Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

You've done a good job with this 9-1-1 piece. I remember being in school and bullets coming through the windows. It was horrific, but that kind of thing happened a lot here growing up.

You've captured the essence well here.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Thank you very much Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)

Comment from XGoneX

Excellent

Hello,

I can't imagine this happen to me. Those parents situation, the waiting must have bee terrible to bear.

sheer sounds of terror in the schoolyard
gun
shots

Your poem conveys a clear message, the horror, and it has a strong alliteration.



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 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
Gypsy

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What excellent words and artwork thank you for the notes it was a great help it must have been terrifying for your son and you very well done thank you for sharing****kahpot

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 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Thank you for reviewing my poem, my friend, you are very kind.
Gypsy