Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Texas Heat"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
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Comment from Marisela Contona
Your crime fiction chapter was good. It is very well written. I look forward to reading more by you. You clearly have a talent, and should continue it.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Your crime fiction chapter was good. It is very well written. I look forward to reading more by you. You clearly have a talent, and should continue it.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story. Much more to come so I invite you to read along as it unfolds.
Comment from Pamusart
Lilibug6 is a great photographer. Especially of people. I usually disdain people in fanart posting mundane pictures of family. Don't see it as artistic. But, she makes them artistic. I enjoyed this chapter, immensely, Brett and look forward to the next one. What would the sheriff day if another boy just flat out attacked Cody fir no reason. Should he fight back? I was in this situation. Three boys attacked me after school and tried to pull my blouse off. I was nine and they were ten. And, yes, I was a girl against three older boys. But, I won. I have a fury inside of me when needed. But, I am a total pacifist when not threatened. I came home with buttons missing and blouse torn. Even though my six year old brother was a witness for the defense, I still got in trouble for fighting. I was supposed to let them molest me and send me home naked? I think not. I always wondered why my brother did not help. But, now, I know he was too small. A ten year old boy is twice as big as a six year old. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Lilibug6 is a great photographer. Especially of people. I usually disdain people in fanart posting mundane pictures of family. Don't see it as artistic. But, she makes them artistic. I enjoyed this chapter, immensely, Brett and look forward to the next one. What would the sheriff day if another boy just flat out attacked Cody fir no reason. Should he fight back? I was in this situation. Three boys attacked me after school and tried to pull my blouse off. I was nine and they were ten. And, yes, I was a girl against three older boys. But, I won. I have a fury inside of me when needed. But, I am a total pacifist when not threatened. I came home with buttons missing and blouse torn. Even though my six year old brother was a witness for the defense, I still got in trouble for fighting. I was supposed to let them molest me and send me home naked? I think not. I always wondered why my brother did not help. But, now, I know he was too small. A ten year old boy is twice as big as a six year old. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Lilibug6's picture "This Is Evan" has provided Cody a readily recognizable face here on FanStory. Three books, and several short stories later, when members see the picture they know the story is about Cody. This has occurred more than 9,000 times. That number is staggering to me, but is the latest count of the number of times members have read about Cody. Simply amazes me! Glad you enjoy Cody's story and invite you to continue following as his story unfolds. What would the Sheriff do if Cody defended himself? That was covered in another book and the Sheriff fully agreed with Cody defending himself. What the Sheriff does not want is for Cody to start a fight, and worse than that, turn around and lie about it too.
Comment from create4christ
I always love your writing. I like how you showed love after the discipline. I love how there was no anger. Cody knew the Sheriff had disciplined him because he loved him...unlike his biodad. I also like how he kept the paddle on his dresser, as a reminder to behave. Well done.
Thanks for sharing. ..Penny
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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I always love your writing. I like how you showed love after the discipline. I love how there was no anger. Cody knew the Sheriff had disciplined him because he loved him...unlike his biodad. I also like how he kept the paddle on his dresser, as a reminder to behave. Well done.
Thanks for sharing. ..Penny
Comment Written 13-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from misscookie
You always surprise me with something new.
As always you captured my a attention from the first line to the last
And there is never a dull moment
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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You always surprise me with something new.
As always you captured my a attention from the first line to the last
And there is never a dull moment
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this misscookie!
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Have a blessed day
Cookie
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
You are redoing this or is this new. I am getting lost.
The writing is spot on with no mistakes noted.
Instead of running away as most kids would think of doing, he stood his ground and took his punishment
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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You are redoing this or is this new. I am getting lost.
The writing is spot on with no mistakes noted.
Instead of running away as most kids would think of doing, he stood his ground and took his punishment
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this little rewrite of the story. Cody is indeed a very brave boy. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Sankey
Good, sad, poignant chapter. One wonders how this will be done on the stage. hehe! I was interested that the swats got harder each time. Did you personally experience this growing up? One spag. "There is (to)be no more fighting,
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Good, sad, poignant chapter. One wonders how this will be done on the stage. hehe! I was interested that the swats got harder each time. Did you personally experience this growing up? One spag. "There is (to)be no more fighting,
Comment Written 07-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this rewrite. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MTF1955
Can't help but admire the boy. your Story continues to draw the reader in since we all love the little rascal. I can't wait for the next installment. Mary
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Can't help but admire the boy. your Story continues to draw the reader in since we all love the little rascal. I can't wait for the next installment. Mary
Comment Written 07-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Brett, I think I was 7 when my father was to apply a spanking to me and my younger brother. He was crying his fool head off and dad hadn't touch him yet. I bent over and put my face in the mattress. Got six butt cracking smacks with dad's inch thick piece of rubber. When I stood up, I was smiling and that was the last time he spanked me. He told me, I will never do this to you again. I will teach you right from wrong and if you fail to understand that, then you will fail yourself. I learned what he taught me!
I think today, since this aspect of discipline is no longer tolerable, parents today have lost their children.
Thanks for the memory of what used to be and well done,,,,,,,,Jim
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2016
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Brett, I think I was 7 when my father was to apply a spanking to me and my younger brother. He was crying his fool head off and dad hadn't touch him yet. I bent over and put my face in the mattress. Got six butt cracking smacks with dad's inch thick piece of rubber. When I stood up, I was smiling and that was the last time he spanked me. He told me, I will never do this to you again. I will teach you right from wrong and if you fail to understand that, then you will fail yourself. I learned what he taught me!
I think today, since this aspect of discipline is no longer tolerable, parents today have lost their children.
Thanks for the memory of what used to be and well done,,,,,,,,Jim
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this realistic portrayal of our little boy, Cody.
Since this a revision for the live version of this story I was more surprised by the fact the actors portraying Brock Daniels and Cody insisted I keep this scene in the story.
Who would have thought that?
Guess, at least here in Nashville, people still support this form of child disciplining.
Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That is how children should be punished. It only take one good spanking and you see the wisdom in mom and dads words clearly. I remember dad had the sole leather man's shoe size a throwaway from the shoe factory where he worked. It stung like the devil. I never felt abused because I knew I had done wrong. Spare the rod, spoil the child. That is a fact.
Well done Brett. Bet you got some flack over this. Nancy
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2016
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That is how children should be punished. It only take one good spanking and you see the wisdom in mom and dads words clearly. I remember dad had the sole leather man's shoe size a throwaway from the shoe factory where he worked. It stung like the devil. I never felt abused because I knew I had done wrong. Spare the rod, spoil the child. That is a fact.
Well done Brett. Bet you got some flack over this. Nancy
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2016
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Actually no I have not.
In this book I am trying to paint Cody as realistically as I possibly can and all respondents have agreed with my way of doing so in this chapter.
Since this is a revision for a live version of this book to be performed here in Nashville I was actually more surprised that the actors involved in the show insisted that I keep this part of the story.
Glad you enjoyed it.
Your comments and support appreciated.
