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Comment from frogbook
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Excellent job on this one, my friend. A really wonderful comparison in a very enjoyable poem and a great picture to enjoy also.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, FB, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Pantygynt
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The overal tenor of this tanka is great. Perfectly coherent and with a clear message. The third line relates to both parts of the piec so acrts as a pivot. i amnot entirely sure it is capable of standing alone or as a satori to the first two lines, like too many of mine i fear. These things are more difficult than they at first appear.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, P, for the great review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
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Whoa Bill. You are scaring me, I am not accustomed to this Bill. Where are the wildlife references, the loony, loopy escapades of Ned and Pons? This serious Bill Schott is a new guy, one I am not that familiar with. He seems nice enough, but I have to spend some time getting to know him. As for your submission, it is interestingly deep and pensive enough to cause me distress as I struggle to put it into perspective and absorb its message and meaning. Good job.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, nomi, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice photo, Bill.
-Syllable count is good.
-The first two lines set
the scene well.
-An effective pivot line.
-The concluding lines are also good.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Pam, for the great review. Bill
reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Jun-2018
    You are welcome, Bill.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A serene and meaningful Tanka and I wish you luck with the contest, your grandson has such beautiful big eyes! A resonating Tanka with warm sentiments Bill, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Dolly, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
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A-w-w-www...what a cute little lad Liam is, Bill.
I'll bet 'cha ten to one he's his Grandpaw's pride and joy, too.
Good tanka, your syllable count is spot on.
I hope you fare well with the judges.
~Dean :)

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Dean, for the great review. Bill
reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Jun-2018
    You're more than welcome, Bill.
    Have a nice weekend and a Happy 4th of July.
    ~Dean :)
Comment from Gloria ....
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Aw such a beautiful photo, Bill. And your tanka is a perfect match. Your little grandson looks most wise and he must quite enjoy all your prankas.

Excellent selfie and poem and I wish you all good luck in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Gloria, for the kind review. Liam isn?t reading yet, but prefers looking at animal pictures and making their sounds.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your tanka is in good form, Bill. Good job on it style. Your few words/syllables as required tell of a lifetime of living--it is implied. Your picture is beautiful--what a cutie Liam is-- & a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Jan, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Joan E.
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Your grandson Liam resembles you in the photograph. Thank you for sharing him, especially since my son is a forty-one-year-old bachelor! Yes, as your tanka describes, time flies. Best wishes in the contest with this soulful poem- Joan

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Joan, for the the great review. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Exceptional
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like child to adult;
then, after the brief darkness...
dawn begins eternity.

Wow, very deep and insightful. This looks like a winner to me. I have my fingers twisted into knots. Good luck! :)

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2018
    Thanks, Phyllis, for the kind review and good thought. Bill