Echoes of Artistry
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Girl with a Golden Heart"NaPoWriMo 2017
32 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Good poem, but a golden heart should have a love like a diamond or ruby. Tears aren't nice for visual imagery. However, it is concrete. You'll need a trilogy for relationship and baby. Still... Well thought out and nicely written. Good author notes. Great work.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Good poem, but a golden heart should have a love like a diamond or ruby. Tears aren't nice for visual imagery. However, it is concrete. You'll need a trilogy for relationship and baby. Still... Well thought out and nicely written. Good author notes. Great work.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Sunni,
The tears aren't for a relationship. They are for the days gone by before progress and technology put such a disconnect on society. I only wish progress actually meant that society has improved in my lifetime, but sadly, I don't feel that to be the case. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your review.
Kim
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Gorgeous artwork you've chosen Kim.
Love your Nove Otto poem and your author's notes, they both show a little more of you and your love for Alaska that you share with us that I will never get to see, except through your eyes.Lovely read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Gorgeous artwork you've chosen Kim.
Love your Nove Otto poem and your author's notes, they both show a little more of you and your love for Alaska that you share with us that I will never get to see, except through your eyes.Lovely read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Valda,
I'm so happy that you've enjoyed this one. Maybe one day you'll come and visit! :) Thank you for the wonderful comments.
Kim
Comment from Alaskastory
"Girl with a Golden Heart" is a poem filled with surprising points. It's like an individual speaks. You've done a good job of putting it together, a story comes through.
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"Girl with a Golden Heart" is a poem filled with surprising points. It's like an individual speaks. You've done a good job of putting it together, a story comes through.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Marie,
I'm so happy that you've visited my portfolio today. You'll have to take a look at http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=851870 It is titled, To Read a Poem and is a chapter in this book. I wrote it after the AWS poetry reading. Thank you for the wonderful comments.
Kim
Comment from Sasha
This is the first Nove Otto poem I have read and I like the style very much. Thanks for the notes, they explain the inspiration for this poem. Lovely work with this one and I can understand why you love Alaska so much. I like the description of laid-back... something all of us should strive for. Excellent addition to your book.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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This is the first Nove Otto poem I have read and I like the style very much. Thanks for the notes, they explain the inspiration for this poem. Lovely work with this one and I can understand why you love Alaska so much. I like the description of laid-back... something all of us should strive for. Excellent addition to your book.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi!
Nove Otto is the style we are practicing in Poetry Potlatch this week. It is my first one, too. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. I really had fun with the rhyme scheme. Thank you for the splendid comments!
Kim
Comment from frogbook
A poem full of warm emotion and well suited to this picture. Thanks for the biographical info so can learn something. This poem fit very nicely in the form.
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A poem full of warm emotion and well suited to this picture. Thanks for the biographical info so can learn something. This poem fit very nicely in the form.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi frog book,
Thank you for the splendid comments.
Kim
Comment from Kerry Foley
Kim this is a magnificent write, on the beautiful surroundings you live in, the picture fits in with it perfectly. Sound very cozy and content. ~Kerry~
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Kim this is a magnificent write, on the beautiful surroundings you live in, the picture fits in with it perfectly. Sound very cozy and content. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Kerry,
Thank you for your lovely comments.
Kim
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Your welcome
Comment from Dean Kuch
So, you're very thankful and happy to be living in Alaska where there is so much magnificent beauty to be found in the surroundings, but you lament some things from your past.
Is this about the long and short of it, Kim?
Lovely...
~Dean
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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So, you're very thankful and happy to be living in Alaska where there is so much magnificent beauty to be found in the surroundings, but you lament some things from your past.
Is this about the long and short of it, Kim?
Lovely...
~Dean
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Dean,
The lament isn't for my regret but for that of today's society versus how things used to be. Progress and technology haven't necessarily made us a better society.
Thank you for the wonderful review.
Kim
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I couldn't agree more, Kim
You're welcome.
~Dean :}
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Kim,
I love your poem. You did a great job with its style. From what you have shared on FS, I believe this is perfect to describe you. With your well chosen words & the art, it makes a great statement. Yes, this is who you are.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Kim,
I love your poem. You did a great job with its style. From what you have shared on FS, I believe this is perfect to describe you. With your well chosen words & the art, it makes a great statement. Yes, this is who you are.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Jan,
I am happy that you enjoyed this poem. Your comments make me smile. Thank you.
Kim
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh I love it and you could use it as a travel phrase. A place I have always wanted to visit. I lived in Nakina, Ontario and that was as far north and cold I wanted to go, but like you, I crave the past.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Oh I love it and you could use it as a travel phrase. A place I have always wanted to visit. I lived in Nakina, Ontario and that was as far north and cold I wanted to go, but like you, I crave the past.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Barb,
I think everyone should get to see the beauty of Alaska at least once in their lifetime. Thank you for the splendid comments.
Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
This is the second of theses that I have reviewed. It seems a strange alphabet is being used for the rhyme scheme acb. The one I learnt at school goes abc, but there you go. it seems "modernart" is a great deal older than one might think. the rhyme scheme is interesting. i take it that here the poet is the picture -- an autobiographical art poem. Whatan interesting idea.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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This is the second of theses that I have reviewed. It seems a strange alphabet is being used for the rhyme scheme acb. The one I learnt at school goes abc, but there you go. it seems "modernart" is a great deal older than one might think. the rhyme scheme is interesting. i take it that here the poet is the picture -- an autobiographical art poem. Whatan interesting idea.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Pantygynt,
That is exactly what I said about the rhyme scheme. I like the structure of the rhyme in this style. I'm thinking this might be a fun Potlatch topic. An autobiographical poem in terms of your environment. I enjoyed writing it. Thanks for the great response.
Kim