Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Bill,

Very nicely done!

And a great contest entry.

Nothing out of place here to suggest that you consider reworking or improving upon.

Thank you for your author's notes. I had no idea what the poem was about until I found your notes.

Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

Jan

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thank you, Jan

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Well done. Acrostics often sound forced, but this one doesn't. Good message. I never knew that about the Jewish people. What a good idea. Without their endless burden, they can be more productive in ways that add to society as a whole. :)

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thank you, Phyllis

Comment from Dorinda Palmisano

Excellent

What a great message given in such a wonderful way. It reads as if the format just happened after you wrote this. It didn't seem forced as some of this genre can.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thank you, Dorinda

Comment from Miss Sherry

Excellent

What a fascinating write! I learned something new today. Freedom from sin - does that include chocolate addiction? Seriously - this is a great write that I really like.
Kudos and blessings!

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thank you, Sherry

reply by Miss Sherry on 07-Feb-2019

You are welcome!!