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The Light's Now Effing Green

A tribute to a backseat driver

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Comment from Donka Kristeva
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Peace at last! Maybe it is black humor, I found it funny. Creative work; the last stanza, with an unexpected change in mood, gives a happy ending... with a twist.
A couple of errors: 5-th line:" he always goes the wrong..." instead of he's always.."; 2-nd stanza: " he doesn't listen to..." unless "don't listen..." is intentional.

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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
    Thank you Donka, I've corrected the first of those errors. Had to keep 'don't listen' to maintain the seven syllable a line pattern throughout the poem. Thank you for reading. Glad you found it humourous.
Comment from Van
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oooh...splendid entry for the contest. If there were a way to get the rider to simply ride. hah. I guess there is a way, follow in the footsteps of the protagonist's jailed father. ;0 Well done.

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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2018


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
    Thanks Van for reading and reviewing my little burst of stupidity. Delighted to know you enjoyed it