Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi GBR,
I like that, wife's night off, lucky girl to be able to pass the moment to someone else.
Your haiku's are very clever.#
Well written and great presentation.
Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Thank you :) I feel grateful that you took the time to read and review my work. *gypsy hugs*

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Wife sees light anyway, slices geisha longways with Samurai sword. The
twenty-first century dawns in Nipponese country. I suppose this is a
proper Haiku, with a neat twist.

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Thank you :) I feel grateful that you took the time to read and review my work. *gypsy hugs*

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

A well written haiku, my friend. Maybe you can talk me through putting my poem over artwork sometime too. I have something to ask you about you NAMI chapter sometime too when I've gotten some sleep. Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Any time, Debbie. Anything I know I am happy to pass it on. Just send me a PM and I'll give you my phone number, so we can do it together, step by step. That is how Dean does it and it's the best way I have ever being taught. I also keep notes that you are welcome to have.

Thank you for the review. :)

Comment from MacMhuirich

Excellent

Another cleverly crafted haiku poem. The Japanese themes you have got going are superb. Those geisha girls can sure warm up a cold night.
Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
John

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Thank you, John, you are very kind and I always love your reviews. *gypsy hugs* God bless you.

Comment from Laurel Legion

Excellent

Your haiku is very telling in the scenario it portrays of a wife left alone by her husband who chooses to visit a geisha instead. The fact that it's so matter-of-fact highlights the coldness not just of the evening but the lack of any passion or regret, how this is yet another example of a bad marriage devoid of physical/emotional satisfaction, resulting in the next predictable step for the husband to seek it elsewhere while the lonely wife wouldn't be able have that option.

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Hello, my friend. This is a haiku. They are all brief poems. They are 17 syllables or less. I love haiku, they are harder to write than most people think. You are right about some relationships are like that. Thank you for the review :)

reply by Laurel Legion on 26-May-2016

Hello to you as well. I had always been under the impression that a haiku was always 5-7-5, not 3-5-3. I assumed at first that it was a type of variant in Japanese haiku format that I wasn't familiar with and didn't know whatever the exact term was so that's why I phrased my review the way I did. But yes, haiku can be tricky. Personally though, the limited structure makes me feel more comfortable and sure of what to write. But again, your haiku was good. I'll be sure to correct my mistake/misunderstanding in the review.

reply by the author on 26-May-2016

I get it. It's totally okay to do anything that makes you feel comfortable and 5/7/5 it's an opinion but not the only one. I'm at studying classic haiku from people like basho, the master haikuist in history.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

A long standing stigma has been placed on Japanese Geisha girls. When someone thinks of a Geisha, they think of a glorified prostitute or call girl. This is far from the truth. Geisha's are entertainers. They are trained vigorously in art, music and dancing. If you translate Geisha into English, you get artist.

Being a true Geisha is an honor to the girls, who when they become full-fledged Geisha's are then called geiko. If a girl begins her training to be a geisha before she is 21, she is called a maiko, meaning child dancer. A girl or woman can become a geisha even if she wasn't a maiko, but if she had been a maiko she would enjoy much more prestige.

Still, just spending an evening in the company of geisha girls for a man, especially a cold, dark evening as you've alluded to in your stunningly presented haiku, is to be made to feel like a king. They are very skilled in the art of pleasing men through their art, their dancing, and entertaining.

Bravo, Gypsy. This is a beautifully written and wonderfully presented haiku.

~Dean

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Hello, Darlin' You are preaching to the choir, as they say. Here is a link to a free verse poem I wrote last year. It's called ''Geisha'' and my author notes are almost exactly as your review comments.>>>>: http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=763932&userid=743686&tf=0 --- the complete Name of the poem= is Geisha and it's in a book----, A chapter in the book 2015 Gypsy Gems. I read the poem at a recital and people liked it. I repeated a line...... "Are you free?" It was cool.

You are right. They are entertainers, artists, well educated (in all kinds of skills, including sex) but a lot of them are glorified, prostitutes. The only difference is that most Geishas get to choose who they want to sleep with. Considering the alternative.... females in Japan are, or used to be, subjugated, becoming a Geisha is an honor for many families. I am sad the women are indoctrinated since they are very young. Instead of playing games with their friends, they are in a classroom learning how to please men. That sucks and it's very unfair to women.

My haiku was not a political statement or meant as disrespect to Geishas, I am sorry if it came across that way. I totally get it. They are artists and I admire them for that.

The haiku stamp it's bigger than my mini-muse little man. LOL I love him! We have to introduce your mini-muse to mine. She is very cute too. ;)

Thank you for the kind words, sweetie pie. I am very grateful for you and your review.

reply by Dean Kuch on 26-May-2016

I didn't feel your poem came across wrong at all, dear Gypsy. So, no apologies necessary.
And, as always, you are more than welcome. It is an excellent haiku.
~Dean ;)

reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Sorry if I came across too strong. LoL. I'm a passionate person and sometimes I go overboard. LoL

reply by Dean Kuch on 26-May-2016

Oh no, not at all.
I'm much the same way. ;)

reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Good, I like to discuss my opinions with intelligent open-minded adults. *hugs*

reply by Dean Kuch on 26-May-2016

Oops! Then you need to be sharing your opinions with someone else other than me, heh-heh... Just kidding, of course.
It's always a pleasure, dearest gypsy.
~Dean ;}

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

lol... wife's night off. ;)
what beautiful artwork, girl! ;) lovely...
the announcement at the top, might be a little large, but all in all
the presentation is gorgeous! Of course, the word choices in your haikus are all top rate and this is no different, I loved it~
Well done SG... love you girl. ;)
SC

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Thank you, SC. You think the words are too big? I can make them smaller. I played around with the font for a long time. :/

Thank you for the review, sweetie pie. mwah! lovie dovies
*gypsy hugs*

reply by I am Cat on 26-May-2016

Hi sweetie. ;)
I was thinking just the part with your name... it seems larger than the poetry. ;) lol But maybe it's just on my computer? Just a thought...
Hugs and love honey!

reply by the author on 26-May-2016

I love you too, LS. You are right, I will make it smaller. It's a good suggestion. Goodnight! *SG hugs*

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi, *Gypsy*

= Oh, this is priceless!
= Love the artwork and formatting as well.
= Wifey better watch out, she may be getting a lot of nights off! (*<*)

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

LOL I know! I would not go for it but you know how it is over there. Your business card is very pretty.:)Thank you, Jax, you are very kind. :)
*gypsy hugs*

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 26-May-2016

Thanks. I love playing around with my Print Shop. You just never know what I'll come up with. (*<*)

reply by the author on 26-May-2016

I know! I like that too.

Comment from danpald

Excellent

Sweet poem inviting
The passion to be flowing
Short with strong image
For the imagination striven

The perfect poem
That is your mode
Short to read
Strong to breathe

 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Thank you, Dan, you are very kind. :)

Comment from RosieCus

Excellent

Very clever haiku poem, extending the Japanese theme, with a geisha adding warmth to a cold evening by her entertaining.

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 Comment Written 26-May-2016

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reply by the author on 26-May-2016

Thank you, Rorie, you are very kind. :)