Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

I like this short but sweet poem. The Jack Frost simile is great as well as the picture. This was delightful to read. Good job

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thanks for your review and comments. This was written with Jack Frost all over the windows at the time.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

I would have to think that every writer has experienced this SOME TIME or other, yes? So I think we can all relate to this one! A great write!

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I agree...we all have been through it at one time or another.

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

Deadlines can help focus our time to get something done, but I can understand how they can be a cause for great frustration as well, when writer's block strikes.
Well observed. :)

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thanks for your review and comments. Yes it is much easier when you can let the ideas flow without having to meet a deadline.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I guess this is why they call it a deadline
Lol

Frustrations cloud and numb my brain
Like Jack Frost on a window pane.
Self pity like an impish scamp
Intensifies my writers cramp.
I love this I get it too
God bless

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thanks for your review and comments. I think every one of us has experienced it at one time or another.

Comment from Patricia Dsouza

Excellent

Frustrations cloud and numb my brain.............. Beautifully written. the words you used in the poem have numb my brain. This is a deeper poem and meet the contest need.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thank you so much for your comments in your review of my poem. This was actually written during a week long freeze in Houston, Texas and I had to look at Jack Frost for the whole week.

reply by Patricia Dsouza on 01-Oct-2015

Hahahahah seriously! I understand the brain breeze now!! :D

Comment from Serendipity!

Excellent

I like your descriptive way of elaborating on writer's block and deadlines. Jack frost: pretty, imaginative, but not creative enough to dispel the numbness that creates inertia.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

I thank you for your review of my poem. This was actually written during a week long freeze in Houston, Texas so Jack Frost was on my windows for that period of time and crept into my poem.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a nice poem for the contest
I'm not sure if the contest meant a actual object, like a shoe or basket
but you have done deadlines very well
with all the resulting anxiety and frustration
you have some very nice imagery
with the frost on the pane
Excellent picture to match the poem
Well done
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thanks for your review and comments. I am not sure if I fit the requirements either but I thought "oh well go for it". I am a novice anyway and am learning as I go. Thanks again.

Comment from MLEaton

Excellent

So you wrote poetry at college. So did I! I empathised with your feelings in this and love the flow of the writing, the rhymes and the last two lines made me laugh, too. How I remember it all! The only comment I will make is that I think the semi colon at the end of the second line interrupts the flow. I suggest a comma would be better. Good luck in the competition

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 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

lThanks for your review and comments. I took your advice and changed the semi colon to a comma and indeed it reads better. Thanks so much.

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Oh this one is brilliantly crafted my friend! The artwork brought forth an instant winter day! Well paired are the two.
God bless and best of luck!
Steve

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 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015

Thanks and I do appreciate your review and comments. I know it takes time to review.

reply by Neonewman on 01-Oct-2015

You are quite welcome~

reply by Anonymous Member on 04-Oct-2015

You are quite welcome~