The Good Dog
...things aren't what they seem58 total reviews
Comment from Leena
Well, it was pretty horrifying for me! I count it as a very good piece of fiction. Honestly as I read along had no idea how this was going to end and your conclusion shocked me. A perfectly good thriller! Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Well, it was pretty horrifying for me! I count it as a very good piece of fiction. Honestly as I read along had no idea how this was going to end and your conclusion shocked me. A perfectly good thriller! Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from Sugar Cube1
Oh, I love this. Your intro was the best. Especially when you put "It seems as if a dog isn't just a man`s best friend. He can love a woman, too." Aw, that's perfect. I love dogs and all sorts of pets, so this was really great for me to read.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Oh, I love this. Your intro was the best. Especially when you put "It seems as if a dog isn't just a man`s best friend. He can love a woman, too." Aw, that's perfect. I love dogs and all sorts of pets, so this was really great for me to read.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from damommy
Good heavens! This is scary!
It started out a lovely story about a faithful, loving dog. Much like your usual stories that I like so much.
I knew when he saw the creature what it must be, but I NEVER thought it would kill the lady. And the poor dog was blamed!
If this isn't a horror story, I don't know what is. Very, very good.
Out of sixes, which this deserves. So sorry. 8-)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Good heavens! This is scary!
It started out a lovely story about a faithful, loving dog. Much like your usual stories that I like so much.
I knew when he saw the creature what it must be, but I NEVER thought it would kill the lady. And the poor dog was blamed!
If this isn't a horror story, I don't know what is. Very, very good.
Out of sixes, which this deserves. So sorry. 8-)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from His Grayness
WOW! talk about "GRIP", well this one hits the mark right on! I'm a serious dog lover and this story tore me up big time! But the writing is magnificent, the story line is unique and as I said...really gripping! I wish I had the six stars this really deserves and hope this author will write again, a return to this story, with a softer ending! Many thanks indeed! HIS GRAYNESSS
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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WOW! talk about "GRIP", well this one hits the mark right on! I'm a serious dog lover and this story tore me up big time! But the writing is magnificent, the story line is unique and as I said...really gripping! I wish I had the six stars this really deserves and hope this author will write again, a return to this story, with a softer ending! Many thanks indeed! HIS GRAYNESSS
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
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You did a great job on this one Patty so keep up the good work! Vance
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My fun indeed! keep them coming! Vance
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Growling low and deep, Jimi searched for the creature. He would do everything in his power to kill it. It had dared to kill the lady, and it must pay.
His nose failed him. There was no trail to follow. Neither the scent of a man or creature could be found. In extreme sadness, he climbed onto the bed and tried to get as close to his lady as he could. He crawled under her outstretched hand and felt her touch on his fur. If only she could stroke him as she once did.
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When the sheriff entered the room, he saw the big dog attempting to mutilate his kill. Raising his service pistol, he shot twice and the dog was dead..OH! This made me tearful not scared! Wonderfully written entry though I wish you every success love Meia x
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Growling low and deep, Jimi searched for the creature. He would do everything in his power to kill it. It had dared to kill the lady, and it must pay.
His nose failed him. There was no trail to follow. Neither the scent of a man or creature could be found. In extreme sadness, he climbed onto the bed and tried to get as close to his lady as he could. He crawled under her outstretched hand and felt her touch on his fur. If only she could stroke him as she once did.
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When the sheriff entered the room, he saw the big dog attempting to mutilate his kill. Raising his service pistol, he shot twice and the dog was dead..OH! This made me tearful not scared! Wonderfully written entry though I wish you every success love Meia x
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from frogbook
A few suggestions-
"Only his toys were chewed on (;) never furniture, shoes or people. This does not seem like an independent clause or separate idea so likely a semicolon is not needed. Maybe a comma, instead?
"Completely housebroken, never leaving a mess; and he adored the lady he lived with." This would seem better broken into two sentences. Sounds clumsy this way.
The paragraph beginning, "It all changed in the middle of summer," The 3 sentences seem repetitive and a bit of overkill. I would just leave the one sentence above and omit the rest.
A very frightening and excellent story and I do think that killing the dog was a huge horror element. You said you do not write in this genre. I'm thinking you should do more!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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A few suggestions-
"Only his toys were chewed on (;) never furniture, shoes or people. This does not seem like an independent clause or separate idea so likely a semicolon is not needed. Maybe a comma, instead?
"Completely housebroken, never leaving a mess; and he adored the lady he lived with." This would seem better broken into two sentences. Sounds clumsy this way.
The paragraph beginning, "It all changed in the middle of summer," The 3 sentences seem repetitive and a bit of overkill. I would just leave the one sentence above and omit the rest.
A very frightening and excellent story and I do think that killing the dog was a huge horror element. You said you do not write in this genre. I'm thinking you should do more!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Frog; Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
I like your suggestions - I will go and 'massage' the piece when I return from vacation,
Comment from Winslow
Dear Patty,
Quite a nasty tale of Jimi the dog and his mistress. Who knew what lurked in the woods where Jimi went? The dog took the fall for the werewolf. I wish at the end that the creature and Jimi could have battled and have Jimi rip his throat out.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Dear Patty,
Quite a nasty tale of Jimi the dog and his mistress. Who knew what lurked in the woods where Jimi went? The dog took the fall for the werewolf. I wish at the end that the creature and Jimi could have battled and have Jimi rip his throat out.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from Bichon
Oh what an amazing story. I was reading with fear and empathy the whole way through. Jimi tried the best he could, poor soul, I felt sorry for him. And I feared the creature, perhaps he was a wearwolf?
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Oh what an amazing story. I was reading with fear and empathy the whole way through. Jimi tried the best he could, poor soul, I felt sorry for him. And I feared the creature, perhaps he was a wearwolf?
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from smerryman3
For not liking horror, you did a good job with this! As I read, I grew attached to Jimmy and hated to see him lose his owner. To be honest, I actually think it was an a happy ending for Jimi. Without his lady, he probably would have died of a broken heart. The werewolf still on the loose is what scares me. The only part I didn't understand was how anyone could attribute the ripped off back door to Jimi.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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For not liking horror, you did a good job with this! As I read, I grew attached to Jimmy and hated to see him lose his owner. To be honest, I actually think it was an a happy ending for Jimi. Without his lady, he probably would have died of a broken heart. The werewolf still on the loose is what scares me. The only part I didn't understand was how anyone could attribute the ripped off back door to Jimi.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Patty, A great horror story. It was gory enough to be horror however, the storyline is solid and characters totally believable. Excellent write! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi Patty, A great horror story. It was gory enough to be horror however, the storyline is solid and characters totally believable. Excellent write! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading my first attempt at horror. I ultimately liked this story, but I had a hard time pulling it out of my pen. I'm glad you enjoyed and I appreciate your time to review,
~patty~
