The sight of you
A three line poem, 5-7-745 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
my eyes take you in
quenching my body's desire
joined with your every movement
Quenching has a great sound...goes with the liquid eyes..
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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my eyes take you in
quenching my body's desire
joined with your every movement
Quenching has a great sound...goes with the liquid eyes..
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 27-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for this very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from JanPerry
I relate strongly with your earthy desires. When you take in a beautiful person by your eyes then enjoy their every movement it proves beyond a doubt you have sexual attraction for them. Or is it just your admiration?
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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I relate strongly with your earthy desires. When you take in a beautiful person by your eyes then enjoy their every movement it proves beyond a doubt you have sexual attraction for them. Or is it just your admiration?
Comment Written 27-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and a great question, which I think the answer is up to the individual****kahpot
Comment from Cory G
Great title for your poem. Love the picture you chose too. And I like how you didn't use punctuation or capitalization --effective. A sensual poem with the use of so few words. Thanks for sharing.:)
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Great title for your poem. Love the picture you chose too. And I like how you didn't use punctuation or capitalization --effective. A sensual poem with the use of so few words. Thanks for sharing.:)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Irish Rain
What a wonderful entry for this 3 line poetry contest. You've chosen such a beautiful picture to compliment it, creating a great presentation.
Blessings....
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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What a wonderful entry for this 3 line poetry contest. You've chosen such a beautiful picture to compliment it, creating a great presentation.
Blessings....
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
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You are most welcome!
Comment from victor 66
Looking at your illustration, my first thought that comes to mind, "I've got my eye on you!". From a male point of view, a lady can walk by and I find myself sometimes having to take a deep breath. I have no thought of causing harm, feeling lust, even desire. It's just so very nice that the very sight of some ladies can make your day. I don't know if this is the direction you had hoped your readers would take, but I did. Good poem and best wishes.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Looking at your illustration, my first thought that comes to mind, "I've got my eye on you!". From a male point of view, a lady can walk by and I find myself sometimes having to take a deep breath. I have no thought of causing harm, feeling lust, even desire. It's just so very nice that the very sight of some ladies can make your day. I don't know if this is the direction you had hoped your readers would take, but I did. Good poem and best wishes.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and yes the sight of the women and more directly the sight of the woman you love many thanks****kahpot
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You're welcome, and it's my pleasure to read.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a gorgeous write in its sensual verse and presentation, not surprising at all given this poet's unique writing gift and ability to say so much in so few words - fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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In my opinion, a gorgeous write in its sensual verse and presentation, not surprising at all given this poet's unique writing gift and ability to say so much in so few words - fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for this very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Boogienights
This is wonderfully written and incredibly erotic. As a woman I can tell you that I'd love to hear those words spoken about me. Great choice of image as well, it just seems to fit. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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This is wonderfully written and incredibly erotic. As a woman I can tell you that I'd love to hear those words spoken about me. Great choice of image as well, it just seems to fit. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from karenina
I like your poem...the SIZE of that eye, however is disturbing rather than erotic to this reader....wish there were a way to alter the sizes of images we select....(If there is I don't know about it!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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I like your poem...the SIZE of that eye, however is disturbing rather than erotic to this reader....wish there were a way to alter the sizes of images we select....(If there is I don't know about it!)
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and I think your right I will look for smaller eyes, many thanks****kahpot
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Hey, it's all in the "eye" of the beholder! (smile)---Karenina
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's been said quite often that the eyes are the mirrors to the soul.
You can learn a great deal about someone simply by looking at them squarely in the eyes.
Some serial killers gouge out the eyes of their victims for fear the victim's eyes will retain their image and reveal their identity.
Weird but true, nonetheless.
So, in relation to your poem it could be said that the eyes have it, lol.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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It's been said quite often that the eyes are the mirrors to the soul.
You can learn a great deal about someone simply by looking at them squarely in the eyes.
Some serial killers gouge out the eyes of their victims for fear the victim's eyes will retain their image and reveal their identity.
Weird but true, nonetheless.
So, in relation to your poem it could be said that the eyes have it, lol.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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" HOW CAN I PINCH YOUR ARTWORK" i HAVE RECEIVED GREAT REVIEWS, but many say the eye is too much or too big, ( just kidding) thank you very much****kahpot
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I didn't think the eye you used was too big, kahpot.
It looked just fine to me. :)
Comment from JDRBAR
This is great. No room for improvement as your few words have said all there is to say about how the writer feels. Good luck with this in the contest. Reads like a winner to me.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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This is great. No room for improvement as your few words have said all there is to say about how the writer feels. Good luck with this in the contest. Reads like a winner to me.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
