Comment from Lovinia

Exceptional

Hello Dawn

Such heartbreak here. Your music accompaniment is so gentle, poignant in its way, yet uplifting, containing love. As a mother I can emote with the words written here, so much love and loss portrayed. It is difficult not to respond to the eternal sadness which I've shared with my best friend for many years. I will respect your wishes and send my warm hugs and smiles while sharing a few hard-earned tears.

You have captured the very essence of heartbreak, I'm sure this will earn top placement. What I love is how you've expressed pain, yet in no way ask for pity. What an honour and tribute to this beautiful babe. Superb presentation and adorable image. The six is for the quality of the poem purely, not in sympathy, though of course you have that. With love dear friend - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Oh Lovi...XXOO

Comment from lightink

Excellent

Dear Dawn, I just want to send tons of love! I want to respect your request, so no comment on the content... The writing says it all! Again, tons of love to you!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

Beautiful, heartfelt, heartbreaking. Musical accompaniment is a very good pairing to this devastating poem. My brother lost two sons three years apart. Your work struck a chord with this aunt in reading and knowing all to well the pain never leaves.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

My sincere condolences. Thank you for your very kind, considerate and generous review.

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

I know the story from a couple of years ago. This brings tears to my eyes. That's all I will say. The emotion from this is powerful and I am glad you felt you could share it. Hugs, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

Comment from aryr

Excellent

A very good presentation format. A good flow of words, ideas and emotions. It was penned very well, thank you and good luck.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a fine poem for sure. One everybody who has lost anyone they love can relate to it. Don't be so quick to negate your readers' intentions. Your work is always worthy. Sweet little girl is adorable. Marilyn

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks, my friend - so are you saying you think I should remove the request not to vote for my poem out of sympathy? I am not assuming anything, simply saying IF that should be a consideration, don't let it - I want the poem judged on its merit and nothing else.

Yes, isn't she? Again, thanks a lot - I appreciate your feedback, and I'll look for your reply. :)

reply by BeasPeas on 11-Apr-2016

Confidence!! my girl. Yes, take it out. Let your poem stand on its own merit. Readers are smart. They know what they like. :) Hugs

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Alright, but it has nothing to do with lacking confidence really - I just want to know the poem is judged on its merit only. Anyway, that's why I asked you - I respect your opinion and I'm too close to this one. I took it out - thank you, Marilyn - you're right. Readers ARE smart. Hugs back.

reply by BeasPeas on 11-Apr-2016

Great Dawn. Leave it up to them--they will know how to judge it. BTW you did mention the other day about your loss and I forgot in my reply to respond. You know, I hope, how I feel about it. Hugs--Marilyn

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

This is a great entry on the prompt, can feel the loss and heart break on this written very well. Good luck on this and have a good day

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks very much.

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

This is so heartbreaking. I have no words that will comfort and I won't comment on that as you requested. Very good entry and God Bless and hold you close.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thank you very much.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Only a mother can know how much pain it is to loose a child for whatever reason. A mother is not a real mother when her heart don't bleeds when any child got hurt.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thank you, Sandra.

Comment from chcbeck

Excellent

The poem is very emotional, this is reflected in both the style and presentation of the piece. A very beautifully written poem good luck in the contest. There are more things I would like to say but may be taken as being linked to content so I have held back in respect to your wishes.

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

I appreciate your kind consideration and your excellent feedback. Thank you!