast off
Subtly shed
Unlamented
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind comments with your review.I appreciate the time you have taken to review my poetry.The Dangerous ones are tropical. I had fun with this one as I collect shells from all over.
Comment from Supe
I had to look up the contest entry as this is the second read in a row for the minute entry. I enjoyed your piece and learned something in the process. I was not aware of the venomous shells. I have collected a lot over the years. The presentation is great and this complex syllable count is an accomplishment. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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I had to look up the contest entry as this is the second read in a row for the minute entry. I enjoyed your piece and learned something in the process. I was not aware of the venomous shells. I have collected a lot over the years. The presentation is great and this complex syllable count is an accomplishment. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind comments with your review.I appreciate the time you have taken to review my poetry.The Dangerous ones are tropical.
Comment from rspoet
There is some very nice imagery in your minute poem,
but you have a few problems
Syllables must be 8,4,4,4
By my count:
line four, Unpredictable, is 5
line seven, Subtly shed, is 3
You should check these as syllables sometime vary with country or locale
And the rhymes must be aabb
tides/Unpredictable; bluff/off; and still/affordable
probably won't be accepted
The picture and subject are excellent
The committee makes these decisions, so it is up to you if it should be changed
Rating based upon changes being made
Good Luck in the contest
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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There is some very nice imagery in your minute poem,
but you have a few problems
Syllables must be 8,4,4,4
By my count:
line four, Unpredictable, is 5
line seven, Subtly shed, is 3
You should check these as syllables sometime vary with country or locale
And the rhymes must be aabb
tides/Unpredictable; bluff/off; and still/affordable
probably won't be accepted
The picture and subject are excellent
The committee makes these decisions, so it is up to you if it should be changed
Rating based upon changes being made
Good Luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Thank you so very much for your comments and suggestions for correction. This is exactly what I am looking for in a review and very rarely get. I have edited my poem already due to your very welcome suggestions. I substituted another word for unpredictable which has four syllables. Thank you so much for catching that. Subtly has three syllables so I hope that is accepted and I actually looked that one up in the dictionary. This Minute contest does not require the iambic form so I believe that rhyme is optional. I hope, as that is how I interpreted it. Thank you again for being so thoughtful.
Comment from JTStone
Here I thought all these years they were just pretty prizes to give my mom and later, the ladies in my life...
But then again some of those ladies have thought me to be poisonous...
JT
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Here I thought all these years they were just pretty prizes to give my mom and later, the ladies in my life...
But then again some of those ladies have thought me to be poisonous...
JT
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2015
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Yes there are many tropical sea creatures that are poisonous. One does not gather shells in the water without foot coverings. Thanks so much for your review. It is much appreciated.