Let's step forward
Together- A Quatern21 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Quatern poem. I cannot find anything out of place in your poem. A great message to everyone as well. We only need to step forward and not looking back in the past.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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A very well-written Quatern poem. I cannot find anything out of place in your poem. A great message to everyone as well. We only need to step forward and not looking back in the past.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much for your encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Hitcher
Good for you for getting your feet wet and having a go friend. I still enjoy trying new forms and revisiting one I haven't tried for awhile. It is the way forward for poets who want to hone their skills, because one can learn a little something from every form : ) I think your first attempt is a admirable one, your cascading refrain worked really well and your rhymes well solid. All in all a very good first effort friend, well done!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Good for you for getting your feet wet and having a go friend. I still enjoy trying new forms and revisiting one I haven't tried for awhile. It is the way forward for poets who want to hone their skills, because one can learn a little something from every form : ) I think your first attempt is a admirable one, your cascading refrain worked really well and your rhymes well solid. All in all a very good first effort friend, well done!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your encouragement and honest review it is reviews like this that inspire people to attempt something different, I will take an admirable eight days a week****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
I applaud you, Kahpot, for doing this quatern and executing it very well. I like how you used such a flexible repeating line that worked in each stanza. And overall, you give a philosophical message about the progress of life and how each human step is recorded.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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I applaud you, Kahpot, for doing this quatern and executing it very well. I like how you used such a flexible repeating line that worked in each stanza. And overall, you give a philosophical message about the progress of life and how each human step is recorded.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much, I am very encouraged by your wonderful review, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your philosophical reflections and your rhymes, plus the cascading line. ("Let's" appears to have lost its apostrophe in the title.) Your "rotating ball" metaphor is very effective, as is your call for us to be "partners forever". Well done and keep on spreading your wings to new forms! -Joan
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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I admired your philosophical reflections and your rhymes, plus the cascading line. ("Let's" appears to have lost its apostrophe in the title.) Your "rotating ball" metaphor is very effective, as is your call for us to be "partners forever". Well done and keep on spreading your wings to new forms! -Joan
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much and yes thank you I have added the said apostrophe, many thanks****kahpot
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Thank you for your warmhearted response. I am glad my review was helpful. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
dancing in freedom partners forever
embracing a future unwilling to slide
marching in footprints created together
knowing all steps are printed worldwide
Just this verse alone was spellbinding even though the whole poem was great
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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dancing in freedom partners forever
embracing a future unwilling to slide
marching in footprints created together
knowing all steps are printed worldwide
Just this verse alone was spellbinding even though the whole poem was great
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much your review is most encouraging****kahpot
Comment from Adam Ihnken
I'm not positive that your meaning gets across to the reader. I've read it 3 times and while it is good, it seems to lack an element of clarity.
I do however like the progression of the line down each verse and I found it clever, still I do not think the message is as clear as it could be. I suggest polishing it a bit more.
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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I'm not positive that your meaning gets across to the reader. I've read it 3 times and while it is good, it seems to lack an element of clarity.
I do however like the progression of the line down each verse and I found it clever, still I do not think the message is as clear as it could be. I suggest polishing it a bit more.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much and I will take another look, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cybertron1986
I like your philosophy here. It brings about that need for purpose of our existence and questions our intentions. Many phrases imply a sense of urgency while time remains on our side. Very well presented.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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I like your philosophy here. It brings about that need for purpose of our existence and questions our intentions. Many phrases imply a sense of urgency while time remains on our side. Very well presented.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Wow! thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from country ranch writer
Our future is anyone's guess and how it all will end is also unknown to mankind. Everyone wants something for nothing. How will it all end?
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Our future is anyone's guess and how it all will end is also unknown to mankind. Everyone wants something for nothing. How will it all end?
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much and yes, unfortunately, it is a guesse****kahpot
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Comment from Pamusart
Hi kahpot
This is really different from you. I am on a cell phone so if it has a shape I can't see it. But it is very nice.
Gloria is a gem. I agree. Thank you for sharing
Here I think you need the apostrophe with caution's because it is combining caution with is "Caution is required". Right?
"cautions required while climbing this hill"
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Hi kahpot
This is really different from you. I am on a cell phone so if it has a shape I can't see it. But it is very nice.
Gloria is a gem. I agree. Thank you for sharing
Here I think you need the apostrophe with caution's because it is combining caution with is "Caution is required". Right?
"cautions required while climbing this hill"
Comment Written 05-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018
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Once again Many thanks for your very helpful and encouraging reviews****kahpot
Comment from Robbie Yates
What a brilliant poem, Kahpot! Very philosophical and reflective - it shows how we each have an independent impact, but we're all linked together in this crazy world, too. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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What a brilliant poem, Kahpot! Very philosophical and reflective - it shows how we each have an independent impact, but we're all linked together in this crazy world, too. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Thank you my Freind these new forms are challenging and you very encouraging review is most appreciated****kahpot
