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Echoes of Artistry

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NaPoWriMo 2017

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Comment from Pantygynt
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Please allow me to correct you in one aspect. The form was created by Ciliverde, all I did was stick a name on it.

This must have been a ghastly experience for you being so close to the disaster. sometimes these short forms are totally inadequate to express all the innuendoesof an event and they need to be expanded. In so doing you have maintained the essential shorthand feel of the quatrain.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Pantygynt:

    I did know that about the naming thing, I just copied and pasted from a Potlatch piece, I'll go and correct. I will likely write a prose piece about the experience, I just needed to purge something at the moment. I had been in the process of working on my daily NaPo piece when Randy came knocking on the door. I've never felt so helpless in my life.

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments.

    Kim
Comment from honeytree
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The art work is
very vivid indeed
When one loses
something like this
in life is a real tragedy
in every way.
"Lost paintings and their possessions,
but not his life,
artist lives to create."
Thank goodness their
lives were saved.

Honey tree

I have no six left

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Annie,

    I appreciate the virtual six and the thoughtful comments. Thank you for being such a caring individual.

    Kim
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
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The quote is so good because it is applicable to all of life's crushing circumstances. The triad is a good form for the story you related and man's creative urges that cannot be destroyed. An uplifting read this morning. - Wendy

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Wendy,

    That is exactly how the quote struck me, too, so I had to write it. I will likely cover the entire situation in a prose piece just to get it all out. I appreciate the kind comments.

    Kim
Comment from CD Richards
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How terrible for your neighbour :(

I'm glad he's safe - and his family, and of course, you and yours.

Good job with the "modified Sapphonic triad", thanks for sharing.

Any idea what caused it?

Craig

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Craig,

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments. It started as a furnace fire. We'll talk, I'll tell you all about it. Talk soon.

    Kim
Comment from damommy
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Nice job with the modified sapphonic triad. It seems it's just the form you needed for this event.

How awful that the man lost everything. I'll say a prayer for him. The important thing is he's all right. Glad you weren't in jeopardy.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Yvonne,

    We don't live in a fire district. When he knocked on my door at 11 am it was for me to call BLM and let them know we might have a potential forest fire. It was so it wouldn't spread to my house, too. He and I did what we could to stop it, but it was too smoky to even retrieve anything. Other neighbors came with fire extinguishers.

    BLM could do nothing but watch it burn and assess the situation. They assured me that with wet ground and still a fair amount of snow that we were safe. All I felt was helpless and wished I could have done more. Thank you for the thoughtful comments.

    Kim
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written Sapphonic Triad. You did a great job with modifying to make the message clear to the reader. When we lost something we worked hard on it is a devastating feeling to so the least.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Sandra,

    Devastating is the word to describe this situation. Thank you for the thoughtful comments.

    Kim
Comment from sunnilicious
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I'm glad it's not your house. I hope your family's safe from smoke and all that other stuff. That photo coupled with the poem is completely heart-wrenching. This situations sounds completely tragic. I hope your neighbors survived and had insurance coverage.

If they had any artwork masterpieces, it's an heirloom lost. If anything is salvaged, Antiques Roadshow would be a great place to get assessments on value and restoration. Art materials can add up quickly. I'm so saddened for them. It's a headache for everyone around too. Do they know how it transpired? How are they going to live?

Great poem. Informative and well thought out. Good author notes.

May God continue to protect and bless the whole neighborhood. Peace be upon you.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Sunni,

    It was a furnace fire and everything was lost. Randy is an artist and he lost all of his paintings. I looked out the window a little bit ago, it is still smoldering. I just wish we could have done more to save anything but the smoke was too thick. We have good neighbors here, another family that has just moved into town is giving them their old house to live in for as long as they need.

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments.

    Kim
Comment from Rlegel99
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Great quote for a poem on a sad occasion. This poem has nice flow and the idea that life is more precious than things is so important. Thanks for sharing this poem.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Rlegel:

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments.

    Kim
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is an excellent modified sapphonic triad, Kim, but what a tragedy. House fires are so devastating and all the personal items gone forever. So sad.

Excellent poem though.

Gloria

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Gloria,

    Thank you for the thoughtful comments. Yes, such a tragedy. I appreciate hearing from you.

    Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Kim,

I can feel your pain for the loss your neighbor experienced today. How sad for the neighbors & you as I know you are a caring person.

You expressed your thoughts & feelings well with this style. The quote is perfect for all artists.

No amount of my words will ever make this better except to know that I pray for recovery as you allude to by his determination to build anew. You are right, though, that those things can be rebuilt, but his life was spared. This is tragic news. I feel bad for you & your neighbors.

Thank you for sharing & caring. Please know that I care. My grandfather was a fireman/fire chief many years ago. I know how hard it is for those men to deal with the tragedy, too. Jan

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 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Hi Jan,

    I've never felt more helpless in my life. I'll be writing more, I'm sure. Thank you for your loving words. I do know you care. We don't live in a fire district, so we had the forest fire BLM guys out but all they could do was watch it burn and make sure it didn't catch the trees on fire and spread. It is still burning itself out unattended, well, except for when James and I walk down to look. It is wet enough and we still have enough snow that they assured me our house wasn't in jeopardy. Thank you for your friendship. Randy even joked that the one thing he found was the marshmallows. An amazing man. I wish we had been able to do/save more. I appreciate your friendship.

    Kim
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 26-Apr-2017
    Kim,
    You did a lot. He will need your strength in the coming days when reality hits. Take care. Jan