Comment from Word Junkie

Excellent

Hello Poet,

Your poem tells a touching story. It's vivid and descriptive, and complements the picture beautifully. You wrapped it up nicely with the image of a father imparting the wisdom he gleaned to his young son.

Well done!

Good luck in the contest,
Lana

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Thank you so very much. I was given such a beautiful picture.

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is really good. I enjoyed the story of how the boy grew into a love of learning and eventually became an attorney. Old Jimmy was a great teacher.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Thank you , the picture they gave me was so full of life that it brought out this story in me.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Beautifully done. Good rhetoric and a good emotional ending.
Terrific imagery and potent story telling. I didn't want this one to finish.
Bravo.
Have a great day.
RGstar

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

thank you so much. I was given such a great picture.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Ahh, what a lovely interpretation of the picture. What more appropriate could it be, It's a lovely story told within the poem passing on knowledge. I liked it very much. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. I received the best picture, it just told the story.

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

A very interesting tale of an educated child who wanted to learn to understand
stories. A very exciting and suspenseful time for this boy who learned how to read better and comprehend meanings of poetry. This makes a person a better writer. liberty justice

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

thank you so much. I got a great picture for this challenge.

reply by Liberty Justice on 15-Apr-2016

Thanks! Stop by my recent portfolio, also. liberty justice

Comment from Jacqueline1616

Exceptional

I loved this! It's not often you think about things like that. Not being allowed to learn is such a horrible tragedy. I can't imagine if my kids were not allowed to learn. They're too smart and seek knowledge daily. It's unimaginable to think of them not having access to it.
Very very good story poetry! Thank you so much for sharing.
Jackie

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. I was given such a great picture and then the story just happened.

Comment from Helen Bach

Excellent

What a terrific poem. I thoroughly enjoyed each and every line and left me feeling thoughtful at the end. So well written and packed with meaning. This says so much in so few words. A talented hand penned this. It deserves more stars than I am offering but will be surprised if I haven't just read the winner. X

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

thank you so much. I got the best picture . It was amazing.

Comment from NJK62

Excellent

This is a moving and powerful narrative poem. The line breaks certainly contribute to the poem's effect. I thought this was particularly true in the lines:

"Old Jimmy" died.

Suddenly.
Unexpectedly.

Furthermore, the image of the 'sailor' with which the poem ends is an evocative and apt metaphor for the effect of education and literature.

Thanks for sharing this with us. Nigel.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. I was given such a great picture to write about.

reply by NJK62 on 15-Apr-2016

Pleasure.

Comment from tony bronk

Excellent

I so wish I had a six! I just love this story/poem! It was not long at all! It was so mellow and dramatic, and somewhat witty. Plus, it was heartfelt and educational and an insightful look in prejudice. Exceptional write! Have a happy day! Tony

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

thank you so much for your review. You brightened my day.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I wish I had a six to give.
This is a wonderful piece of free verse that hit my heart with the story you told and the words you used.
"sailor in search of knowledge"...very nice.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

thank you so much. I was given a great picture for this challenge. It was wonderful to write about.